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287 pages, Kindle Edition
First published March 1, 2021
My slippers are quiet on the parquet, too loud when I hit a loose square. I traipse the hall, peek into Lionel's office.(Dictionary definition of traipse: to walk from one place to another, often feeling tired or bored).
Saoirse has made molasses bread, still warm and aromatic. Lionel stole a slice before clambering down the stairs to join Elias and Amos by the boathouse.(Dictionary definition of clamber: to climb up, across, or into somewhere with difficulty, using the hands and the feet) Makes you wonder what kind of stairs they had on the front of their house. But my personal favorite was from a witness statement made to a constable:
I heard a commotion in the barn and could not stop Mrs. Abbot from leaving. She perseverated earlier upon the grievances she believed were committed at Brawders House.(Dictionary definition of perseverate: [PSYCHOLOGY] repeat or prolong an action, thought, or utterance after the stimulus that prompted it has ceased) So many things wrong with this. Number one, no one in the history of mankind has ever made a statement to a law enforcement officer using the word "perseverate" (a psychologist's report, maybe, but an ordinary citizen, no) Second, not only does this word come to us from psychology, a subject the average woman in 1865 America probably knew little about, but the word didn't even exist until the early 20th century. Maybe the author should have clicked away from thesaurus.com every once in a while to check dictionary.com.
I kneel, press my ear to the soil, close my eyes, and pray for a susurration of words. Seriously?I get that the author is trying to give the story depth, build atmosphere, make it seem real, etc., but it doesn't work. It is just too much extraneous information slowing the novel down to a glacial pace and making the reader (this one, anyway) indifferent to the story and the characters. I'd say the author needs to hire a good editor, but in the acknowledgements at the end she thanks her editor, copy editor and proof reader. (Not one of whom objected to "I can't determine where she's at" apparently) Maybe she just needs better editors. But whether she finds them or not, I won't know about it. This is a one and done for me. And I am so done with Kindle First Reads too.
Cathy's silence make me light-headed and nauseous. You mean nauseated
He skirts a look around the room. This is not English.
Cathy's voice bounces off the trees and stone; I can't determine where she's at. Oh dear...