The middle half of this book is amazing, but fumbles at the beginning and end.
Deke Miller is a college freshman ruled by pride and a desire to play basketball in the NBA so that he can help his single mother and ailing little brother. When the story opens it is Halloween, only a couple months into his college career, and he has been injured a month earlier with an ACL tear.
When I say “ruled by pride,” I mean he is a decent kid, but his pride is so great that he would rather wear dirty clothing (and wait for away games where the hotels have laundry service) than admit he’s never learned how to do laundry before, would rather not do his assignments than admit he doesn’t understand the course material, would rather risk further injury than use his crutches at a party, and would rather double down when he pisses off a girl than admit he is wrong and apologize. The present moment trumps long-term consequences.
Unfortunately, when the character is introduced we understand very little of that. We meet a foul, arrogant, injured asshole who lives surrounded by dirty laundry and looks down on “try hards” who don’t coast through life like him. His teachers are all basketball fans and appear to be perfectly willing to let his classwork slide forever. Karma doesn’t seem to apply to him: every bad thing he does is rewarded and his first good deed is punished by an accidental stab, deep in the leg. I almost tossed aside the book in disgust.
I like LitRPG and was interested in this book purely to see how that was handled in a modern non-fantasy setting. The only reason I didn’t abandon this book was my desire to answer that question before I put the book down forever.
Then everything changed.
We learn that all the things Deke has been doing *do* have consequences, but those consequences are delayed. The teachers who “ignore” Deke’s classwork have actually been his problems to his coach instead of confronting him directly. He only learns how close he came to getting kicked out of college entirely after he starts getting his life together. This theme of instant gratification vs long term consequences continues throughout the book to great effect.
In Deke’s case, the program which is a staple of LitRPG starts converting his lifestyle choices from long term to instant consequences. His “Rudimentary Hygene” task is rewarded with a tiny amount of magical healing to his knee. Showing off to the girl in the rehab center instead of doing his exercises properly gets some of that healing reversed. The program treats alcohol as poison, inducing immediate (and very public) vomiting, and punishes ignoring the meal plan with explosive diarrhea. A bit at a time, pride is replaced by humility and the reader is introduced to the person under the facade who is great with kids his little brother’s age and is more a lost fish out of water instead of a raging asshole.
After a rough start, this middle half of this book is amazing.
Then the bad guys introduce themselves to Deke and, for a hidden organization of possible assassins, are about as subtle and secret as an exploding bomb.
How could Deke have warned his friends and family without revealing his secret? "Hey guys, that person making too good to be true offers to all of you is a scammer, not who he says he is. Ignore him." Scams of one type or another are a regular part of most reader's lives at this point.
Deke even goes so far as basically saying that to one friend when the offer to her sounds physically impossible. When the bad guys start offering more and more to everyone to pressure Deke, the effect becomes pathetic and comedic instead of ramping up the tension.
The premise is great. The characters are great, once you get to know them. Even the details on the dictatorial program improve the story in lots of interesting ways. The opening chapters drop what should have been a five-star book down to four. The cartoonish antagonist drops it farther.