It really felt like a beginner's first novel, which it was. I hope the writer continues on and develops, matures, seasons, because she could someday be pretty darn good.
As for this, it shows promise, but where it failed for me were the areas of character development, detail consistency and plot thread. I can tell Ms. Barry's enamored of film noir and seems to have tried to make her MC like a stereotypical anti-hero who emerges, battered, seedy and used up, but having accomplished his goal. I almost bailed very early on until she mentioned the MC's stint in a hospital which made him smaller, but more intellectually gifted than his peers. That would have fleshed him out, but it didn't gel. He had a smart mouth and was a real a-hole so many times that I couldn't see him as someone who would have had a hard time and been bullied, which was the logical result of his physical description. I didn't like him and he had no internal logic.
Then, too, details conflicted. He mentions breaking into a house, but then says he'd give anything to be able to see inside it. He leaves his car at a location, is driven back by friends, and then is dropped off by friends at his home...having never retrieved the car. It's little things like that that make me stumble over a story.
And there were just too many red herrings, too many characters who were unimportant to the story, but were give enough attention in the telling that you thought you should remember them for some reason that would become apparent later. Overall, the plot was so extremely improbable that it didn't flow.
And the twist at the end didn't help. I think the writer was trying to be super original and was caught up in her own work, but it was too effortful. It strained for a level of eloquence and achievement...and it just plain failed.
But...as I said in the beginning...there's promise here. It needs work and a chance to grow.
As an ex-Los Angelino, though, I did appreciate all the mentions of neighborhoods I used to roam. The nostalgia factor was one reason I did keep reading.