I want to preface this review by saying that this author is beyond talented. I’ve LOVED Cupid and the Toil series, both of which are paranormal. One of my fav other niches is military romance/suspense. So, of course, I had to read this one by one of my fav para authors, right?
Sadly, it didn’t work for me, and I learned that my favorite frappe shop doesn’t necessarily also have my favorite slice of cake.
Romance…
The romance is up to par. Yes, it’s insta love, but leave it to this author to bring the slow burn to insta love lol, and I love her inner explanation on insta…
Love didn’t have rules. It didn’t have to come slow or steady—or after this many dates—or that many kisses—or xyz milestones. Sometimes love just knocked you off your feet and tossed you over its broad, bad-ass shoulder.
Alpha teddy bear lovers will eat the MMC up with a spoon, but I’m a different kinda gal.
So, for a plot-centric f’r like me, everything else in the book basically put a wet blanket over a sweetish romance.
Note: Safe. No OW, OM. Unprotected sex. Been a year since he’s been with OW and unknown time for her but no one local or mentioned.
Characters
The MMC should be great - grump, alpha, quiet unless it matters. He’s made up of the right stuff, but he gets lost in a story that’s beating it’s chest to roar… but said chest is on a hamster, not a lion. In other words, the story simply isn’t as big and grand as it pretends to be, but in overexerting that effort, the characters get pushed aside as mere narrators verses characters within.
It’s a similar situation for the FMC in that she gets lost in the tedious, overtaking details of the story.
I don’t connect with either character, and I don’t feel the connection between them growing because the story ceases to be about them and kinda just revolves around them.
I can’t get a solid feel for their personalities because it’s interrupted by too many details about OTHER PEOPLE, not the MCs. As something is being told about one of the MCs, it’s always overshadowed by a cast of people, details, and scenery.
Beyond she’s a stripper on the run and he’s a war vet with baggage, there’s just no other character traits to pull you in and get you seeing them as people. Every scene focused on them is them doing something with a horse or screwing, which means there’s really no character ARC here.
Any bit of detail gets other people thrown into it as a setup for their own storylines to later appear in other books, which is a horrible error that’s oh so common in military team books.
Suspense
The plot is this: Exotic dancer on the run into the arms of a grumpy ex-military lunatic. It’s all the details that you pick out about the plot surrounding the plot summary that don’t work for me.
Spoilers >>>>>>
12 examples of why this plot is a foul ball for me…
1) Her exiled Russian mobster father taught her NOTHING about anything… right down to even speaking or sounding Russian?
2) The dead daddy involved the half sister black sheep not even blood related in said businesses, but didn’t teach the FMC shit about that lifestyle. Other overarching, overreaching details, such as a mob guy walking away from his mob family to start his own mob kingdom.
3) Sister is big and bad enough to kill the daddy in an ambush coupe and sex trade her one sister when asked, but she originally just lets the sister (blood heir) meander off.
4) Too many close proximity characters there by coincidence who quasi know one another from military life.
5) MC club inner workings muddy the storyline because it’s such a threadbare connection to the main plot. It felt plopped in the storyline just for the sake of future books.
6) An MMC with his knee blown off to the point bone shows hasn’t a) bled to death b) thinks he can singlehanded drive up on a mafia house and take everyone out whilst f’d up on morphine and a bone-deep injury c) climbs walls with said f’d knee, d) fight hand-to-hand with an MMA mafia mofo whilst dragging said knee behind him e) I digress. …. And all because he wills it to be. That’s like saying someone has both their kidneys torn out, but just wills themselves to piss. Beyond OTT.
7) He gets security intel so detailed as to identify a small gap in the compound’s security cameras, complete layout, etc within a couple of hours of a friend of a friend of a friend digging into it.
8) Like some bad episode of Days of Our Lives, the MMC actually challenges the bad guy to a fight for the girl.
9) The sister grows a semi… heart, and just let’s the FMC walk away after a big showdown ending the way she could’ve easily have made it end without involving the FMC at all. She could’ve just shot the bad guy same as she did there, which makes what did happen melodramatic.
10) The FMC using a threat that she could’ve used to a) not run b) not be taken after she ran c) save herself without the MMC ever hobbling his ass into a showdown.
11) The MMC says his eyesight is f’d up to where he can’t hit a human target from across a room on point or make out what’s on the face of money …. Yet, he can make out whether a dancer has glitter on her body or not and a lot of other shit throughout the story? Furthermore, it’s never fully explained HOW his vision became so f’d up.
12) Suspense should be a ball, each thread composes the plot, but no single strain pulls it apart. This plot is a triangle - hit the reader with danger cloaked in who, what, why…. rock the reader to sleep… wake the reader back up with a bomb of TSTL.
^^ You get the point… the points don’t line up in a logical, believable way. Mostly, that’s okay in para because the author can both make and tell the rules as she sees fit. In RL suspense, that’s just not the case. The plot points can be OTT, but they still must be grounded by reality, norms, plausibility.
Technical…
Several typos throughout, such as…
Rest {{Rett}}} went down, barely able to catch himself before his leg smacked into the floor.
Writing…
Not up to par with her other bodies of work. This felt stiff. Having read her other books, I could feel the author holding herself back to … err… ??? normalize ??? the characters? I’m not sure, but this lacked her norm writing voice. Was that edited out? Maybe… since this did go through the grinder of interlink from a big series by a different author? Not sure. Either way, from sentence structure to tone, this felt alien to what I know of this author.
Overall…
While this review is harsh and I adore this author, I’d be doing her a disservice to offer a happy face and move on. She’s a fanfyckingtabulous writer. Creative beyond. A wordsmith of snark and wit, but this one dropped a foul ball. Yet, I have every faith that she will pick that mofo up and start a new game with a new book to hit another home run elsewhere.
I’d recommend for readers not focused on suspense or a military niche. Instead, more for readers who are heavily drawn to alpha/damsel insta love that doesn’t instantly gratify but that does ride off into the sunset on horseback - literally - after an OTT show of a white knight.