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307 pages, Paperback
First published June 26, 2014
EDIT: April 2020 - if you are looking at this book and say to yourself, "but I had my heart set on this! Now what shall I read?" May I recommend Come Rack! Come Rope! as a much better alternative.
"Is he, you know, - *fish symbol*?" (shoutout to why-bless-your-heart for that gem)
If you are able, I suggest that you take a look at my notes and highlights on this book to get a better idea of how I really feel about it and which parts in particular were so...offensive to me. (note that I did continue to make notes on the preview of the sequel at the end). Please be forewarned that I get morbid, the book gets morbid, this review is going to get morbid, and death / torture / rape will all be discussed. Probably. Also I am still debating with myself whether to tag spoilers specifically because I mean - this book is not exactly twisty. If you read dystopian literature, and if you read the summary, you can probably guess at every major plot point that happens. So, let's begin.
Now, I would argue that I am actually the prime target audience for this. I am Catholic, I'm still in the young adult age group, and I do enjoy dystopic literature. Furthermore, this was nominated for a Carnegie medal. And it came with the recommendation of Eoin Colfer, whose work I greatly enjoy. I thought - hey, this was nominated for an award! And Colfer liked it! Surely it will be worth 99 cents.
Good thing it was only 99 cents.
I couldn't put this book down. Unfortunately, that wasn't in a - "I'm so engrossed and must find out what happens next" sense, it was in a "oh no this is so bad it's impossible to look away" sense.
The bad, to begin with - obvious metaphors are obvious. Which is not to say that they have to be bad. But in this case they were bad. I do really struggle with the "show don't tell" aspect of storytelling because, after all, especially in a written medium, you're telling and that can't be helped. But I think this being first person actually made that worse because it seemed to compel the author to throw into every single one of Margo's thoughts a conscious prayer or something. Which - maybe I'm just not that holy - but it seems rather unrealistic.
The Latin. Oh my goodness the LATIN. She even had someone to help her so, I'm still left wondering why "'Margo,' he said softly in Latin" managed to slip through. Because, as anyone, who has ever taken, any, other, language, knows,
names
don't
change
and more so in Latin where the name is not originally a Latin root. Arguably could be different if her name were "Amanda" or "Claudia" but the problem is that even then - the vocative sounds the same as the original name and I just -
First The Raven Boys and now this book; it feels like I've been cursed to just have a year of books with bad Latin. This also takes us back to the "show, don't tell" because the author felt the need to TELL us he was speaking Latin. To be fair, pretty much all the other Latin in the book was aboveboard, although I suspect that's because it was copied wholesale from the Vulgate or from prayer books. Which is good. I'm glad the author went directly to the source. But this doesn't, in my opinion, give her anymore points for good graces than the Raven Boys got.
I don't feel like it's entirely fair to compare this book to The Hunger Games because well, I never did manage to consciously read the entire trilogy. So for all I know the last book could have actually been much better than this. However, this does feel like Hunger Games with a Catholic heroine slapped in. Perhaps a bit like The Giver, only with less worldbuilding and worse characters (although again, I feel I'm doing a disservice to The Giver because that was actually good!)
I'm going to again give my standard critique of: this book needed a better editor or maybe a few extra editors. I'm not sure if my other issues with it boil down more to the plot or the characters, or the lack of worldbuilding, but here goes:
~ Her introduction as Catholic with her family - like - could you throw more Catholic stuff in there just to make sure we get the point. The "fish symbol" which is never explained and also seems unwieldy and I mean, come on people there are better ways of doing this secret communication between believers thing.
~ Oh ho ho they speak LATIN at home well they must be Catholic (let's all shove aside the difficulty of being the only population that speaks Latin, in a society where being a member of that population will get you KILLED and we will ignore whether you might slip up at some point out of the house and drop a Latin phrase or curse or prayer or even if an unsuspecting neighbor who is nevertheless quite eager to rat you out for some extra meat or something happens to hear a house full of Latin when they come to knock on your door to borrow some flour)
~ furthermore, we're going to be snooty about the difference between Ecclesiastical and Classical pronunciations. Because we can tell who the government agents are because they have a *sniff sniff* faint whiff of the Classical pronunciation about them because apparently this big evil FEARSOME government is not smart enough to just.
teach
their agents
Ecclesiastical Latin.
