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Clearwater's Savior: Wrath MC
She was the throw away in the club. The one that even her own mother hadn’t wanted. Being set aside when she was at the tender age of twelve would have broken even the strongest of women. However, Novalie didn’t let that get her down. Not when she had dreams. However, dreams that she never saw becoming a reality, without the help of one man.
One man that was there in the background but one man had failed her tremendously. That man decided then and there that he would be the one man that she could trust. He would be the one that she could turn to if she ever needed him. And he showed her a side of him that would always belong to her.
And low and behold while she thought that he hung the moon, for him she was the one that came along and brought light into his dark world. How could your dark not light when you had a woman in your life and a code word she would use whenever it was important, that she needed you…. was Unicorn?
So welcome, into the world of Wrath MC.
One man that was there in the background but one man had failed her tremendously. That man decided then and there that he would be the one man that she could trust. He would be the one that she could turn to if she ever needed him. And he showed her a side of him that would always belong to her.
And low and behold while she thought that he hung the moon, for him she was the one that came along and brought light into his dark world. How could your dark not light when you had a woman in your life and a code word she would use whenever it was important, that she needed you…. was Unicorn?
So welcome, into the world of Wrath MC.
209 pages, Kindle Edition
First published July 2, 2020
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July 5, 2020
Good story but definitely needs editing as it can get confusing sometimes with the lack of proper grammar.
September 23, 2022
3 stars.
So. This writing style is Not my favorite.
It needs a lot of work, honestly.
I liked the characters and the struggle enough to finish the book. But it was hard at times, because I couldn’t actually connect with the characters.
The writing was repetitive, it felt a tiny bit like an essay written by a middle schooler. I’m not trying to be mean, I just noticed the characters asked themselves a ton of questions that they then answered, the pronouns were wonky, anytime they should have said ‘my’ or anything possessive, it was replaced by ‘he’ or ‘her’, weirdly. Which made it sound like there was a narrator that only popped up for half sentences, Sometimes.
The plot was also sort of a mess. Not much actually happened on page, to be honest.
I don’t know.
The sex was okay.
The dialogue was cringey at times.
The writing was Not my favorite.
The MC aspect was Okay, I liked the attitude around cheating, and the fact that the FMC tried to include everyone and just be nice to them.
And the plot just wasn’t really…There.
🤷🏻♀️
This is one of those times where I’m a little bit confused with all the 4 and 5 star reviews, unfortunately.
So. This writing style is Not my favorite.
It needs a lot of work, honestly.
I liked the characters and the struggle enough to finish the book. But it was hard at times, because I couldn’t actually connect with the characters.
The writing was repetitive, it felt a tiny bit like an essay written by a middle schooler. I’m not trying to be mean, I just noticed the characters asked themselves a ton of questions that they then answered, the pronouns were wonky, anytime they should have said ‘my’ or anything possessive, it was replaced by ‘he’ or ‘her’, weirdly. Which made it sound like there was a narrator that only popped up for half sentences, Sometimes.
The plot was also sort of a mess. Not much actually happened on page, to be honest.
I don’t know.
The sex was okay.
The dialogue was cringey at times.
The writing was Not my favorite.
The MC aspect was Okay, I liked the attitude around cheating, and the fact that the FMC tried to include everyone and just be nice to them.
And the plot just wasn’t really…There.
🤷🏻♀️
This is one of those times where I’m a little bit confused with all the 4 and 5 star reviews, unfortunately.
July 16, 2023
I wasn't to sure about reading this one but boy am I so glad I did. It was fucking amazing. Not what I expected but still so fucking amazing. Can't wait to read the next book. I have a feeling I'm going to binge read the series.
October 16, 2020
Good story premise, but needs a serious editor!!!
I truly enjoyed the overall story concept. I loved the MC guys, and I really did like Cotton and Novalie a lot. I truly liked how they went about the relationship and the love he had for her. Her’s was a given for me- I just loved how much he proved she matter to him.
