It's always a little weird to me when romance authors seem to sometimes forget they're writing a romance novel.
So, I did appreciate the basic plot of this one, because I thought it was a good take on the marriage of convenience trope. Often, such a marriage is to save the woman's reputation because she did something AWFUL like, I don't know, talk, or because the man doesn't get to inherit unless he's married, or something like that. But Julie agreeing to the marriage so that Robert could help get her sister Mary freed from the asylum gave it much more urgency and believability. Julie desperately wanted to get her sister out and bring her to her home to care for her, and Robert wanted to help her, especially after seeing the horrid conditions in the asylum. So I liked that there was this very serious and realistic reason for their marriage. I also thought the bit of a love triangle was done well, too. Julie and John had this young love between them, and she wanted to wait for him to come home from the war (although...not like that was a guarantee, of course). But then the opportunity to get Mary out could not be passed up, and it's completely understandable that Julie would renege on her promise to John in those circumstances.
But...I had a lot of issues. First, the writing just wasn't that solid and really needed a better editor. Lots of repeated words from one sentence to the next, weird lack of contractions at times, some odd descriptions, etc. More importantly, as mentioned above, I just felt like the romance was not front and center most of the time. Julie and Robert spend a lot of time apart, and much of their time together ends up focused on Mary. And then they finally start sleeping together, well after their marriage, and suddenly they're all into each other. There just was so little build-up of their feelings and no real look at how the connection developed. Even the way Julie was so worried that Robert was still seeing his mistress, I was like...why do you care? You don't love him, you don't know him at all, but you're acting hurt and insulted. I just didn't get it, and even by the end, I had no reason to believe this romance, which is not great in a romance novel!
And regarding Mary...so, the girl has Down Syndrome, which the author explains in a brief note at the end, saying that the character is based off a couple of people she knows with Down Syndrome. I know that it is a spectrum and there are many different manifestations and presentations of the syndrome in different people. But I was pretty uncomfortable with Mary's portrayal. At first, she tells Robert she's 11, because she was put in the asylum after she turned 11 and since she hasn't had any birthday parties in there, she apparently thinks she hasn't gotten older. But we find out a bit later from Julie that she's actually 16. But she speaks and acts like a toddler. She calls horses "horsies" and when Robert asks if she wants to go feed them, she says, "I want to feed horsey". When he's going to take her on a picnic, she just keeps repeating to Julie "Pic-nic" with the hyphen on page. We're told she's smart but we're only shown her behaving like a small child. In the epilogue, we're told she's now working as a nanny at the reformed asylum, which...ooooookay. Of course people with Down Syndrome can have jobs and are capable of doing a lot, but it seems odd to have someone who talks and thinks and acts like a five year old taking care of children. I just wish the author hadn't tried to do this, because it felt uncomfortable most of the time.
And there is a very late-stage dramatic event that I just did not understand the reason for including, other than to convince us that Julie and Robert love each other super super strongly. Bleh.
Good premise, poor execution, basically.