There was a lot going on here; I really don't even know where to start. Tons of whackadoodle drama, which was entertaining, if a little -- okay WAY too much to believe. Some sweet moments between Chase and Mackenzie, even though he didn't deserve her forgiveness. The ending had a really unexpected twist, almost like we suddenly switched genres. It got weird, y'all. Then it topped itself and went fully insane. The last 1/4 was completely nuts, but fun.
Again, there are the same problems with filler slice-of-life scenes. I actually like that in most books, when it makes you feel more in tune with a character and their life. But these books have the kind of boring everyday conversations that could be shortened or cut out. A section dedicated to grabbing fast food from the drive-thru and taking dinner home, for example.
Also, the author needs an editor. I wrote down a few examples of things that shouldn't have made it to the final draft, not to punch down on her writing, but to emphasize that fresh eyes editing your hard work makes a big difference. It deserves polishing. This is a tiny sampling:
"Do me a huge father."
"Never call or speak me again."
"We could rent a move or something."
"I don't know who wore the mast (mask)."
"...heard the bathroom door swing open up."
"My tabs (tags) are expired." (BTW, super lame excuse, Bruce. You really suck. 😠)
Multiple misuses of your/you're and the like
I hope the author has found a good proofreader since this was written. Her storytelling is outrageously dramatic in a fun way, but these things can rip you right out of the story.
How hilarious is that cover though? The first book cover matched the Kylie Jenner comparison, but this dude looks like he's 35, not 18. 🤣