Generally speaking, I’ve enjoyed Bree Wolf’s stories so when I received an ARC of this one, I assumed I would like this just as much. Early on, I realized that was not to be the case.
Although it was an interesting concept, the story was far too predictable and filled with cliches. I think what bothered me the most was all the people who looked into other people’s eyes and ‘knew’ what they were thinking or feeling. That’s just lazy—rather than describing how they looked so the reader could reach their own conclusions, the writer took the easy way and told them how to interpret things. Additionally, there were repeated instances where either Jo or Collin saw something and ‘knew’ exactly what it meant. I would argue that the author, perhaps temporarily, did not ‘know’ the meaning of ‘knew.’ It became such a frequently used word, I began to cringe every time I read it. But read it, I did. Because despite everything, I wanted to find out the end.
There were some typos (i.e. - hedged instead of hatched; cursed instead of coursed) and confusing sentences (i.e. - “Perhaps he did, after all, one did not fear for someone one did not love, did one?” could have been fixed by adding a period or semi-colon, but was still awkwardly worded) that I hope will be fixed prior to publication. I realize I just wrote a confusing sentence as well, but at least, it is grammatically correct.
Collin kept looking for Jo to show she was still the spirited and adventurous young girl he had known when they were children and equated its existence with her telling him not to put words in her mouth. Since she answered him angrily, I guess that showed she still had spirit? In general, all I saw was a shrinking violet—afraid to reach for happiness because she didn’t believe she deserved it, all the while following the path of least resistance. I could feel badly for her, but I couldn’t understand her. To be honest, my emotions were never fully engaged in the fate of these characters. I never felt what they felt, and that was probably because I was told how they felt rather than allowed to deduce it from their actions.
This review wouldn’t be complete without mentioning Grandmamma, the all-knowing, all-seeing presence in Jo and Collin’s lives. I hate to say she was a caricature, but I couldn’t help but see her as the ‘magical negro’ who arrives just in time to reveal something life-changing to the protagonist. The only difference is that she was always there, working in the background to effect the result she wanted (which, to be fair, was what was best for them). In short, she was a cliche whose only purpose was to steer Jo and Collin toward one another. Jo’s father required no character development because he was a two-dimensional character, always immersed in reading the paper. I can’t remember if he ever actually spoke. The mother was also two-dimensional, focused only on activities that would secure a husband for Jo. She spoke, but her comments were limited to match-making.
Since I’m analyzing character development, I have to be honest about Jo and Collin. Although they were the main characters, I learned little about their internal thoughts and feelings. I never experienced their sorrows or their joys. Even their love for one another was reduced to just ‘knowing’ they were meant to be together. Overall, it’s certainly not horrid, but I am disappointed.