4/10
October “Toby” Daye is finally getting married to Tybalt, the love of her life. For the wedding, she and a retinue of friends and family travel to Toronto, the fae seat of power in North America. But Toby realizes something is very wrong in the High Court. Shortly after her arrival, she foils an assassination attempt on High King Aethlin. Now Toby and her companions have to root out the instigator of a coup before it overthrows the monarchy and destabilizes the Westlands.
"Blundering into trouble isn’t my superpower, but it might as well be."
Review, content warnings, and series spoilers below.
Content warnings for the book: Depicted — Death, violence, self-harm.
Mentioned— Incest (kinda), genocide, mind control, abuse.
I’m sad to write this review, as I consider myself a fan of McGuire’s work. But this is the first October Daye book I’ve outright disliked. It’s got big problems, and highlights recent issues with the series that I can’t ignore anymore.
Maybe it’s wrong to be critical of When Sorrows Come, because it’s clearly meant to be a fanservice book. Toby and Tybalt, after much teasing, are finally getting married. It’s got the most snarky tone of the series. There’s lots of discussion about the inevitable drama and bloodshed that’s bound to complicate things. Toby and friends do what they do best: solving problems and getting stabbed in the process. As a whole, it’s a semi-comedic romp with characters you’re doubtlessly familiar with by now. But the whole time I was reading it, I couldn’t help but notice all the filler and think, for the third time in recent books, “Wow, this should have been a novella.”
Lower stakes adventures aren’t a bad thing; I’m not saying every entry needs to be an earth-shattering thrill ride. But in the latter half of the series, several books feel phoned in. Once Broken Faith (#10) and The Unkindest Tide (#13) have stock plots, throwaway villains, and conflicts that (seemingly) don’t impact the overarching story. I feel that both would have worked better as novellas, addressing the big Lore Stuff in each while avoiding the filler plots. Major developments aren’t necessarily tied to the main novels; just look at January’s resurrection. Unfortunately, When Sorrows Come fits into this category as well, featuring a generic assassination plot that feels tacked on at best. On its own, I probably wouldn’t care. But since it’s the third in a trend, and has additional problems, I’m apprehensive about where the series is headed.
I do have some positive things to say about When Sorrows Come. The snarky tone and self-aware quips are pretty funny. There’s a joke early on about “working for a queen” that actually made me laugh out loud. Many beloved characters show up, and while some cameos are expected, others are honestly surprising. As always, The Luidaeg is wonderful. I’m happy that Walther continues to be important, as it’s rare to see good trans rep in media. While there’s side character bloat, I generally like the recurring ones, so it’s not so bad. Though I wish they got more individual attention.
There’s a little character development with Quentin, exploring his complicated relationship with Aethlin and Maida. It makes sense that he’d be resentful toward his parents, since they literally abandoned him and cut off all social ties— even though we know mind control was to blame. So it’s nice to see that bit of extra depth. This also ties into “mother” vs “mom” and “father” vs “dad”, which is a running theme in the book. Aethlin himself fluctuates between the level-headed leader we’ve seen previously, an idiot for the sake of plot, and a complete asshole. But since this is the first book to really focus on him, I’ll chalk it up to “hidden depths” and move on.
I did like some worldbuilding stuff. The concept of New York City being literally poisonous to Faerie is interesting. There’s mention of the few who manage to live in what is basically the fae version of nuclear fallout; that’s a great premise if we ever explore it in the future. I also like encountering a Library again, since they haven’t been relevant for a while. The one in Maples is atmospheric and much different than the one in the Mists. It’s a shame that this book retcons a major detail about Libraries, rendering the conflict in Chimes At Midnight (#7) nonsensical.
When Sorrows Come genuinely gets good around Chapter 18. It was at this point, over 80% through the book, that it finally felt like the series I know and love. This is exactly why I think a novella would have worked better— because I had to trudge through hundreds of pages to get to the stuff that matters. This section features the lead-up to the wedding, the wedding itself (+ some series-appropriate complications), and finally the reception novella, “And With Reveling”. I liked the part where Toby has to pick one of three roads and discovers Simon is her escort to the wedding. While his appearance in When Sorrows Come is brief, his scene functions as a touching “how far we’ve come” found family thing. The bonus novella has minor problems, but I enjoyed it as a fluffy epilogue for the book.
