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184 pages, Kindle Edition
Published April 10, 2021
Boy had a crush on Girl. Girl had a crush on Boy. Boy showed his feelings by bullying Girl. Girl ended up hating Boy. *Time jump a few years* Boy and Girl stumble across each other. Boy pisses off Girl. Girl avoids Boy. But Boy lusts after Girl, and wants her close, so he bribes her with a high paying job. Girl reluctantly accepts. Girl and Boy work together. Boy is mean to Girl. Girl gets angry. Girl and Boy have office sex. Boy pushes Girl away. Girl is angry at Boy. Boy needs Girl’s help. Girl helps Boy. Girl sees Boy’s soft side. Girl and Boy have hot tub sex. Boy pushes Girl away. Girl gets upset with Boy. Girl contemplates leaving. Girl sees Boy’s soft side again. Girl decides not to leave Boy.
Grammar: The noun “grief” is incorrectly used instead of the verb “grieve” in the following sentence, “I’d have to grief the loss of her as well.”
Formatting: Chapter fifteen names Lily as the narrator, when it’s actually Jax’s POV
Consistency: At 90% Lily addressed Guadalupe and Yulan as Ma and Pa for—what’s implied to be—the first time,
“I love you, Ma.” Guadalupe whipped around. “What did you just call me?” Tears crested my eyes. “Would that be okay to call you? Ma?”
This doesn’t make sense, given that Lily had already openly reference Yulan and Guadalupe as her parental figures at 21%,
I kissed his cheek. “Will do, Pa.” Then, I kissed Guadalupe’s cheek. “Love you, Ma.”