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Dark Detained
This is the first novel by sci-fi and horror enthusiast Dee Patrick.
It has been over thirty years since Louis Castellano and his group of friends encountered the dark forces detained in the small row-home in South Philadelphia. What was once just a rundown, empty property that the children on the street used to pretend was a haunted house, is now discovered to house a frightening and potent presence. Beset by horrible nightmares and inexplicable visions, Louis is driven to discover the truth about who or what is tormenting him. A murder in the house many years in the past had set events in progress that will force Louis and his friends to assemble and face an unbeatable force in a final battle that may have worldwide implications.
It has been over thirty years since Louis Castellano and his group of friends encountered the dark forces detained in the small row-home in South Philadelphia. What was once just a rundown, empty property that the children on the street used to pretend was a haunted house, is now discovered to house a frightening and potent presence. Beset by horrible nightmares and inexplicable visions, Louis is driven to discover the truth about who or what is tormenting him. A murder in the house many years in the past had set events in progress that will force Louis and his friends to assemble and face an unbeatable force in a final battle that may have worldwide implications.
346 pages, Kindle Edition
Published September 13, 2019
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About the author
Dee Patrick
1 bookI was born and raised in South Philadelphia and moved to Florida to be closer to our daughter. Ever since I was a child, my love for horror and sci-fi was apparent. They're my favorite genres, but the sensation of being scared at a movie is no longer something I can enjoy. I've been so desensitized to it and watch so much of it, nothing really scares me any more. Also, I've been through 2 heart attacks, cancer, 2 motorcycle accidents, triple bypass surgery and an infection that put me in the hospital. All these experiences have made me very hard to scare. I am now hoping, at this stage in my life, to write as more than a hobby. I'd really love to make my living this way. I live in Florida with my wife, our dog Jax and our cat Bailey.
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October 3, 2020
Hmmmmm I didn’t finish this book past chapter 6. My advice for the author is to rethink the first person POV and try third person first if they are a new writer (which, I assume they are). First-person POV is much more difficult to write without seeming tacky. Third-person may also help the horror factor and suspense because then the reader will know more than the main character.
Other advice would be to avoid information dumping in the beginning chapters. A great example of an author who gives relevant background information in an interesting way is Laura Hillenbrand, especially in the book Unbroken. Dark Detained’s context felt more like a rushed essay than an interesting background.
Some easily fixed mistakes could be pointed out by having more readers revise this book before it was published. Even just using a free program like grammar.ly may have helped.
My final pointer about the portion I read is that this novel doesn’t seem very engaging or in tune with a younger audience. The opening points about technology were particularly disheartening, and by showing this bias the author is likely to turn modern readers off of his book.
I wish the author the best! No matter what criticism they receive, they wrote a book, and that’s awesome!!!
Other advice would be to avoid information dumping in the beginning chapters. A great example of an author who gives relevant background information in an interesting way is Laura Hillenbrand, especially in the book Unbroken. Dark Detained’s context felt more like a rushed essay than an interesting background.
Some easily fixed mistakes could be pointed out by having more readers revise this book before it was published. Even just using a free program like grammar.ly may have helped.
My final pointer about the portion I read is that this novel doesn’t seem very engaging or in tune with a younger audience. The opening points about technology were particularly disheartening, and by showing this bias the author is likely to turn modern readers off of his book.
I wish the author the best! No matter what criticism they receive, they wrote a book, and that’s awesome!!!
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