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First published June 16, 2020
They started down the shallow stairs to the ballroom floor, with Anthea’s gold gauze overdress floating around her raspberry pink silk slip.Where do I start? "They" started walking, with a switch to "Anthea", singular, in the same sentence! The parenthetical comment "(mostly)" - if it's important, say it; otherwise cut the parentheses from your final draft! Why order the white dress only to decide to throw it overboard before it's ever worn? Where were your friends beforehand?!
During their journey from Travertine to Kronenhof, Lady Cassandra had gone through all their things and threatened to throw the bulk of them overboard. Jilly and Anthea had prevented that (mostly), but the compromise was to allow Lady Cassandra and her maid to alter their gowns, and to fit them out with some she had brought with her.
Anthea was quite pleased with her new wardrobe. She had intended on wearing her white silk gown with the red roses to this first court function, but when Jilly and Lady Cassandra pointed out that it made her look a great deal like her own mother, Anthea had thrown it overboard herself.
"The very idea that you could just waltz right in and steal a herd of horses and a hostage princess? Armed with what? Your wits, your cousin, a pair of handsome boys, and an owl?"
"More or less."