A lot of people seem to like the Alaskan Security - Team Rogue books. A lot of reviewers have a lot of good things to say. I’m not one of them. I loved the prequel, Collateral Damage and rated it an easy 4-stars. It was short but was filled with potential. I liked the characters Carly Smith (who later became Bess Hines) and Whitt Daniels (who later became Wade Denison) and was excited to find out more about them…an auspicious beginning for a series, to be sure…!
Now we’re at book #5 and the supposed end of the storyline that has crossed 5½ books. The foremost thought in my mind is that these books have gone on for too long. There are so many complications, as opposed to interesting complexities, that it would do well to have a brief synopsis in front of each book to remind us of what has gone before, because none of these books is a standalone novel. Remembering all the details – let alone all the players – is near impossible…but neither is it a pleasing thought.
In chapter 1, Pierce and Vincent square off like the bad little boys they are; Vincent is the omniscient and all-knowing Oz while Pierce, the egomaniac, takes full responsibility for Mona’s becoming a strong independent woman. Of course he does.
In chapter 2, Mona squares off against Shawn.
It gets worse. This is understood to be the summation book where all the loose ends are tied up, where the continuing soap opera of Pierce and Mona is to be played out in fruition. The book is stagey, and as readers we are aware of the manipulations which are tiring. It is not an enjoyable read. The characters feel as if they are in a play rather than a slice of life.
I no longer care for Pierce or Mona. They are play-acting and seem cold, even when the writer is feeding them lines that are supposedly hot and heavy. The writer has spent many pages showing us how weak minded Mona is, how unassuming and fearful she is. Now – suddenly – she finds inner strength through talking us to death. It doesn’t work – her new-found strength doesn’t seem real; it’s more like a device used to move the story along. I got tired of Mona’s vomiting and Pierce’s superciliousness. We are told that Mona has “managed to find her way into the hardest of hearts” but we aren’t shown how. Mona throws up and/or passes out when she is stressed or anxious, then gets angry when the men don’t want her on a mission. Really…???
I’ve become enormously tired of the same exhausted plot being rehashed in book after book after book: poor beleaguered woman with tons of potential realized only when an alpha male comes along and opens her up and who then becomes fiercely protective and outrageously upset when things go awry…which they always do.
The writer created people who betrayed Alaskan Security, some outside the Teams and others within. There are so many flip-flops and recanting of sides that we need to take a believability pill…and once again a scorecard would be handy but since one isn’t provided, a reader would have to be truly motivated to provide her or his own.
At 35% completion, I had to speed up a bit. The book had been rehashing old conversations, old analyses, old concepts, old behaviors, and it got terribly tedious and insipid.
At 50% completion, the book was no further along: more repetitive discussions (yes, we had heard it all before), more decisions put off, more chest thumping males and indecisive females.
At 63% completion, the writer introduces two new characters (Amelia and Helen) whose sole purpose appears to be used in the story summations. Astute readers must call “foul!” because they are brought in at the final moment to serve only as a device to end the plot. There have been no clues, no clever bird crumbs to alert the reader to their existence, never mind their importance. In programming, we call this “retrieving something out of register A” or pulling something out of your a**.
At 67% completion, the book FINALLY comes alive. No spoiler here concerning how and why, but one could almost pick up the book at the 63% mark and be assured of losing very little of the plot. What I find so unforgivably irritating, as an avid reader, is that the first 62% of the book could have been summarized nicely in one chapter.
This supposedly final book of the overlapping storyline was far too mouthy: all dialog and little action. These are military guys who get to sit around and gab, thumping their chests from time to time or delivering food to their women.
The lines linking all the characters, alive and dead, are complicated. At 73% completion, I realized I no longer cared and zipped through to the end. I still don’t get all the connections (yeah, even when I dragged myself back, kicking and screaming, to outline more carefully the links among the players)…ack!…I don’t care enough to point out the inconsistencies.
There are the usual errors:
The name Lennie is sometimes spelled “Lenni.”
“One of his son’s is dead.” The “son” is not a possessive noun; the writer is discussing two sons.
“You now that’s not true….” Or maybe you KNOW that’s not true…?
This whole book could have been half as long and twice as good. But it was neither.
According to the Kindle webpages, there are three more books in the Team Rogue series. If I could be assured that we were headed back to realize the potential of the first little story, Collateral Damage, I would grab up these books with relish and devour them…however…I’m a little shy of this writer now. I do not trust her to tell a clear story that can stand on its own merit. I’m going to hold off for a bit. If all y’all are liking the pace and characterizations, then have at it for sure. For myself? Not so much.