I don't even know where to start with this book. I'm going to attempt to form coherent words and sentences, but if I don't, know that it's the book's fault for scrambling my one brain cell.
When I saw that this book was up for request on Netgalley, I was quite excited. I'd seen the book doing rounds on the internet, I was on a bit of a desi literature kick, and the premise sounded genuinely intriguing. The thing that sold me on it was the fact that the setting was a country called Kasmira, which sounds very similar to Kashmir and I thought "HEY! I've never read a fantasy book that's set in a Kashmir-inspired place before!!" And that made me very excited. Oh, boy, was I misguided in my excitement!
Now, this book doesn't have the worst premise. It's something that you see a lot in fantasy, and it's something that could be worked with to make a great book. There's this girl who's been orphaned. She's got secret magic, and a best friend. Her father left her a secret magic book she could use, she's got an entire kingdom hunting for her as she comes into her powers...I mean, you've seen this stuff before. And you've loved this stuff before. And you'll probably love it again. Just...not here. Because, see, the concept doesn't make the book. The execution does. And the execution in this book was…..abysmal!
The pacing was all over the place, the character dynamics were not worked at well - every change came out in a moment, like there was a switch flipping inside these fake people's heads. The writing itself started out well in the prologue and the first chapter, but it was downhill from there. There were so many infodumps, and I don't usually mind them when they're part of the story, but there WAS NO STORY! This book is riddled with plot holes and contrivances and it's just...not a good experience!
Before I completely rip into it, there are a few things that are…bearable about this book? I guess? For one, it tries to be wholesome, and halfway succeeds. I guess? The writing isn't bad, just very rushed, but like I said, it did start out nicely enough. There's no romance? So that's good? Kind of? And...ugh…there's this 15-20% of the book post the halfway mark where if you shut down your brain, you'll probably not hate it. And...that's about it for me. I know I've rated it two stars instead of one, but that's just because I have respect for a finished book that doesn't anger me to the point where I'm pulling my hair out. So that's not really an indication of anything for you xD
Now that that's out of the way…let's talk about THIS BOOK!
My first and biggest issue with this book is the REPRESENTATION. Yes, you heard it right. The REPRESENTATION. I'm aware that this is an OwnVoices book, but I am also an OwnVoices reviewer and I have to tell you, this is by far some of the worst, haphazardly thrown together desi representation that I've EVER seen!? There was definitely no research that went into the writing of this book. The author borrows from cultures from all over the sub-continent, but doesn't put them together in any meaningful way. They're just all mashed together, and it's supposed to be…..what, exactly? All I saw was a mess.
The book alludes to "ancient Kasmiri" being a language and has multiple characters mention it and talk about it, but it just sounds like words of sanskrit and Latin thrown together to me. It's kind of sad. The contemporary language that the characters use, however, is also not desi. It's just English. The Zakirs have a "Z" on their turbans? BTW THEY HAVE TURBANS. When Reya is teaching Nina how to read, she starts with the alphabet and IT'S ABCD??? LIKE NO MA'AM PLS STOP???
The rulers of this Kasmira kingdom are called Zakirs, which is clearly a name that is inspired by Persian/Muslim culture. But the prince is called Devendra??? Which is VERY MUCH a Sanskrit name. Why?? What does that even mean?? How does that make any sense??? Are you trying to imply that your culture in this fantasy novel is secular? If yes, then why is this secularity not in every other aspect? Why is it that only the- to use my friend's words - discount Zuko who gets the Hindu-esque name??? IT MAKES NO DAMN SENSE!!!
