Disclosure: I received a free ARC of this book in exchange for an honest review.
The Sand Sea is a fantasy adventure that takes place in an alternative reality of late-1870’s Earth (primarily North America, England, and the Middle East). The plot follows Peter Harmon, Jack Caldwell and Hannah Huntington on their quest to secure access to the mysterious and coveted mineral beserite, and Jemojeen Jongdar and Selena Savanar as they strive to quash (Jemojeen) or fulfill (Selena) an ancient prophecy.
DNF at 28%.
The good:
The author included several maps at the beginning of the book which were nicely illustrated and helped in understanding the worldbuilding, which is especially useful given that this is an alternate reality.
There were moments of intrigue that piqued my interest, especially in regards to the power structure of the “Middle Eastern” equivalent kingdom.
The not so good:
Characters:
Most of the primary characters (Peter, Jack, Hannah, and Selena) don’t have a lot of agency of their own. Peter and Jack are going on the adventure because their wealthy fathers are making them go. Hannah is going because she doesn’t want to get married, and that’s the only option for a society woman in New Anglia. Selena is snatched on her first day working at a brothel by Oath Takers who believe she will help fulfill the prophecy, and she seems to just be along for the ride. The only person who has agency of his own is the antagonist, Jemojeen, who unfortunately reminds me of Jafar from Aladdin. In addition, many of the people from New Anglia (Jack’s friends and most of the older relatives) read as two-dimensional, entitled rich people, which doesn’t endear me to any of them.
Plot:
The plot has several threads going at once, which slows the pace of the entire story down. There are a few scenes that don’t have very high stakes and which meander for too long. At 28%, there have been a couple of good action scenes, but not enough for a story that is ostensibly all about action.
Writing Style:
This has been the real sticking point for me with this story. It reads like a beta version, not a ready-to-be-released ARC. There is a LOT of exposition, much of which seems to be intended as worldbuilding, but which doesn’t add to what we need to know about the story or the characters right now. Much of this could be cut without losing the essence of the story. In addition, there is a lot of repetition in the writing that could be rephrased, trimmed and streamlined. A good line editor would be able to tighten the writing up, which would help with the flow and the pacing of the story.
Finally, I have to mention my pet peeve in this story – the naming convention. At this point I have counted no fewer than 16 alliterative names (three of which are listed above), plus an iteration of one given name being used for two different people. Whimsical, magical stories may be able to pull this off; here it’s just annoying.
Overall, I would not recommend this book. But there are glimmers of promise. I would heartily recommend that the author continue writing and find himself a good beta audience and line editor.