2.5. I agreed to read this book before publication and provide an honest review. This review contains some spoilers for events in the opening chapter.
Catherine Downen's debut novel The Markings is an exciting dystopian adventure story. The book follows Adaline, a teenage girl who is one of "the gifted", a group of people with supernatural powers. Specifically, she is a force lifter, someone with the ability to manipulate the world through sight. Adaline must escape an oppressive regime where anyone discovered to be giften is forced into slavery for the tyrannical King Renon.
The Markings has potential, but it's not quite there yet. A fine, character-driven story and an engaging fantasy world are let down by a series of technical shortcomings. The novel's structure is flawed, with the opening its weakest part. The story begins with Adaline in a prison cell with her family. Within a page, Adaline has discovered she is a force lifter and her mother is being dragged away for arbitrary execution. Perhaps Downen's intention was to begin her story at a sprint. That's fine in its way, but the early pacing is so extreme as to be jarring and would have been better spread over a few pages.
The prose is often flabby, riddled with adverbs and excess adjectives. Characters "start" to do things instead of just doing them eg; "my hands start shaking and my eyes start watering with tears".
Alliteration and poorly constructed dialogue are also prevalent. Characters often "shoot" instead of say and voices are too often credited with speaking by themselves, eg; "my panicked voice says".
Still, this is largely a well-written novel. Danger, intrigue and suspense are built steadily throughout. We understand the weight of actions, the emotional trauma the characters face through their decisions and the ultimate horror of the world they are living in.
Relevant information and backstory is fed organically into the story through dialogue, flashbacks and internal monologues. The rather large cast of characters build engaging relationships and create believable motivations.
Perhaps best of all, Downen is a gifted wordsmith. Particularly towards the end of the book, she weaves in beautiful phrasing and poetic language. Her descriptions of nature, forests and oceans are well-crafted and I particularly like this passage in the final chapter.
"“When I think of freedom I picture the fields of flowers behind my house. I see an endless blue ocean. There will be music and dancing, and everyone will be smiling.”
Ultimately, The Markings is worth reading for fans of the YA genre. Perhaps the weaknesses in prose and structure won't grate so much at readers only concerned with an exciting story and strong plot. But Downen's work will shine all the better with a little polish. I look forward to reading her future work.