Well, here we are at the fourth book, and... I have given ample leeway for the author to progress in her writing, but to no avail.
There is NO description. Not of the ranch or the barn they see (other than - 'Look, light!'), not of his truck, not of his FACE (I only know it's scarred because of a passing mention in #2), not of HER face, or even her HAIR color - she speaks Spanish but then uses an Irish accent. You tell me. Navarro doesn't creative write. She barely *writes*, for that matter.
And she keeps praising an editor in her forewords who should be absolutely FLOGGED for the book. The first [half] page alone, there's a comma missing, a period missing, and it flip-flops from present to past tense. That is NOT GOOD editing, hello...!!! And that's just the first page!
So Damien. We're told his arm and leg are amputated, but really just his hand is - he has his upper arm and half of his forearm. As for his leg, I made it almost halfway thru the book, and STILL didn't know what kind of an amputation we were looking at, and that was AFTER he took his riding prosthetic off and cleaned the limb and everything. NO. DESCRIPTION. EVER.
We're told over and over that Damian's stand-offish, that he doesn't like people and wants to be left alone. But at NO TIME in this book does he ever walk away, or keep distance, or avoid people. He's at breakfast the morning after finding the newcomers camped out in his barn, he's on his porch watching them clean THE CABIN RIGHT NEXT TO HIS without a dispute of their being placed beside him (at a ranch full of cabins with no other guests EVER mentioned). He's got Lexy working his horses with him from moment one. That's NOT stand-offish. It was an affront to me that the character we're *told* he is and the actions of that character do not at any time align. AT ALL.
First thing off, the girls trespass onto property they have no idea who owns, break into a barn to spend the night, help themselves to the barn shower... and when Damian (the owner) arrives, they beat him in the head with a shovel and threaten to call the police. SAY WHU!?!?! Are there *any* brain cells firing in these characters' heads?! And then the one who clocked him with the shovel says, "I'm not a violent person." Yeah... we got that... *not!* What the heck?!
So he turns on the barn light, and... well read this: "His focus zeroed in on her. His features were hard and unforgiving. They were an unusual greenish-gray color, framed by coal-black lashes and dark skin." And no, I didn't skip anything - THE AUTHOR did. And her editor and publisher. GAH, Navarro books blow... I can barely read this, I swear.
One page later: " 'You said this was your property? Are you a De La Rosa?' 'Damian.' " ← HOW does that answer the question? He could be Damian Lewis, Damian Marley, Damian Lillard... c'mon...!!! BAD writing. Yes or no would've been shorter AND more to the point, hello.
We're told Gretel is a deaf dog, but on Pg 16 Gretel's back is turned on Damian, and she still obeys is command. Read it: "...[he] snapped his fingers and pointed to his foot. 'Gretel, vienes,' Head down, she TURNED TOWARDS HIM. But instead of walking over, she sat..." She wasn't even facing him to SEE his movements, she was focused on a baby on the floor in front of her. NO. Just no.
Pg 22 - Lexy asks Damian why not turn the horse loose in the pastures, and he says the horse is too valuable . Same people/horse/place/event three pages later? " 'Are you turning him out to pasture?' 'This pasture should be save enough for now. ...Turning him out reinforces good behavior." (((banging head against keyboard...)))
Pg 44 - " ' I think the cabin is furnished with basics, but it's been a while since I checked it . I have an extra crib... not sure of the condition it's in. We'll take a tub of cleaning supplies and groceries.'
'I have money for food. I just need directions to town. Don't worry about the condition. I can clean it." ALL OF THIS is disjointed and unconnected and... just BADLY written. BADLY.
Pg 53 - "Somehow, in just one day, she'd made him aware that he wasn't as content with his life as he liked to pretend." In *ONE DAY*, the sullen, anti-social, gruff, isolated guy is already done with his deal? I mean... there's not even an inner struggle? If he's as tough as they say, he would be rejecting them outright in order to protect himself. Even the HORSE fought more than he did, for the love of Mike!
Pg 57 - "Enough talk about Tio Damian." FIVE paragraphs later... Damian, Damian, Damian, Damian. **sigh.** Do ANY of these people Navarro writes live what they say? Ever???
I looked up the breed of dog (Belgian Melanois) that Damian has. It says it's NOT a good breed for having around children, as they tend to nip. But it's okay to let the dog all down in an 8-month old baby's space?
Pg 73 - Lexy doesn't cook, because it involves "too much exact measurement" for her. But she's a professional underwater photographer who works with F-stops (aperture measurements) and ISO (light settings) that are exact measurements. Really?!?!? Does Navarro not realize that there's more to photography than pointing a cellphone camera and clicking? Asking for a friend...
Pg 74 - " 'I hope it's okay that I moved the table out here. The porch has more space than the cabin...' 'I appreciate it. The leg doesn't always work in small spaces.' " As in... he can't bend his leg in a kitchen?!?!? WHAT the what?!
Pg 75 - "Without knowing us, you let us stay in your barn. You allowed us to move in next door. I don't think I have ever felt safer or more peaceful than here." ← In the 25 hours we've been here, I feel more peaceful than I did with my mother and sister in the home I grew up in as a girl. ?!?!?!
Pg 81 - Naomi: "So you save horses, my sister saves marine life. Y'all have a lot in common."
Damian: "What are you doing on the ranch? Other than babysitting me?"
?!??!??! WHO IS HE TALKING TO? Naomi? Lexy? And they've been in the cabin all of 15 hours, and they're 'babysitting' him?
That's not all Lexy does, apparently, either. In true Navarro fashion, she's got like six different careers. She's data gathering and input at a lab, she's an underwater photographer, she's an educational/outreach blogger, she puts together information for grants, plus she's a freelance writer.
I'm done. I'm OUT. DNF @ pg 83. And I'm not finishing the series, either. There are good Love, Inspired writers out there. This is NOT one of them.