I liked the premise of the story, which was all around near-death people being stuck between the real world and the afterlife, and the story seemed original, imaginative and full of mystery and intrigue. I was drawn in at the start when we were following Bayfield, and the near-fatal blow during the boxing match that led to him being put into a coma. We then follow from Bayfield’s out of body perspective, which was interesting.
Unfortunately, as soon as we left Bayfield’s point of view, things started to unravel for me. In Chapter 4 we enter the perspective of Arielle, and I started to lose interest. There is a hint of romance between these two, which seemed a bit forced and unnecessary before the plot accelerates. We then bounce around between the point of view of many other characters, and it gets a bit confusing as I lost track of who I’m supposed to be most interested in. At times, we jump between the thoughts of different characters within the same chapter.
In addition to the point of view issues, I think the writing could have been improved. Firstly, there were mistakes and grammatical errors. Secondly, I found the dialogue unconvincing. Maybe because I’m not from the USA, but I found expressions like “I’ll give you the 411 as we walk” unnecessary and irritating, but more fundamentally, I never fully believed that the reactions of Bayfield and Arielle represented those of people who had just left their bodies for the first time (maybe because of the early love interest). Some of the writing was repetitive. I lost count of the number of times someone pursed their lips or references to Drara’s yellow orbs.
Overall, whilst I failed to dislike the book, I think it needed further work prior to release. Without the point of view issues and the basic errors, I would probably go 4 stars, but with them, I can’t give it more than 2.