So, this is gonna be a long one because of how disappointed I was with this book and if anyone can bash down my points then please do.
Let me make clear, this is my opinion, don’t be offended, this is mostly to relate to others who also didn’t quite enjoy this book. If you don’t agree with me then that’s cool, this wasn’t my favourite book but I will always read whatever Lynette puts out in the future :)
I love Lynette’s writing, and among the many things I didn’t like about this book, the writing isn’t one of them. I even have met Lynette before so I was scared to write anything to mean in-case she reads this and we meet again, so let me make this clear, I absolutely adore Lynette, but I did not enjoy this story.
PLOT
The plot in the first book was so intriguing for its mystery, but there is only so long you can withhold information from the reader before they lose interest.
The issue with the plot is that, no matter which way you look at it, no matter all the twists and turns and cliff-hangers, it was all predictable.
It was so painfully obvious that Kael was not a good guy from the moment he became creepy in his possessiveness (I’ll get into this later) and with this all being so obvious it makes the main character look incredibly stupid. When Alyssa makes comments like “we are just friends” or “he can be possessive” without thinking twice about how little she knows of Kael just makes her look plain stupid and frustrating to read. Kael stops Alyssa from doing literally anything that she wants, such as saving ward, going to help save the breakout, leave the base, literally anything. She finds out that Pandora never got the needle, and she finds out that the vision that Linda had NEVER HAPPENED. Come on girl how are you so stupid, she just makes excuses which are so dumb and make no sense making me frustrated through the whole book.
The Theodore plot was stupid, straight out. Sure, it wasn’t expected, but it was dumb. There was no reason for it. Theodore wasn’t a main character, and finding out about how he got his scars didn’t build his character in any way, it was just a way to show how amazing, courageous and incredible Alyssa was that she would risk her life for her bestest friend (this is said with sarcasm) and then for some dumb ass reason he gets his memory wiped? I know for a fact this was just added because Theo and Alyssa weren’t supposed to recognize each other. But look at this realistically, Theo was valid in saying that he didn’t want people in school to judge him for his injuries, fine, but what does strip his memory do?? Did his memory of his parents get wiped? Or just the incident? Because he is literally scarred so…, also why couldn’t he just move without having his memory wiped? Seriously, it makes no freaking sense other than to make Alyssa look like the hero for saving him. And then Alyssa wipes her memory of him? What? Because she can’t handle him not remembering her? And looking at the bigger picture, she wipes her memory of using her ability for the first time, which, I know Alyssa said didn’t matter to her, but it wasn’t any less stupid since her ability is apparently the best in the world (once again, I’ll get to this later)
When Alyssa was injected by ward with that “mysterious” liquid, it was obvious the second Alyssa couldn’t use her ability to make ward levitate that the needle was taking her abilities away, hence adding to how stupid it felt to read Alyssa when SHE COULDN’T FIGURE IT OUT HERSELF AND COULD ONLY DO SO WHEN WARD GAVE HER ALL THE INFO
The mystery of the “other” rebel group (the SCARS group) was also. So Painfully. Obvious. Of course, it’s the group Alyssa’s mum leads, literally all points lead toward it.
I know I sound like an ass saying “I kNeW FrOm tHe StARt” but I can’t care because I’m crap at deductive reasoning so if it was that obvious to me I can’t believe that no one else would see it either.
The Jerimiah crap. So melodramatic. The man literally says “vengeance will be mine”
[image error]I won’t bash his intent too much though, it was planned out well (sorta) and he had a good origin story.
ALYSSA SCOTT
Oooo boy, I’ll use a quote from the book to describe how I felt reading this character.
“me, me, me, me, me, me” yeah, that’s a real quote from the book
So, I’m going to do dot points before I spend my whole day picking her apart
- Basic self-insert character. She really does not have a personality in this book. (the first book is a different, she is way more interesting, she sounds smart and unique, but maybe that’s because she literally didn’t talk) her whole personality is, cats, chocolate, boys and food. I have no idea where the character in this first book went.
- So SO SO DUMB OMFG. there are multiple times she is described as “…too quick for your own good...” I actually laughed at that point. I described why in the plot section, she basically can’t see what’s coming until it hits her in the face, and even then, she needs it to all be explained.