My only issues were basically how bad this story needed an editor! Maybe even a book cover designer. Though, I did like the motorcycle part of the cover. Still, a professional editor would have caught, and pointed out, all of the editing issues. Like missing punctuation marks, messing up of Xavier’s name when it should have said Walker... or placing him somewhere he wasn’t mentioned as being there- then magically he was. Or like missing names for POV changes in the epilogue.... or some sentences not being finished. It would have been great for repetition of things said already. Maybe even to say hey- there’s some holes in the story- like with her dad situation at the end. Which I won’t spoil but I had issues with the believability of it all- and how we really don’t see him much after learn about him. Or sometimes it seemed like we missed something from the story between the couple in a few spots. Also, an editor could have pointed out that Novalie and book 2’s h, Marly, have the same last name? Guess we will see if that was an accident or truth when I get to the next book.
Overall- I did like the story. It just needed to be cleaned up, written better as there were many times I felt like a teenager wrote it.
I truly enjoyed the overall story concept. I loved the MC guys, and I really did like Cotton and Novalie a lot. I truly liked how they went about the relationship and the love he had for her. Her’s was a given for me- I just loved how much he proved she matter to him.
My only issues were basically how bad this story needed an editor! Maybe even a book cover designer. Though, I did like the motorcycle part of the cover. Still, a professional editor would have caught, and pointed out, all of the editing issues. Like missing punctuation marks, messing up of Xavier’s name when it should have said Walker... or placing him somewhere he wasn’t mentioned as being there- then magically he was. Or like missing names for POV changes in the epilogue.... or some sentences not being finished. It would have been great for repetition of things said already. Maybe even to say hey- there’s some holes in the story- like with her dad situation at the end. Which I won’t spoil but I had issues with the believability of it all- and how we really don’t see him much after learn about him. Or sometimes it seemed like we missed something from the story between the couple in a few spots. Also, an editor could have pointed out that Novalie and book 2’s h, Marly, have the same last name? Guess we will see if that was an accident or truth when I get to the next book.
Overall- I did like the story. It just needed to be cleaned up, written better as there were many times I felt like a teenager wrote it.
August 23, 2021
This is the first book that I've read by this author and I was pleasantly surprised. This was a great read. I loved that Kane went all out to take care of Novalie. Her parents sucked but I loved that he stepped up. The age gap was great. The fact that she liked to play pranks made their relationship fun. I loved that the whole mc really rallied around her and gave her the respect that she deserved. She was an awesome heroine even befriending the club girls. I can't wait to read more books in this series.
February 24, 2022
This could have been a 5-star book. I initially rated it 4-stars, then re-read parts of it and thought about it for a while. I changed it down to 3 stars.
There is a lot wrong with this book: typos, grammatical mistakes, punctuation errors, abrupt and inappropriate changes to point of view (POV). But the story is top-notch – really good. And the leading characters, Kane “Cotton” O’Malley and Novalie “Kitten” Henderson, are well defined and likeable. The supporting characters are also well developed and interesting. The book’s problems, however, are so severe that they make the book difficult and exhausting to read. The reader must constantly check backwards, then forwards in order to figure out what on earth is going on. The proofreading is brutally lacking, nonexistent from a reader’s perspective.
Age gap is not my favorite trope because, if the writer isn’t very careful, it can cross the line into pedophilia. This book comes close. A 35-year-old man (“Cotton”) is drawn inexorably to a teenager, Novalie, who just turns 18 at the beginning of the book. At the start, it was a little creepy. But as Cotton’s feelings became more pronounced, the creepiness diminished. Gotta say, though, Novalie is written as someone much older than eighteen, and that part stretches believability that she is a teenager. She has had a rough life and that ages someone quickly, but still…a man who has thirty-five years' worth of life experience is going to have little in common with an 18-year-old.
The errors in this book are monumental. Some of the most egregious are the unexpected changes to POV, often in mid-paragraph, even mid-sentence! For example:
==) “There, to my left, she was swinging in the hammock – his hammock – reading a book.” This is in a chapter subtitled, “Cotton,” who was the narrator. The “his” used in this sentence is the narrator. How much better it would have been like this (I think): “…she was swinging in the hammock – my hammock – reading a book.” No ambiguity.
==) Here’s Cotton in the middle of a tirade: “’Now, I’m going to take the blame as a whole with the MC. We should’ve seen what was happening and put an end to it.’ He ignored her visual protests and carried on. Heck, she even thought that placing a finger over his mouth, trying to tell him to stop, was going to keep him quiet. Fu**ing cute. ‘Now, and I mean starting now, you are going to take my number and keep it on you 24 fu**ing seven. No ifs ands or buts about it…’” The references to a third person, “he,” make no sense since this is Cotton’s narration; these are his thoughts. And the punctuation needs help, too.
