2.5 stars. Y’all. All I can think when looking back on this book is how much potential it had. In the end, it fell short, but I wonder if the story will improve as it goes on. Synopsis: Clementine (a red head) owns a construction/design business that builds/rehabs/renovates homes. I guess she’s technically a general contractor. Anyway, she has some magical abilities, but after a traumatic experience decides to leave magic behind and move to the normal town of Peachwood. But after building a peaceful, normal life, her business partner is murdered and the man who assaulted her shows up with amnesia and a personality change and her world gets flipped upside down. Sounds like an action drama, but no it’s a lighthearted cozy mystery.
What I liked: I liked the characters, in general. A couple of characters I didn’t really like, but in the end I wasn’t supposed to like them, so I guess it was okay. I liked a lot of the elements of the story. Everything I would expect from a cozy mystery: the quirky town & its characters, the pet, the love interest, a bizarre happening.
What didn’t work for me: 1) The novel had all the pieces for a great story, but the pieces didn’t fit right and there were gaps in between. It needed a really good content editor. 2). It seemed as if the author couldn’t have two mysteries going at once. Either the focus was on Clem’s dead partner (as it was in the beginning and end) or it was on the mystery of Rufus’ appearance and Clem’s relationship with him. But the two rarely overlapped. 3) Clem is traumatized but pretty quickly falls back into the longing stares of Rufus. Wait, what??? He attacked her and she left! She wasn’t in a continually abusive relationship. I cannot imagine her flipping her feelings around so quickly and wanting him again. If he stole something of hers, like a watch or something I can understand giving him another chance to see if he’s a victim of circumstance or really a truly awful human being, but tying her up, strapping her down and trying to take her magic by force? Come on now! 4) Clem is a general contractor who knows NOTHING about the financials of her business because her designer manages that. Hello? A general contractor is TIED AT THE HIP to their financials! How do I know? I’m a real estate investor that has flipped homes and had to budget for repairs and figure out costs so I could decide if/how I could make or maximize a profit. You are in and out of your accounts and lines of credit constantly. And you have to pay taxes and work with your accountant. You simply can’t be part of a construction business and be as hands on as Clem AND be clueless at the same time. Although, I guess it’s fitting she went bankrupt, but it couldn’t have gone on for years. It is always difficult to read books about general contractors and renovators for this reason alone. 5) The mystery is almost nonexistent. Yes, her best friend/business partner ends up dead. And yes she starts to look for clues, but then the searching for clues gets dropped in favor of helping Rufus and BAM! all of a sudden the mystery picks up at the end and is solved horribly. No build up, no clues, just solved. 6) The person who killed her best friend makes no sense. He decides to blackmail her friend? Why? And she goes to his bar with Clem to hang out? And, what, Shane texts her while she’s there? It was all kinds of confusing. 7) The narrator talking to the reader didn’t work for me. In some places she’s explaining something that seems obvious and then turns to reader and, in essence, asks, “Right? You know how it is, right?” And we are all wondering who she’s talking to and realizes it’s us and, shaking our heads, say yes. Another time she kind of comes across as a know it all-when I already agreed with the point she was making. I just wanted to get lost in the story but the narrator kept pulling me out wanting to seek validation. 8) To make things “right” Rufus Mr-I-have-turned-a-new-leaf-and-am-a-good-human-now-and-Clem-wants-to-keep-it-that-way decides to work for the magical mafia and Clem is grateful. Wait, what? How does this make any sense at all? I just can’t with this story. It started off so good and then kind of went off the rails seemingly just to wrap it up quickly with a bow on top. 9) The partner ends up dead facedown in a client’s newly poured concrete. There is no way in heck I’d live in that house. No way. NO WAY!!!! 10). Along the same lines, Clem’s partner was smothered in wet concrete! But she just moves on like a random bird died in it it instead. Just. Sigh. 11) What was the point of the trucker storyline that kept creeping up in the story? It could have been edited out, along with most of her partner’s mother’s storyline and replaced with something simpler to keep the focus on the main mysteries.
Honestly, a lot of the story could be fixed by simply moving things around and adding or removing a few sentences so the mystery could be woven throughout instead of just at the beginning or the end and make sense. I think this is the end of the road for me and this series. If it wasn’t focused on Clem and on the general contracting I could probably overlook a lot and give it maybe one more chance since the beginning of series can be hit or miss, but inconsistencies with her job would drive me batty.