Thanks to Booktasters and the author Robert Holding for sending me a free copy in exchange for an honest review.
Well, this was a one-star book for me, not in the sense that I hated it and abhorred it completely, but rather, that in my subjective view, it was just not good. With some books, I might hate but at least it left an impression on me, this book was just bad. There was a severe lack of actual character work, the plot was boring and all over the place, and the writing was simply bad.
I’ll begin with the writing. Right from the get-go, there was an abundance of grammatical errors and it was clear that this book could have really done with a few more rounds of editing. I’m aware that this is an independently published book, so I understand that the editing may not be up to par. That being said, I have read other indie published books that were much better edited overall.
Alongside from the easily spotted spelling and grammatical mistakes, there were lots of sentences that just did not make sense. See, I generally don’t get care too much about an author’s prose at all, as long as it tells the story, and it flows well. As an example, many say that Brandon Sanderson’s prose is somewhat simple and I totally agree, but the prose is able to his stories well. There are also author’s that have more flowery writing like Rothfuss, whose books I’ve enjoyed. The prose is book though was just not very good. Sentences were clunky and made little sense, and it was just difficult to read as a whole. Additionally, the way it was written seemed so disorganised as a whole and there were some lines that just felt so out of context while being incomprehensible at the same time. It didn’t flow and coupled with the constant grammatical problems, I just was not able to be sucked into the author’s writing style at all. The writing to me felt quite juvenile compared to other books I’ve read, and the author never shows anything, he blatantly tells us some things.
There’s a lot of dialogue in this, most of which just felt off when I read it. Constantly I was thinking at how people don’t speak like this and it was so unnecessarily forced. So much of this book is dialogue as well and everything was so convoluted, and it didn’t work for me at all. There were some many scenes that objectively for me were just so poorly executed and written that I was spending time picking apart sentences instead of being invested in the narrative.
This book in regard to the plot, tries to fit in a lot, while also ensuring that nothing meaningful really happens. Nothing was exciting and nothing was written to be exciting. There was little to no tension even in parts where it was meant to be climatic and certain things were just straight up brushed over. There was an incredible overuse of ellipses to the point where... the entire book... read like this... at times. I couldn’t see the point of it apart from bothering me. It also didn’t help in building tension either and it did not help with the prose or... writing style. Look, I couldn’t tell if the author was... going for a climactic moment here... because there wasn’t one and the book... just ended in the most predictable way possible.
I hate to say it, but the character work in this was atrocious. I couldn’t tell you anything about any of these characters. All they do is serve the plot which was hard to follow anyway and was all over the place. There was simply no personality and the author somehow managed to fit in a romance where the two characters had zero chemistry between the two. When they are separated, which is the entire second half of the book, the main character spends about a grand total of a few sentences thinking about the guy which was so unnatural and came out of nowhere. There is a collection of side characters, but none of them were memorable or had any special defining traits to any of them. Again, so much of what we know about these characters comes from dialogue and the author doesn’t actual show us anything. We don’t what they are feeling, we don’t know what they look like, we don’t see their personality traits on display.
And now, let’s talk about the worldbuilding and lore of this world, because, well, there was none. Things are mentioned, and glossed over briefly, but nothing is properly explained and because of that, nothing makes sense. As the reader, I had no emotional investment in anything that was going on, because I didn’t care. For this sort of sci-fi novel with time travel and AI, we don’t learn anything about how things came about or why things are or get a view of the broader scope of things at all. There’s mention of things, and it’s meant to sound cool and all, but none of it is explored at all.
This is quite a short book, at just two hundred pages and I get that the author was trying to accomplish a lot within its pages, but it was so badly executed in my opinion. I could part sentences apart and all, but I’m not going to that, but well, this book wasn’t for me at all. 1.2/10