==) “A waitress came over to our booth. Since it was just them and two other couples in there, service is going to be quick.” Wow. Change to POV and change in tense. The “them” being referenced is the narrator, Cotton, and Novalie. How about, “…since it was just us and two other couples….” And why is the writer changing from present to past tense?
==) “…as we drove past the clubhouse, we turned on a different road to the left…. The road had been woven between trees, and with the windows cracked, she could hear the crickets in the woods…. And at the end of the drive, I sat there and gazed at the wonder in front of me.” Distracting, isn’t it?
==) “I made her way to him and gave him my mouth.” What…???
==) “Well, it would appear that I did a damn good job seeing as her own hero lay there softly snoring against my neck.” This is flat disorienting. Someone else’s hero is not against her (Novalie’s) neck.
There are a ton of typographical errors, too:
==) “…and decided to choose Virginias’s diner.” I suspect that should be “Virginia’s diner.”
==) “…and didn’t open back up until Monday morning at six in the morning.” Only one of those mornings is needed.
==) “…neither York nor Garret hadn’t paid her any mind….” Too many negatives in that sentence. Maybe, “…neither York nor Garret had paid her any mind…?”
==) “I didn’t know what caused my reaction, but it was a coming to the lights moment for the lawyer that I busted out laughing, the tears then turned to joy.” This is a difficult sentence to read; it could mean a couple of different things. Some punctuation might help. Breaking the thought into more than one sentence could help, too.
Much of the book reads like a stream of consciousness outburst. So many run-on sentences. Oh, so many changes in POV. These are roadblocks to story enjoyment. A few errors, while irritating, can be overlooked but this book incorporates page after page of missteps. It stops a reader in her/his tracks.
Proofreading is seriously absent. And I expect that editing this book would be difficult. It’s a rough book, filled with rough language, rough activity, rough characters. The harshness of the book is part of its charm. Its tone is appropriate: the biker world is rough. Cotton, our biker-hero, is rough. Still…an editor with some good, professional chops would help this book immensely. It could be fine-tuned into an actual 5-star book. But not now, not as written.
There is a lot wrong with this book: typos, grammatical mistakes, punctuation errors, abrupt and inappropriate changes to point of view (POV). But the story is top-notch – really good. And the leading characters, Kane “Cotton” O’Malley and Novalie “Kitten” Henderson, are well defined and likeable. The supporting characters are also well developed and interesting. The book’s problems, however, are so severe that they make the book difficult and exhausting to read. The reader must constantly check backwards, then forwards in order to figure out what on earth is going on. The proofreading is brutally lacking, nonexistent from a reader’s perspective.
Age gap is not my favorite trope because, if the writer isn’t very careful, it can cross the line into pedophilia. This book comes close. A 35-year-old man (“Cotton”) is drawn inexorably to a teenager, Novalie, who just turns 18 at the beginning of the book. At the start, it was a little creepy. But as Cotton’s feelings became more pronounced, the creepiness diminished. Gotta say, though, Novalie is written as someone much older than eighteen, and that part stretches believability that she is a teenager. She has had a rough life and that ages someone quickly, but still…a man who has thirty-five years' worth of life experience is going to have little in common with an 18-year-old.
The errors in this book are monumental. Some of the most egregious are the unexpected changes to POV, often in mid-paragraph, even mid-sentence! For example:
==) “There, to my left, she was swinging in the hammock – his hammock – reading a book.” This is in a chapter subtitled, “Cotton,” who was the narrator. The “his” used in this sentence is the narrator. How much better it would have been like this (I think): “…she was swinging in the hammock – my hammock – reading a book.” No ambiguity.
==) Here’s Cotton in the middle of a tirade: “’Now, I’m going to take the blame as a whole with the MC. We should’ve seen what was happening and put an end to it.’ He ignored her visual protests and carried on. Heck, she even thought that placing a finger over his mouth, trying to tell him to stop, was going to keep him quiet. Fu**ing cute. ‘Now, and I mean starting now, you are going to take my number and keep it on you 24 fu**ing seven. No ifs ands or buts about it…’” The references to a third person, “he,” make no sense since this is Cotton’s narration; these are his thoughts. And the punctuation needs help, too.