And speaking of this whole thing, the mages and the Yogis and all are clearly inspired by Hindu mythology. They are scholars and are respected by the whole country pre-Zakir invasion. After the Zakirs seize the throne, they're all exiled and/or killed, leaving very few of their families in any decent social standing in the country. If this Muslim regime shoving Hindu people out of "Kasmira" sounds very familiar to you, then you are not alone. I was APPALLED at the similarities between this and the Kashmiri Pandit exodus of 1989! And I was even more horror struck by the fact that THIS BOOK was written NOW, IN THE YEAR 2020, when the tensions between the Hindu and Muslim communities all over the country are at an all time high because of a facist regime. WHEN THE GOVERNMENT HAS USED THE VERY EXODUS AS A JUSTIFICATION FOR THE ANNEXATION OF KASHMIR!!!!! How out of touch from reality do you have to be to put something like this in your book???? I get that the author is a diaspora author, and she's very young, but this is NOT AN ANCIENT, OBSCURE THING!!! This is a very important, contemporary issue that's being talked about EVERY DAY in India and if you had even done an OUNCE of research, you'd have known it right away!!!
Just to be clear, I don't think the exodus was something that was excusable. It wasn't. I don't understand the political context well enough, and I am still educating myself, but throwing someone out of their home because their beliefs are different from yours is just not acceptable. But the same can be said for what the state has been doing to Kashmir recently. And while I understand that all stories need to be told and heard, there is also the contemporary context that you must keep in mind. At a time when the state itself is villanizing a religious community, and touting another one as the superior one, you writing a book elevating the status of the oppressor and villanizing the oppressed just DOESN'T SIT RIGHT WITH ME! And that's why I'm angry.
Just this whole implication and veiled Hindutva nonsense (intentional or not, that's how I saw it) made me so angry that I didn't even register the technical problems with the novel until someone pointed them out for me. There are constant changes in tenses and voice throughout the novel. There are even places where the perspective feels off - it's supposed to be first person perspective but I think third person slipped in here and there. The words "naan bread" were used. These are definitely small things, if thought of as isolated incidents, but they are mistakes that appear all over the book and make the reading experience that much worse.
To add to this, the Bookweaver's daughter being an instant target has NO EXPLANATION whatsoever - at least not until the very end. And why does everyone think "she is their only hope, their beacon of light, etc.,"??? How do people conveniently either know or not know about her father and her family?? How does this idiot protagonist LITERALLY FORGET what her uncle looks like??? Why do random hunters who have shown no indication of kindness and have to be incredibly wary and careful to escape the king's forces allow two random girls into their camp FOR NO REASON??? What even is the magic system here?? Even if all these things aren't 100% impossible, there is a way in which you need to write them to sell the reader on them. But that didn't happen here. Again, not the worst of premises, but really terrible execution.
To top it all off, this book baits the shit out of you. Nina and Reya's relationship is platonic, but it doesn't read that way. It definitely carries a lot of sapphic subtext, but Reya just shows up at the end and is like "she's LIKE MY SISTER" *eyeroll of the century*. Reya also "develops" (nothing develops in this novel tho lmao) this intense friendship with a character that's introduced at like the 60% mark called Naveen - who is also conveniently a mage- and there is SO MUCH SUBTEXT there too. Nothing happens anywhere and it's fine but what is even going on??? YOU DON'T GET IT, I DON'T GET IT, NO ONE GETS IT. It's like the opposite of Oprah in here.
Overall, I think an attempt was made, but it failed spectacularly. This book needed a lot more editing and a BUNCH of sensitivity readers from the Indian subcontinent. The plot itself wasn't unsalvageable, but it needed big edits. It was too convenient and contrived and a lot of elements came out of nowhere and went nowhere and I just didn't understand what was even going on! All that, coupled with not-so-good writing and horrible representation just made this book a very very sour reading experience for me. I cannot, in good conscience, recommend this to anyone. I know it's still an ARC though, so I hope the publishers take criticism well and try and push back the release date so some more edits can be made.
The author is young and a woman of colour, and I know that the industry is not very forgiving of mistakes when you're someone like that. I truly believe that if she educated herself and redid this story, she might have something important to say to the world. And I really hope that is what happens. I would hate to see another WOC's voice silenced for mistakes that white authors don't even get a slap on the wrist for.