Fun story, but the inconsistencies and errors make it tedious
It’s a fun story! The first book was the best as far as editing goes, but all of them have glaring inconsistencies and editing issues that don’t allow the reader to actually get into the story, unfortunately. It would go a long, long way to even have a few people read the story to note them or some ARCs before the 5th book is published so they can be fixed.
It also feels like the ages and situations would be a more congruous if it was set in college or junior college. Though the main characters voice IS very teenager.
Spoilers below.
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Some major ones that need to be fixed.
- werewolf mind reading: there are multiple switches back and forth where the main character knows how to block from reading her mind, and notes she actively is blocking, and then all of the sudden wants to learn how to block from reading her mind and is upset she can’t stop her thoughts being read
- K joining the dark coven: MC knows he joined to spy on them/protect her - and thinks/talks about it - and then all of the sudden doesn’t and it’s revealed again as new information and she reacts as if she didn’t know
- ambur/ember body switch: this annoyed me to no end. The names were wrong SO many times with the MC literally introducing the ambur body to someone AS ember when they are pretending they don’t know it’s ember in ambur’s body at one point. I mean so many times it’s incorrect - in what they call their ‘friend,’ how the MC thinks about her, etc. It can already be a confusing plot point but messing up the names so many times is exhausting to read
- chosen one: the existence of a chosen one is a secret, not a secret, only secret society knows, everyone knows, etc etc
- love interest development: all of the love interests /development of their relationships is hard to buy as deep, true feelings
- some basic typos throughout with just the wrong word/extra letter added making it nonsensical
All in all, there’s potential for a fun, interesting story, but it has to be edited ASAP, otherwise it’s very annoying.