OK. I admit it. The cover got to me. The model’s soulful eyes and the photographer’s inventive lighting were things of excellence. I had been reading one stinker after another that were so bad, I wasn’t reviewing them because they were not worth my time. This book was a refreshing change.
Shotgun (birth name, Noah) is the enforcer of the Ruthless Sinners motorcycle club (MC). Remington is a woman caught in the crosshairs of an urban war involving a dirty outlaw MC (the East End Punishers), even dirtier cops, some good cops, and some of the Ruthless Sinners brothers.
There are some unfortunate inconsistencies. Remington, after being beaten (not a spoiler, it happens at the beginning of the book and is crucial to the story), finds herself in the hospital where (after suffering from temporary amnesia) she finally remembers what happened to her and tells Shotgun. Just a bit later Shotgun narrates, “I’d gone to the infirmary this morning to see if she’d remembered what had happened, but it was clear that she didn’t.” Actually, what was clear is that she had remembered and told him all about the beating. I’m wondering if the writer had a moment of pentimento and wrote over a scene but did not adjust the timeline?
Also, McKinney is a member of the East End Punisher MC who tells Shotgun “I knew trying to take you guys [the Ruthless Sinners] out wasn’t the answer. Instead, it’d be the end." Later, McKinney tells Shotgun, “You have to be crazy to try something like that" [i.e., permanently put an end to the East End Punishers MC], and “You need to really think about this, man. This isn’t a game you can win.” So, first McKinney thinks the Ruthless Sinners are powerful enough to stop the East End Punishers permanently, and then he doesn’t.
Remington, seeing one of the men who tried to kill her now chained up, is afraid and says the man is waiting to kill her. Hmmm…don’t think so. Shotgun has him in chains and the man isn’t in a position to hurt anyone. Remington’s fear was a device used by the writer to get Shotgun to open up to Remington.
At one point, Shotgun tells Remington, “You know, you still haven’t answered my question.” This was said after several pages of conversation and Shotgun hadn’t asked a question; he’d been telling Remington about his fear of letting people get close. This causes the reader to go back searching for a question that doesn’t exist. While Shotgun did ask the question (oh so many, many pages ago), “do you trust me or not?” the reply she presumably is giving doesn’t seem to answer that question, not directly.
Shotgun has told the story several times about how his girl, the love of his life, was killed. He keeps maintaining that if he had been the one driving, everyone would have been just fine. Why has no one mentioned the obvious fact that if he had been driving, he could easily have been killed, too?
The romance between Shotgun and Remington is odd. While there is the dutiful sex, there is no real passion. He’s something of a neanderthal and she is overly accepting of whatever happens to her/him/them. It just doesn’t work. He came across as much too surly, non-communicative, emotionally abusive then regretful but doing nothing to make it right. She came across as a passive Barbie doll. I don’t know…maybe they both got what they wanted and deserved.
The best character in the book was Ada May, everyone’s Momma/Gramma. She is a colorful character to say the least and she is well written: she feels real. One thing got a little old after reading for a few chapters: Ada May had a thick patois and it was sometimes difficult to read. Accents, patois, dialects, and different ways of speaking are difficult to read because they do not flow. Nevertheless, Ada May was a bit of fun.
There are many errors like missing articles (particularly “the”) and there is a problem figuring out who is talking when quotation marks go missing, especially when more than two characters are speaking.
Some additional errors include:
“We spotted us….” That’s a headscratcher. Maybe “WHEN SHE spotted us...” but I’m just guessing.
“That one right there is whiskey in teacup.” Perhaps “…whiskey in A teacup.”
“Office waited for them to park….” Since one of the characters in the scene is a police officer named “Reed,” possibly that should read, “Officer Reed waited for them to park….” There was no one present named “Office.”
The story wasn’t bad, and the writing style is really good, but the chemistry between the two protagonists, Shotgun and Remington, seemed to be missing. They were both pretty. They both had sad stories to tell. There were obligatory sex scenes written well enough. But…something was lacking, some spark that just wasn’t there.
There is a laugh-riot at the end of the book, examples of southern humor. The writer references Tennessee, but we have the same aphorisms here in Texas. We back that up with diamond shaped highway signs that, when the bottom half is flipped up, read “Drive Friendly,” even though we don’t. And this one, too: “The higher the hair, the closer to Heaven.” And I just have to add this little factel: El Paso is closer to Needles, California than it is to Dallas. Yeah, Texas is a big ol’ state.
I rated this book 3 stars, closer to 3½, actually. I liked his writing style and will find more books to read by this writer. I’m looking forward to the next one.