==) “A waitress came over to our booth. Since it was just them and two other couples in there, service is going to be quick.” Wow. Change to POV and change in tense. The “them” being referenced is the narrator, Cotton, and Novalie. How about, “…since it was just us and two other couples….” And why is the writer changing from present to past tense?
==) “…as we drove past the clubhouse, we turned on a different road to the left…. The road had been woven between trees, and with the windows cracked, she could hear the crickets in the woods…. And at the end of the drive, I sat there and gazed at the wonder in front of me.” Distracting, isn’t it?
==) “I made her way to him and gave him my mouth.” What…???
==) “Well, it would appear that I did a damn good job seeing as her own hero lay there softly snoring against my neck.” This is flat disorienting. Someone else’s hero is not against her (Novalie’s) neck.
There are a ton of typographical errors, too:
==) “…and decided to choose Virginias’s diner.” I suspect that should be “Virginia’s diner.”
==) “…and didn’t open back up until Monday morning at six in the morning.” Only one of those mornings is needed.
==) “…neither York nor Garret hadn’t paid her any mind….” Too many negatives in that sentence. Maybe, “…neither York nor Garret had paid her any mind…?”
==) “I didn’t know what caused my reaction, but it was a coming to the lights moment for the lawyer that I busted out laughing, the tears then turned to joy.” This is a difficult sentence to read; it could mean a couple of different things. Some punctuation might help. Breaking the thought into more than one sentence could help, too.
Much of the book reads like a stream of consciousness outburst. So many run-on sentences. Oh, so many changes in POV. These are roadblocks to story enjoyment. A few errors, while irritating, can be overlooked but this book incorporates page after page of missteps. It stops a reader in her/his tracks.
Proofreading is seriously absent. And I expect that editing this book would be difficult. It’s a rough book, filled with rough language, rough activity, rough characters. The harshness of the book is part of its charm. Its tone is appropriate: the biker world is rough. Cotton, our biker-hero, is rough. Still…an editor with some good, professional chops would help this book immensely. It could be fine-tuned into an actual 5-star book. But not now, not as written.
July 19, 2020
Needs serious editing
The basic storyline is good but there are way too many editing issues. It swings between first and third person narrative in the middle of paragraphs, there are words missing in middle of sentences there are whole pages copied into chapters more than once from previous chapters with just the odd line at the end different and only managed to get halfway through book before gave up. Author needs to take a seriously good look at what they've written
The basic storyline is good but there are way too many editing issues. It swings between first and third person narrative in the middle of paragraphs, there are words missing in middle of sentences there are whole pages copied into chapters more than once from previous chapters with just the odd line at the end different and only managed to get halfway through book before gave up. Author needs to take a seriously good look at what they've written
July 15, 2022
Okay
It was okay I thought it was a good book then half way through it lost some of its appeal to me. I don't know why I thought it was a bit wam bam in getting rid of her mother and step father it could have gone into detail a bit more it would have made a better read.
It was okay I thought it was a good book then half way through it lost some of its appeal to me. I don't know why I thought it was a bit wam bam in getting rid of her mother and step father it could have gone into detail a bit more it would have made a better read.
May 24, 2022
Novalie has never been wanted, when her mother remarried she was all but forgotten and treated like dirt. The perception that MC life is all about family, couldn't be farther from a myth but then one day on the eve of her eighteenth birthday the President of the MC, Cotton, talks to her. What he finds out has his blood boiling, he never knew the away she was treated and he is livid. When Novalie is attacked, Cotton steps in and moves her in his home. He wants Novalie to have everything she deserves but he is to old for her, even though he wants to be by his side. However, when he realizes the that the feeling is mutual everything shifts. With a threat to the club coming, Cotton has to do what he can to protect the woman who owns his heart.
This was better than I expected. There is some issues though with some of the story and the flow. The other thing is that Novalie has a plan and then it is dropped from the storyline so that was a bit confusing. Otherwise great chemistry and entertaining.
