Well, this is disappointing. Not even past the first chapter and I’m packing it in.
1. Smack in the middle of an ‘escape’ sequence, one of the main characters stops for cake. He stops to take a plate of cake and eat a bite—with a fork no less. This isn’t witty. This isn’t daring. This is ridiculous.
2. Even worse, the deal breaker came on the next page. One character upends a barrel of COOKING OIL and the other main character throws a lit twist of newspaper into the pool that forms. Then, in the words of the author himself: "Flames quickly developed, and the entire dock became a sea of fire." COOKING. OIL. 🤦♀️ Paper burns at....huh...."Fahrenheit 451". A quick google search for accuracy reveals that the flash point of cooking oil is well over 500°F.
And that’s that. This many problems in the first few pages and I’m out. Too many authors out there who care enough to get things right to waste time on those who don’t.