** I WAS GIVEN THIS BOOK FOR MY READING PLEASURE **
Copy received through Netgalley
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Forbidden Devotion: Paranormal Hunger, 01 by Lee Colgin
(previously published as: Forbidden Bond: They Bite, Book 1)
★★☆☆☆
278 Pages
3rd person, dual character POV
Content Warning: torture scene, gun violence, kidnap
Themes: MM, Shifter, Werewolves, urban fantasy, vampires, forced proximity
When I requested this book, it was being published as Forbidden Bond in the They Bite series, however due to illness it took me a long time to get around to reading it, and it's since been republished as Forbidden Devotion in the Paranormal Hunger series.
As I'd accidentally bought the new release, thinking it was a new series by the author, I thought it would be best to review *that* version, rather than the previously published version, for the author's sake and any future readers.
Personally, while I prefer the new covers, I do like the old titles and blurbs better. I feel like the new blurb for this book gives far too much away about the plot. If you deleted the entire last section of the blurb then it would be less spoiler-y, but it still doesn't have the cohesion of the original blurb.
That being said, I will NOT be reading the original published version to do a comparison. I had no intention of comparing them, but thought it worth noting the differences between the cover/blurbs I had access to.
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PLOT
I've only read one book by the author before and loved it, so I went into this hoping for the same feeling, but I'm sorry to say that didn't happen. While the story had lots of potential, there were just too many errors that couldn't be overlooked.
In terms of the main plot concept – a vampire moving to study at a werewolf university – it's quite original. The concept of there being a truce between vampires and werewolves is good, and the idea of a vampire and werewolf falling in love, with a forced proximity concept was different. The idea of a “living” vampire is interesting, but ended up being a disappointment.
The other aspects of the plot, as well as the execution, were nothing original. It felt like an amalgamation of various other books/ideas I've read in the genre. The vampire/werewolf concept is similar to L.C. Davis' Kingdom of Night trilogy, and the whole peace talks incident strongly reminded me of the MF story The Perfect Luna by Marissa Gilbert.
I'm disappointed that this was advertised as an enemies-to-lovers story, because that wasn't really the case. To me, there was nothing between Sinclair or Mitchel that could describe them as enemies. No, Mitchel didn't take Sinclair's arrival well, but that doesn't automatically make them enemies and Sinclair never held a grudge against him. In fact, the ONLY thing marking them as enemies is their species – the fact that one is a vampire and the other a werewolf. Beyond that, the characters themselves are never enemies-to-lovers.
The first kiss between them happens at 39%, and it's almost insta-lust and insta-love between them from the first time they meet.
I wasn't fond of the fact that they shared one kiss, didn't talk about being in a relationship or even wanting one with each other, but Mitchel announces to the entire werewolf pack that they're in a relationship and he makes a mating bite without asking Sinclair or even warning him about what it means. That is way too rushed and without Sinclair's input. It didn't feel comfortable, and as the entire relationship was rushed, I could just never really believe in their relationship from the start. It had very little substance, even by the end of the book.
Sadly, I felt like the world-building was almost non-existent. It was so thin and lax that it felt like we were supposed to rely on pre-existing lore. Beyond the peace/treaty situation, there was no explanation for how vampires or werewolves lived in this world, what laws or limits they lived within. Because of that, I constantly felt like I didn't understand the choices that were made, because some would have made sense if an explanation of this world's lore would have been given at some point prior.
Unfortunately, some plot choices were far too convenient for the sake of the plot, and never made sense in terms of the flow or the characters, like the cheesy conversation between Josh and Mitchel where Mitchel said he'd rather mate a vampire than Erika and is warned to be careful what he wishes for. It was cringe-inducing, especially as events were already well underway by then. Other choices led to plot inconsistencies, such as when Mitchel is surprised when Becket says he drove Sinclair to campus, because he already knew this from Sinclair so there was no reason for this to be a surprise.
As well as the editing issues which I'll go into in a minute, there were some HUGE plot gaps that were never resolved or places where we were TOLD and not SHOWN what was happening. There were so many scenes that I wanted to see in detail because the author had made a big point of them being important or a huge factor in the plot, but when it actually came time to show them they were either ignored or glossed over with a vague explanation of what happened that we never get to see for ourselves.
Sinclair's mother being “the big guns” that he'd need to convince if he wanted to go to a werewolf university, yet we never see that conversation.
Mitchel makes a big deal of going to the “alpha gathering” but we're never actually told what that means or what it involves. We don't get to see any of the important aspects of that gathering, only one dance that doesn't amount to much.
Wee're *told* that the professors and students are unwelcoming to Sinclair, but we're never shown that. It's a pivotal moment for Sinclair's time on campus, but we never get to see it. I wanted to see him meeting his professors and his students, and how his first class went.