This was better than I expected. There is some issues though with some of the story and the flow. The other thing is that Novalie has a plan and then it is dropped from the storyline so that was a bit confusing. Otherwise great chemistry and entertaining.
July 22, 2021
Was not for me
I love me some age gap and mc books but this one I just didn’t enjoy. I didn’t feel the connection Kane had with Novalie. I felt there wasn’t any built up to his feelings for her. And oh the nickname Kitten was annoying after a while. It was used too much. Then the author had a tendency of summarizing a lot. Like instead of giving us details she would just summarize it in a paragraph. And it just felt like I was missing out on some info. Also why didn’t she tell us what happened to Novalie’s money? Like I don’t understand why the author didn’t just add that info. I feel like she donated it but who knows. I just felt like things were happening way too quickly and just glossed over. Also I couldn’t take him seriously because of his name Cotton.
Though this book wasn’t for me I will give the next book a chance because I am curious about the other characters.
I love me some age gap and mc books but this one I just didn’t enjoy. I didn’t feel the connection Kane had with Novalie. I felt there wasn’t any built up to his feelings for her. And oh the nickname Kitten was annoying after a while. It was used too much. Then the author had a tendency of summarizing a lot. Like instead of giving us details she would just summarize it in a paragraph. And it just felt like I was missing out on some info. Also why didn’t she tell us what happened to Novalie’s money? Like I don’t understand why the author didn’t just add that info. I feel like she donated it but who knows. I just felt like things were happening way too quickly and just glossed over. Also I couldn’t take him seriously because of his name Cotton.
Though this book wasn’t for me I will give the next book a chance because I am curious about the other characters.
July 11, 2020
Not bad
Overall it's a good story. It needs alot of editing done to it. Time frames jump around alot and repeat it's self in several places, almost like your rereading the same thing in several places.
The wording doesn't make sense at times , or their placement in sentences. Makes it hard to understand in paragraphs. Some words aren't spelled incorrectly or are not completely written all the way.
Alot of interesting situations are started but then are skipped over to something entirely different which continues to pull the reader away from events that are happening and onto something else.
Overall it's a good story. It needs alot of editing done to it. Time frames jump around alot and repeat it's self in several places, almost like your rereading the same thing in several places.
The wording doesn't make sense at times , or their placement in sentences. Makes it hard to understand in paragraphs. Some words aren't spelled incorrectly or are not completely written all the way.
Alot of interesting situations are started but then are skipped over to something entirely different which continues to pull the reader away from events that are happening and onto something else.
May 26, 2022
If you love mills n boon type romance you'll love this biker version.
Its sweet, soppy, lovey and totally predictable.
The mc biker culture is discussed but nothing in detail. Like I said its a mills n boon but with biker elements.
Its not for me. Biker books should be edgy, angsty n dark.
This was literally unicorns.
Sigh why do authors try to write biker books who clearly don't understand or even know biker culture?
Not for me.
Its sweet, soppy, lovey and totally predictable.
The mc biker culture is discussed but nothing in detail. Like I said its a mills n boon but with biker elements.
Its not for me. Biker books should be edgy, angsty n dark.
This was literally unicorns.
Sigh why do authors try to write biker books who clearly don't understand or even know biker culture?
Not for me.
September 28, 2021
Clearwater Savior
I just grabbed this one a friend recommended. Great start to a new series. So I glad I gave this one a chance. I can’t wait to read more about the other members.
I just grabbed this one a friend recommended. Great start to a new series. So I glad I gave this one a chance. I can’t wait to read more about the other members.
November 7, 2023
I'm not going to lie, I was prepared to be icked out by the age difference, so I'm happy to say that didn't happen. I think the reason for that was Novalie had just turned 18 and Cotton really never paid attention to her. In fact he only talked to her kinda on a lark and then found out how much her parents and the MC let her down and went about changing things for her. By doing that he started to spend time with her and saw what a great person she was, despite how she had been treated. It was fun to see both of them explore their feelings and be vulnerable with each other and how those in their lives reacted. Loved to see how happy they were all the way to the end of the book!
July 13, 2022
meh
Okay read. Nothing spectacular nothing terrible. Not really sure I’m going to read more. Not bad for a summer read
Okay read. Nothing spectacular nothing terrible. Not really sure I’m going to read more. Not bad for a summer read
April 2, 2025
I liked the story enough to finish but if it had been any longer, I probably wouldn’t have. I see definite potential for the series and I like the character. The grammar, dialogue, POV switches, etc…were just too much for me to rate this higher.