But the negatives outweigh the positives for me. I know I’ve been throwing the word “filler” around a lot, but it’s egregious. The plot feels shoehorned in because the book “needed” a conflict; it has no effect on the conclusion, except for an incident during the wedding that could easily be reworked. When Sorrows Come is full of filler on a micro scale, too. One example: we spend a solid two and a half chapters (1) identifying that a room is booby trapped, and (2) getting stuck in the booby trapped room and trying to get out of it. Despite there being an obvious way out, which was demonstrated in a previous chapter. Or Toby will summarize— in detail--something we literally just read. Or there’s the excessive amount of recap. I’m not kidding when I say the first 60 pages consist of series recap dumps and barebones setup. If we’re at the point where we need dozens of pages to summarize the story, wouldn’t it make more sense to have a skippable “story so far” section? Or limit the exposition to relevant information? I hate skimming stuff, but as someone familiar with the series, I was tempted.
There’s emotional character moments I swear we get every single book now. Tybalt being upset that Toby put herself in danger followed by some touching make-up scene. Toby being sad that someday Quentin, who she considers her son, is going to leave her and become High King of the Westlands. Some lines about how the terrifying Luidaeg is somehow a merciful, even kind person despite her tragic backstory. I dunno, man. These were meaningful the first time I read them, but they get rehashed so often they’ve lost all impact. Other scenes feel melodramatic, like Tybalt giving a passionate speech to Maida about how Toby is the most amazing woman he knows and sacrifices so much to help the Divided Courts. All while Toby is just like, bleeding into a jar as a favor to the woman so she doesn’t die. Maybe that’s a big ask for a normal person, but Toby bounces back from so many horrific injuries each book that this over-the-top reaction to a blood donation borders on parody.
Many plot points rely on idiocy. No one thinks to use readily available Tuatha portal magic to escape the booby trapped room. Early on, someone dies from contact poison… which everyone promptly forgets is a thing until it becomes relevant again. Toby and Aethlin go to interrogate a shapeshifting prisoner which can transform into anyone it sees, but bring Tybalt, whose hands are deadly weapons. These aren’t the only examples. The royal guards are incompetent, but at least that gets an explanation— though it’s weird that the most powerful court in North America is paralyzed without Toby’s intervention.
Finally, When Sorrows Come has big editorial issues, exacerbating all its other problems. There are sentences that were clearly mid-edit, but never got completed, so you end up with something incomprehensible. Others are grammatically correct, but phrased in such a confusing way that I had to reread them several times. Sometimes known information is presented as a total mystery, or retconned, or stuff gets repeated verbatim. One of several continuity errors is Toby telling Tybalt, with heartfelt sincerity, that she didn’t run headlong into danger without him… a chapter after she did exactly that. It’s not presented as an intentional lie, and Toby isn’t a duplicitous character. It’s an error. Mistakes absolutely happen, but there are so many in this book that it feels like an early draft. I’m not sure if When Sorrows Come was rushed out the door, or the editor barely checked it, or what.
I’m fond of this series; my frustrations come from a place of passion. October Daye is a daunting 15 books long, and I feel like it’s running out of steam. Toby is now so powerful and beloved that nothing feels like a real threat. 90+% of the bad things that happen in this series can be traced to Eira or Amandine… so what conflicts we get are rarely surprising. There’s still a few plot threads (the missing Queens, whatever is going on with Stacy’s bloodline, maybe Riordan?), but are they enough to hang another 5? 10? books on? We have at least 2 more confirmed with no end in sight. I’m concerned about future quality with this series, which is sad, because I know McGuire is passionate about it. Maybe there’s a Winter Long-style shakeup waiting in the wings that will make me eat my words. I genuinely hope that’s the case; I want October Daye to be the best it can be. But it’s hard not to feel discouraged.