- It’s all about her. “they wanted me” “for me” “what more could he want from me” oh my god girl, not everything is about you! This being a creator thing went right to her damn head
- When ward, who is hypnotised in this part, elbows Alyssa in the face she says “that’s not something I’m going to let him live down anytime soon” well that’s manipulative. Imagine not having control over your body for weeks and the person you like keeps saying “remember when you hurt me without having any control over it? Yeah you ass” I know it’s something small but it rubbed me the wrong way
- So, in the midst of the most important people of Alyssa’s life are about to die, Kael talks about the way Ward and Alyssa feel about each other. And this is what Alyssa thinks about “…I’m going to be mortified when I think of this moment. I may even ask riley to modify my memory again. Or ward’s… I just focus on fighting the blush that’s rising to my cheeks” oh come on girl. Your friends and family are in danger. The world is about to be over taken AND ALL YOU CAN THINK ABOUT IS YOUR CRUSH? Your supposed to be distracting the evil guys so you can think of a way to save everyone BUT YOU YOURSELF GET DISTRACTED FOR A STUPID ASS REASON. Talk about being self-centred
- Ward and Alyssa’s relationship is frustrating. Mainly Alyssa. She is 18 yet she can’t possibly accept she has a crush on a boy, when I read how she talks about ward and trying to reject him all I hear Is “ewww cooties” just own up to your crush, it’s not like the readers haven’t noticed and it’s painful to read. and her reasoning for their relationship being complicated is stupid. She knows the stone, cold guy who was mean to her was. Not. Him. But yet she keeps playing the narrative and it gets so tiring
- Her ability as creator is continually said to be the bestest most wonderful ability, which I disagree. Landon’s is. He can stop her from using it, making her useless, making him better than her, just saying. Also, in the end she says being a creator is too much power for one person, and I agree, so when she somehow evolves from speaker to having the ability to just “imagine” what she wants makes her insanely overpowered. The issue with giving someone an ability with no restraints is that it makes them way to overpowered, no one should have that much power without consequences (just my opinion in this point, but then again, my whole review is my opinion)
Ok so that’s my issue with Alyssa
ECHO
I can’t spell her real name so I’ll just refer to her like this.
My issue is her personality. Ok so she is an ass because she doesn’t trust people, fair enough. What doesn’t make sense is why. We find out she is a part of SCARS so why is she so why is she so possessive about the remnants group? Also, why was she so open with Camo and Alyssa in their rescue mission? She told them her life story which is incredibly dark and sad, which acts as a great way to build her character, but she just tells them everything? People who have dealt with trauma like that don’t just go around telling strangers about it.
Also, why, at Luna park, did she not recognise Riley? Or, rather, she knew that Riley wanted to get taken so why was she so angry at Alyssa and blaming her for letting the breakout free? Just a lot of questions with no answers
CAMELOT WARD
This will be short. Poor Camelot’s only personality was to be Alyssa’s side character and to grieve her brother. That’s it. So much potential in the first book lost
KAEL
I don’t remember if I’m spelling his name right but let’s go. This is probably going to be more of judging Alyssa’s stupidity than anything but whatever.
The relationship between Kael and Alyssa is weird as hell. The origin of the nickname princess is all that it takes for Alyssa to just accept that he is the good guy. And to be honest the story is just straight up creepy and is why I’m just concerned for Alyssa’s future if she accepts this type of friendship. He sees her when she was a kid in a princess costume, remembered that moment till he was 18, and Alyssa had no memory of him, and she just thinks “coollio you’re my bestie” girl no. couple that with his creepy possessiveness which Alyssa mentions multiple times and acts like it’s normal, which is not ok, YOU DO NOT KNOW THIS MAN
It adds to Kael being the bad guy but is not a good look for Alyssa, adding to her inability to see that he isn’t on her side.
So, to re-cap, I did not like this book, but I would still recommend it to people getting into YA because in terms of new readers it’s pretty good. But, I’ve been reading YA since I was 14 (now 18) so this book was boring for me. I’m sad because Lynette’s other series the “Madorian Chronicles” was fkn astonishing, it was something else. This book is just boring, but anyway, long review/rant over.