July 30, 2021
Cotton/Kane and Novalie
This is my first time reading this author and all I can say is holy wow with this story. Cotton is the President of the Wrath MC motorcycle club and Novalie is the step daughter of one of the members, but the club realized that some monies were missing and figured it out that Frank and his wife Amy (which is Novalie's mom, and I use that term very loosely) , because she is a despicable excuse for a human being. Novalie has been taking care of herself since she was 12 years old, because her mom was to busy getting drunk or high, but the amazing thing about Novalie is that she is a strong and loving young lady. Cotton got her out of her situation and moved her into his house and even though he is quite a bit older than her, love doesn't care about age and to me they make an awesome couple. This was a fabulous story and looking forward to reading the next one. Happy reading.
This is my first time reading this author and all I can say is holy wow with this story. Cotton is the President of the Wrath MC motorcycle club and Novalie is the step daughter of one of the members, but the club realized that some monies were missing and figured it out that Frank and his wife Amy (which is Novalie's mom, and I use that term very loosely) , because she is a despicable excuse for a human being. Novalie has been taking care of herself since she was 12 years old, because her mom was to busy getting drunk or high, but the amazing thing about Novalie is that she is a strong and loving young lady. Cotton got her out of her situation and moved her into his house and even though he is quite a bit older than her, love doesn't care about age and to me they make an awesome couple. This was a fabulous story and looking forward to reading the next one. Happy reading.
December 2, 2023
Contains Spoilers
This review contains a lot of spoilers.
I was bothered a lot by this book. The MFC wanted to be a nurse, but it never said what school she ended up choosing or if she ever went to become a nurse. Her bf June was in the beginning, and then completely just disappeared without stating why. The book was hard to read due to the writing itself. For example her point of view would change in the same sentence. Going from first person to third person in the same sentence! Sentences read like, “Can you dice up potatoes? Lucy was making mashed potatoes. Lucy’s mashed potatoes were the bomb.”
Another issue for me was that you didn’t have character growth that progressed. The MFC was timid and reserved. Then suddenly she was this southern talking bad self that could hold her own. Very disappointed especially because my kindle keeps recommending this series, but I’m not going to continue it.
This review contains a lot of spoilers.
I was bothered a lot by this book. The MFC wanted to be a nurse, but it never said what school she ended up choosing or if she ever went to become a nurse. Her bf June was in the beginning, and then completely just disappeared without stating why. The book was hard to read due to the writing itself. For example her point of view would change in the same sentence. Going from first person to third person in the same sentence! Sentences read like, “Can you dice up potatoes? Lucy was making mashed potatoes. Lucy’s mashed potatoes were the bomb.”
Another issue for me was that you didn’t have character growth that progressed. The MFC was timid and reserved. Then suddenly she was this southern talking bad self that could hold her own. Very disappointed especially because my kindle keeps recommending this series, but I’m not going to continue it.
December 21, 2021
Sugary sweet
It started off okay, but after they get together things just go too easy and there’s no real internal conflict. The external conflict is also resolved too easily. There are no real threats that manifest that make the action have weight for the reader.
The biggest issue is the editing. It really gets in the way of understanding what’s going on. It’s hard to understand what is happening now and what’s a memory, or even the simple passage of time. It also reads in several places like it was originally written in third person and then converted to first, so there are places that have oddly constructed sentences.
I’m assuming that June will be a character in a later book, but if not, then she should have been cut, because her story is mysteriously unfinished and unsatisfying.
It started off okay, but after they get together things just go too easy and there’s no real internal conflict. The external conflict is also resolved too easily. There are no real threats that manifest that make the action have weight for the reader.
The biggest issue is the editing. It really gets in the way of understanding what’s going on. It’s hard to understand what is happening now and what’s a memory, or even the simple passage of time. It also reads in several places like it was originally written in third person and then converted to first, so there are places that have oddly constructed sentences.
I’m assuming that June will be a character in a later book, but if not, then she should have been cut, because her story is mysteriously unfinished and unsatisfying.
June 6, 2022
Needs work!
