Poorly Written! 30% unessecary background before characters even meet
Boring! Way too much tedious filler and scenes that had nothing to di wurg the story. Like the huge scene where the hero is a solider helping save human trafficked victims. But then we get the heroine's story where she meets several biker members all 9f whom aren't the hero, before they actually, finally met at 30%. That's way too much unnecessary background.
The writing style was basic, just a lot of lists of actions, "I did this, I did that, then I did this". Here's an example taken from the book, "I stride across the room, I walk out of my bedroom door, I walk into my living room and head for the kitchen, dragging a mug from the cabinet, I power on the coffee maker, pop a coffee pod into the machine and push the button. While I wait I fill a glass of water..."
I don't want to waste my time having to read a list of daily task the character does. Especially when the important things aren't even mentioned. Including no character depth or detail to the romance. He calls her his woman after seeing her fir a minute, literally a minute after seeing her. I was also ready to throw my kindle away at all the 'brother this' and 'brother that' and 'brother, brother, brother', grrr! I get it, they're mc brothers! There's no need to hit us over the head with the word every second.
There are so many plot holes, inconsistencies and mistakes. Like in chapter 14, Luna's mother was twenty when she got pregnant yet she died in child birth having Luna when she was twenty six?! Yeah that math doesn't work, it would mean she was pregnant with Luna for six years?! Hate when authors can't get their own basic facts right over just pages.
The story itself was too contrived and too much of the same thing happening over and over. She was attacked by her biker boyfriend and hunted by his biker MC, she had to be moved from the hospital to a safe house, then she's attacked there, so moved to another safe house with a biker mc protecting her, then she is attacked there, again, and has to be moved on yet again to a different safe house, with a different biker MC protecting her. Again. Where she finally, finally, meets the hero. Just seriously lacking, boring and cliche. A tedious repeat of a story that's been told hundreds of times already. I dint mind cliche, but it needs to be better written.