(I received an early e-arc copy of this book for purposes of review)
I, unfortunately, have to admit that this is the first book in a long time that I didn't enjoy virtually any aspect of.
Initially, I was extremely excited when I heard about the premise for this title.
A middle grade set in 1600s Scotland following a young girl who attempts to save her mother from the witch trials. I enjoy Scotland as a setting and am hugely interested in this period of history, so of course I jumped at the opportunity to read an advanced copy.
However, I had so many issues with this story in terms of writing and plot.
Firstly, the style of writing is extremely simple, to the point of it reading as stilted and choppy.
The dialogue between characters and even inner monologue is so awkward and unrealistic, especially for a young girl living in the 17th century Scottish countryside. I don't know if this unrealistic dialogue was an attempt at speech likely of a historical setting but it really took me out of the story so many times because of how many issues I had with it and how unenjoyable it was of a reading experience.
The characters had absolutely no personality that I could see. They were very much a cardboard cut outs with little to no fleshing out. The fact that our protagonist had to save her mother was the only thing I could see in her character. Her mother who we barely see in over 200 pages is hardly even worth mentioning for how little she featured. There weren't even any flash back scenes or memories to show the reader the relationship between mother and daughter so they would be invested when she gets captures by the Witchfinder's soldiers.
The fact that this capture happens the first few pages in the book is another issue I had with pacing throughout the story. We jump huge sequences of Art travelling from Scotland to England, one paragraph she's in Scotland and then jumps to her suddenly already having crossed the border and is now well within England. Again, here I have huge issues with realism as a child of 11 or 12 would really struggle with this journey, having no help and the small amount of food she took from home.
Granted this is a middle grade story and I don't expect the same level of plot detail as I would from a YA or adult novel, however, children are smart enough to understand when plot doesn't make sense to them and need to be given more credit. Making this writing seem quite lazy and underdeveloped with its planning and level of detail.
Coming back to the awkward dialogue, every single character that Art meets through her travels none of them have a natural flowing conversation. They, each after one paragraph, start to delve into their own personal feelings and history which makes no sense why they would act that way to a complete stranger, and a child at that, in any realistic context. We meet characters for a few pages to then never hear of them again, which is a huge pet peeve of mine and again just seems indicative of bad writing.
Another pitfall associated with bad writing is shoe-horning too much detail or research into writing that isn't relevant or natural for the context or scene. This happens throughout multiple passages in the book, rather than using descriptive language to build a scene for the reader, the author just continually lists off every type of flower or tree in the area, which certainly isn't the same thing. Also, there is very basic level research done into the historical period (or at least reads that way) where again it seems like the characters are just learning off paragraphs of a Wikipedia article on historical context or use of medicinal plants.
Unfortunately, this was some of the worst dialogue and writing I have seen written, in children's or adult fiction.
Time and time again I came up against issues with the unrealistic situations in this book. Namely the fact of an 11 year old travelling alone with little to no trouble, guards letting Art, as a stranger, into the castle stronghold with no questioning, and especially, the fact that Art disarms and kills 3 guards by herself when freeing her mother from the dungeon. The plot conveniences were way too on the nose even for a children's story and the wrap up to this entire mission was so rushed and badly written, in my opinion.
It always saddens me to come away from a book not being able to take anything away from the reading experience, however I strive to always be honest in all reviews.