The idea behind the story isn't bad, but it needs some seriuos self editing. The writing feels juvenile to me. There are huge discrepancies with the timeline that makes the story confusing. The writing is very staccato (in that it doesn't flow smoothly together), I feel like the author was trying to throw as much at these characters as they could and it was just an overkill. There is such a thing as too much tragedy and angst to overcome. I don't feel like I really got to know the main characters or that they developed at all in this story. I don't really care about any of the secondary characters who I believe show up in later stories.There is a way to deliver conflict that keeps a storyline moving, and this is not it. This was almost a DNF for me, but I forged ahead. I know some people love it, and that is fine, but I do not recommend this book.
The idea behind the story isn't bad, but it needs some seriuos self editing. The writing feels juvenile to me. There are huge discrepancies with the timeline that makes the story confusing. The writing is very staccato (in that it doesn't flow smoothly together), I feel like the author was trying to throw as much at these characters as they could and it was just an overkill. There is such a thing as too much tragedy and angst to overcome. I don't feel like I really got to know the main characters or that they developed at all in this story. I don't really care about any of the secondary characters who I believe show up in later stories.There is a way to deliver conflict that keeps a storyline moving, and this is not it. This was almost a DNF for me, but I forged ahead. I know some people love it, and that is fine, but I do not recommend this book.
October 14, 2020
Horrible
My favorite books are MC romance and age gap books are always a bonus, so I thought this story would hit my sweet spot. I was horribly wrong. The idea of the story is good but it was poorly executed. The story is constantly switching back and forth between first person and third person, the author leaves out important information/details and doesn't explain what the resolution to the the issues the MC is having. In my opinion the actions in this story was not consistent with what I've read a 1% MC to be. The grammatical errors just made everything worse and the author seemed to have trouble remembering the ages of her characters.
My favorite books are MC romance and age gap books are always a bonus, so I thought this story would hit my sweet spot. I was horribly wrong. The idea of the story is good but it was poorly executed. The story is constantly switching back and forth between first person and third person, the author leaves out important information/details and doesn't explain what the resolution to the the issues the MC is having. In my opinion the actions in this story was not consistent with what I've read a 1% MC to be. The grammatical errors just made everything worse and the author seemed to have trouble remembering the ages of her characters.
March 14, 2022
Not Worth Finishing..DNF
This book had many warnings in reviews that there were editing issues. I gave it a chance, because it apparently, had been re-edited. Even so, this book is still a mess. I read the first few pages. There were run-on sentences, followed by sentence fragments. The writing was immature and the flow was choppy. This is “Step-Dad” written correctly, but in the first few pages it is written as Stepdad, step dad, & stepdad. So, whatever may have been in this book is now firmly on my Not Worth Finishing shelf. The 2 stars are for the author’s courage and attempt at writing in the public domain.
This book had many warnings in reviews that there were editing issues. I gave it a chance, because it apparently, had been re-edited. Even so, this book is still a mess. I read the first few pages. There were run-on sentences, followed by sentence fragments. The writing was immature and the flow was choppy. This is “Step-Dad” written correctly, but in the first few pages it is written as Stepdad, step dad, & stepdad. So, whatever may have been in this book is now firmly on my Not Worth Finishing shelf. The 2 stars are for the author’s courage and attempt at writing in the public domain.
April 4, 2022
Could have been so much better!
I have given this 1 star as it has a good story premise which was executed badly. There has been no editing, there were whole sections that contradictory. The timeline was confusing and there were so, so many spelling errors e.g. allowed instead of aloud. There were also sections that were repetitive that they may as well have been cut and pasted, just to make the story longer. It is a shame what could have been a good book was ruined by sloppy writing and editing, which I am sad to say has put me off reading the rest of the series.
I have given this 1 star as it has a good story premise which was executed badly. There has been no editing, there were whole sections that contradictory. The timeline was confusing and there were so, so many spelling errors e.g. allowed instead of aloud. There were also sections that were repetitive that they may as well have been cut and pasted, just to make the story longer. It is a shame what could have been a good book was ruined by sloppy writing and editing, which I am sad to say has put me off reading the rest of the series.