Mitchel and Sinclair make speeches to the peace rally, which are SUPER important, but we get about two lines of Mitchel's speech and nothing more. We never get to see anything about what they say, even as they're prepping the speech, so I can't understand why it wasn't shown. I wanted to see the speech, see the impact, the way people responded. But it felt pointless to put so much emphasis on a plot point and then just ignore it.
I had a problem with the “living” vampire concept. This could have been any human/werewolf story because of that concept, which left me disappointed. Sinclair is so completely “not” a vampire that his birth-nature has very little to do with the plot and gives him very little advantage over a human. The only part of “vampire” nature that actually applies to Sinclair is the blood-drinking, which forces a bond between Sinclair and Mitchel.
For me, the scene where Sinclair needs to drink Mitchel's blood is pointless and unnecessary, due to the way the plot was written. I honestly don't see WHY Sinclair needed to drink from Mitchel, because we're told that Sinclair knew he would get weak from the sun. If that was the case, why didn't Sinclair go to meet Mitchel, prepared for the worst. He's supposed to be the smartest vampire in existence, so I would expect him to be smart enough to prepare for all eventualities, meaning he would take time to rest or take blood with him, just in case. That's the kind of character he was written as, but he never made those logical choices. And the argument can't be made that he didn't have access to blood, because he had literally just received a care package from his friend Hazel which contained packages of synthetic blood. If that scene hadn't come first, I might have believed the need and urgency for Sinclair to feed from Mitchel, but it didn't. And it wasn't a life or death situation either, just that he was weak and had broken a few bones that would eventually heal, so the urgency wasn't believeable.
Which also leads me to the point that the world-building is so thin that we're never told whether synthetic blood acts the same as fresh blood, which would have been a distinction that would have made all the difference to the feeding scene.
Instead, everything felt too convenient. Just like the scene where Sinclair arrives at Mitchel's house in the middle of the night to find Mitchel wasn't there. He'd been to Mitchel's house before, but instead of going inside, he lies outside and falls asleep. Fine. I get that it might make sense – although, nothing in this story says that a vampire can't enter a property without permission, so I don't see why he didn't wait inside. But when Mitchel returns home, he decides NOT to take Sinclair inside where it's warm, but to lay a blanket over him, shift and lie outside with him. Why? They are literally right outside his house. Why not go inside? Oh, because it's convenient for the plot to make Mitchel shift, while makes Sinclair feel special for seeing the shift and again forces them into proximity. Because, of course, if Mitchel had taken Sinclair inside to lie on the sofa, or he'd found Sinclair there, then that whole scene wouldn't have happened. I'd rather have had it happen organically, but I feel that way about a lot of scenes in this book.
The aftermath of the biggest event in the book was rushed, and I'm really disappointed that we never got to see Ramsey and Sinclair being properly introduced, considering Ramsey put up such resistance towards their relationship. It was such a huge plot point that I'm not sure why it was glossed over.
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ISSUES
For me, the flow of the story suffered from the editing choices and mistakes. The writing felt choppy and inconsistent, and there are NO time jump markers until the Epilogue. You get about halfway through the second page of a chapter before you find out it's been days or weeks since the previous chapter.
There are multiple editing issues, and since this isn't an ARC or pre-final edits version, I have to take them into account in my review. There are some obvious things, and some mis-spellings that make you pause and pull you out of the story, e.g. “whim. he reached”, “The alpha wolf I road here with”. Then there are some grammar issues where I can't tell whether it's a word choice problem or an editing issue, but there were a lot, e.g. “None of them three was a good enough scent tracker”
On top of that, there were a lot of areas were it took three or four sentences to say what should have taken just one sentence to say. There were also incomplete sentences that really didn't help with the flow of the story e.g. “One last deep breath, a polite knock, and a gulp as he waited.”
Although it's not an editing issues, as such, it's a definite editing choice that didn't work well for me – the use of italicised thoughts. They were more prominent in the first third of the book and none of them felt particularly necessary, as they were either preceded or followed by something in the main text that make the thought clear or obvious, e.g. when Mitchel is choosing his tie, we get an “Ugh. I hate this.” only for the entire following paragraph and preceding sentence to make that obvious.
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Overall, I feel like the massive plot gaps and rushing don't leave any room for me to believe in the romance. Everything that could make this plot good, strong and original is skimmed over and wasted on a story that's 90% romance without any substance. The story loses all strength and heart because of these missing details and the lack of world-building. It's frustrating, because there was some good potential and the characters could have been brilliant if they'd been more fleshed out, but due to the rushed nature of the entire book – from rushing towards the romance, brushing past important plot points and desperate to reach the climax – it left no room to feel comfortable or settled within the story and really feel immersed.