After failing to successfully colonize the closest planets, the United States, China, and Russia all turn their attentions to the new planet LHS 1140 b . Cryogenic freezing is incomplete, the body is frozen while the mind slowly turns to mush. As a solution, the United States forces 100 million 'volunteers' to upload their minds to the Artificial Neural Kinesthetic Habitat (ANKH) servers. Servers that will recreate the consciousness to one of five different starting planets, so long as they can make their way out of the starting area. Everyone is given seven lives to get enough points to be chosen for resurrection on the new planet. The game is rigged. The rich have purchased improved starting locations, abilities, and additional lives. There is a chance, sell your starting lives for starting powers and abilities. The more starting lives traded, the greater the rewards offered. The only problem? Powers earned in this manner will no transfer upon death, unless you are rich. Who will live? Will anyone survive the trip to the new world?
Excellent premises and very engaging fast paced and entertaining, looking forward to seeing how the author will manage the next installment.
I didn't lower my rating despite some issues as this is the first book and there's hope those would be solved going forward.
That said here are a couple of things that could use improving: 1) excessive (and I mean really, please don't do that, oh you did it again, why?! excessive) stat tables even if you feel the need to keep us up to date at the end of every chapter a summery of what changed would suffice and would be even easier to glean information from.
2) sub-par editing, not sure if the book was edited frankly. While its not hard to figure out what the author wanted to say some of the grammar was baffling and there were quite a few places where it seems someone used an inferior spell checker and just let it auto-correct.
If you love and OP MC then this is the book for you. It was also extremely refreshing to read. Very creative and original in the settings and plot. Not your typical LitRPG kill 20 wolves for 20 silver storyline.
The author has an interesting world and i like the die permanently aspect, but 10 pages for a character sheet which he puts in almost every chapter artificially inflate this authors word count and seriously detracts from my immersion.
Those gorean bastards set you up to fail like that, you can't just change things willy-nilly that's a bunch of junk I like this book I read the next one thank you
Ignore the window dressing and ask yourself, what would Snake Plisken from Escape from New York do if he was dropped off in the Sword Art Online world? What if Solid Snake from Metal Gear Solid was playing an MMO?
If you're intrigued by that concept, give it a read, because the Main Character's decisions moving into an increasingly elaborate suicide mission is super entertaining and also extremely awesome.
Mr. Author Man, you have some really good things going for you in this story. Some classic litrpg ideas, some unique twists, good action scenes, etc.
However, the (lack of) editing really, really takes away from it all. It reads like a meh 2nd draft in a lot of places. I had to stop at 27% through because it kept taking me out of the story. The minor things I don’t mind (misspelled gnome once, it happens; forget a comma, don’t care). But you repeat some mistakes and you have whole paragraphs either lacking or having added italics, for instance. You also don’t do the status updates all the time, from what I saw.
Please work on this for your future books. You have a ton of talent and you can do really well in this genre. Heck, look at Limitless Lands and its original editing (not great).