July 17, 2021
Beautiful love story
Cotton and Novalie story was so touching Novalie for years basically raised herself even though her mother was an old lady of the MC. Cotton was the only was who noticed her. When things started to unravel Cotton could not believe how him and his brother's let this girl down.she was family.
But neither could stop the feelings they had for each other even though she was only 18. Then they found her father and Novalie life was prefect. Cotton and Novalie lived to have a beautiful love story that continued for years. Page turner
Cotton and Novalie story was so touching Novalie for years basically raised herself even though her mother was an old lady of the MC. Cotton was the only was who noticed her. When things started to unravel Cotton could not believe how him and his brother's let this girl down.she was family.
But neither could stop the feelings they had for each other even though she was only 18. Then they found her father and Novalie life was prefect. Cotton and Novalie lived to have a beautiful love story that continued for years. Page turner
October 6, 2021
So good yet so bad!
The story is great. The execution is terrible! The author switches from first person to 3rd person from one paragraph to the next! She also swaps back and forth between past and present in the same paragraph. When she switches from different POVs the timeliness don't always lone up. There's also constant contradictions. While the heroine is young and you expect some immaturity with her part of the story as a whole has an immature feel. Hopefully the author will get a good editor and she will grow. I won't be moving forward with the series.
The story is great. The execution is terrible! The author switches from first person to 3rd person from one paragraph to the next! She also swaps back and forth between past and present in the same paragraph. When she switches from different POVs the timeliness don't always lone up. There's also constant contradictions. While the heroine is young and you expect some immaturity with her part of the story as a whole has an immature feel. Hopefully the author will get a good editor and she will grow. I won't be moving forward with the series.
October 19, 2022
Hard to read
I honestly struggled with the writing.
I liked the characters although it could have used more plot, but the grammatical errors, change in tense and just all over sentences that don't make sense eg 'It shouldn't have surprised me that it had only taken the lawyer to get a response from my mother within the hour.' made it hard to read and pulled me out of the story each time and there are countless sentences like that through the book.
I obviously don't see what everyone rating it 4 and 5 stars see when they read it.
I honestly struggled with the writing.
I liked the characters although it could have used more plot, but the grammatical errors, change in tense and just all over sentences that don't make sense eg 'It shouldn't have surprised me that it had only taken the lawyer to get a response from my mother within the hour.' made it hard to read and pulled me out of the story each time and there are countless sentences like that through the book.
I obviously don't see what everyone rating it 4 and 5 stars see when they read it.
December 4, 2021
The story was good but the editing was awful and you find yourself constantly re-reading lines as some don`t make sense, it was just too much and too hard to keep re-reading on nearly every page.EG; She had been remising about that perfect day, you mean reminiscing. fifteen hours later, the mc princess made her way into the world as quite as her momma, does it mean quiet or quick???? Totally spoilt the book
December 20, 2021
Meh
Someone on Facebook was asking about this book, so I decided to read it on KU. You can tell the author thought about writing this in 3rd person, but there were sentences with a mix of 1st and 3rd, plus a mix of past and present tense. Overall, a grammatical nightmare. The story had potential, but fell pretty short.
Someone on Facebook was asking about this book, so I decided to read it on KU. You can tell the author thought about writing this in 3rd person, but there were sentences with a mix of 1st and 3rd, plus a mix of past and present tense. Overall, a grammatical nightmare. The story had potential, but fell pretty short.
August 6, 2022
Needs edits
While the base of the storyline was decent, the author needs to invest in an editor. The story jumped from 1st to 3rd person, spelling and grammar errors were too much to overlook. The characters never fully developed and a few characters were introduced then completely disappeared.
Poor writing. Don't recommend until the author can edit it properly
While the base of the storyline was decent, the author needs to invest in an editor. The story jumped from 1st to 3rd person, spelling and grammar errors were too much to overlook. The characters never fully developed and a few characters were introduced then completely disappeared.
Poor writing. Don't recommend until the author can edit it properly
July 4, 2020
Cotton
I saw this book on Instagram and had to download it. It's a touching book between Cotton MC President and a young girl that should have been protected by the club growing up but becomes the heart of the club after a rough start. Can't wait for book two.
I saw this book on Instagram and had to download it. It's a touching book between Cotton MC President and a young girl that should have been protected by the club growing up but becomes the heart of the club after a rough start. Can't wait for book two.
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