~ I mean you're not all going around saying "veni vidi vici" to each other anyway so the chances of them offhandedly and immediately saying a phrase that you would recognize as Classically enunciated is...not slim, but arguably smaller than is practicable. I mean, they're just trying to get you to respond in Latin once, right? Because then they would know already that you're Catholic.
~ which brings me to the point of the whole Divine denial. And actually this brings me to the worldbuilding in general. And I'm going to go into a sublist here of the specific problems with that: Because - I get that suppressing religion is evil and totalitarian and I'm not saying that that, combined with killing some ~40 children a year for spare body parts isn't bad enough but really - we never see any of the really bad stuff that this supposedly terrible government is doing. Honestly they don't seem to be doing enough bad things to actually get a Resistance (separate from the religious Underground) as riled up as they seem to be. Secondly, It is never addressed how Catholics deal with all their kids. I'm assuming the majority aren't rich enough for the extra child permits, and I should hope that if they're staunch enough to stay Catholic they're not actually submitting to forced abortions and being on contraceptives all the time so....where are all the kids? Thirdly, the anger against the Resistance on Margo's part is not addressed until over halfway in, which is really frustrating for the reader. Fourthly, the Divine denial - again - I mean - why isn't that part of the Sorting? Why is it not mandatory as part of your coming of age, to make a Divine denial? And since, as Margo herself points out, this is the most foolproof way of rooting out the believers, why isn't it like, a yearly thing where all the citizens get together at your annual city party but then all have to make a Divine denial?
~ I did get very sick of Margo being unable to stop thinking of Bane for like, 5 minutes. Just. She. Couldn't. and then when she finally okay get a HOLD of yourself girl.
~ I'm not so upset about the love triangle because it was hardly a love triangle as Margo is never really in doubt but we did have to have the two boys arguing and showing off their plumage or something to each other so that was a real delight.
~ I know that my edition was somewhat re-written for language and I wonder if I wouldn't have been better off with the original full sweary version because as it was there were several occasions where narrow avoidance of cursing was obvious and painful.
~ Before I get really morbid I would like to pause and say that what frustrates me the most is how highly praised and awarded and recommended this book is because that means that we're okay with this mediocrity. You know. Just. It's got a Catholic heroine and it's about Catholics being persecuted, so the book itself can be as bad as it likes, but we're going to go promote it for all we're worth. It's the general problem with all those Christian films that we all make fun of too. Because it's got "Christian" slapped on it, a bunch of people are going to try to shove it down everyone's throats with the insistence that it's good. It's not, and we should be doing better. (/rant)
~ I just need to say that - initially, Margo is not up for conscious dismantlement. Even were she discovered to be a believer she would not then initially and immediately be killed that way. She herself says that's reserved specifically for the people who are actually accused of preaching / spreading religion. This seems to be a point of confusion in certain reviews and also the book synopsis.
~ That said, perhaps this government isn't actually going for recant as much as they claim they are because really, as the Major says near the end, if you don't know what you're in for you really don't know enough to want to save yourself that badly. I mean this is essentially the equivalent of someone sticking you in a chair, and saying "if you don't talk, I'll kill you." and you think to yourself, "I have no reason to talk, this chair is perfectly comfortable, if you just kill me I can't talk anymore, you're doing yourself a disservice and there's no reason for me to do as you ask." I mean REALLY. You're in no pain, under very little duress besides the imminent threat of death and they say "talk" you say "no" then they paralyze you and it's game over, you can't talk even if you wanted to. So, really, the government is doing this in a very bad way to get converts.
~ that was a long winded way of saying that conscious dismantlement is not all it's cracked up to be. Also none of the bigwigs in this book apparently have ever taken Interrogation 101 because they are all REALLY bad at making people talk. Suffice to say, rather than going into everything the Mitch Rapp books have to say on torture, cutting a cross into Margo's head, letting her cry and then get a hold of herself and then LEAVING is not how you get the information you want. (/rant)
So. I'm sorry. I just really hated this book. I'm not exactly sorry I read it as it is providing many examples of what NOT to do in my own works-in-progress. But still. Unfortunately I was actually looking forward to reading Someday and hoping it would make up for this but it's also by Corinna Turner so RIP to that dream. Also she hates Esperanto, if you were wondering.