2.0 - I am going to do my best not to be mean here, but boy oh boy is it going to be difficult.
This book was sorely in need of an editor. There were grammatical mistakes, spelling mistakes, and formatting mistakes on nearly every page. There were characters whose names changed after the first couple times they were introduced, a character who was mentioned and completely disappeared from the narrative, and just overall poor execution that sometimes made the book incomprehensible without context clues. I truly believe if the author had sent this to literally anyone else to proofread it would have been better, or at the very least there would’ve been less mistakes that made it seem like such immature fiction.
The plot itself was boring. Literally nothing but exposition happens for the first 100 pages. Don’t get me wrong, exposition is important, but not when it serves literally no meaning to the plot. We had this whole thing about her going to pick up her car from the police station and all these scenes where’s she’s walking around the house and discovering nothing new about it and they could’ve been completely cut and the book wouldn’t have lost anything. Again, if this book would’ve had an editor, I’m sure they would’ve been able to highlight these boring areas and suggested replacing them with important information like all the different types of supernatural creatures that exist in this world, which we don’t learn about until like 200 pages in. There were also so many moments of internal deliberation that felt copy pasted because she was just thinking the same thing over and over and coming to the same conclusion, so there was nothing insightful nor any ounce of change in those internal monologues. But when something did clearly change, we don’t get to see it! We just know that she suddenly understands her powers more because it fits the plot and she suddenly decides that she actually does want to end up with the guy. The narrative focuses on flat, non important moments rather than the dynamic moments full of change and that just makes it a drag.
The plot itself was fine. Predictable, had a few moments of fun humor in it. Had one fun twist. But overall, the actual plot is overshadowed by just how unedited the writing is. The writing and grammar is so bad that it takes focus away from the actual plot and makes it seem worse than it actually is. If the grammar and spelling had been perfect, I still would’ve found the plot mediocre at best, but maybe that’s just me.
The only reason this book isn’t getting rated one star is because I only rate DNFs one star. But this is the lowest possible two I could give. I sincerely hope for the future books in this series, the author hired an editor or at least a beta reader, but I don’t have much hope.