I don't like leaving bad reviews, but I agreed to leave an honest review for receiving an ARC of this book, so here goes.
I think there's potential in this book and author. That being said, I really had to force myself to finish this book. I think the premise of the story has promise, but the execution was lacking.
*Possible spoilers*
1) Characters make leaps of logic without any in story clues provided by the author. Why is one of the main characters so suspicious of the queen? There's nothing in the story to make her suspicious - she just is.
2) The character relationships seem too easy. Everyone is too reasonable, even when they've been angry or upset with each other. Erayne accepts Nan's explanations calmly, even when receiving earth-shattering news. It didn't feel realistic.
3) Everyone smirks constantly on this book. I've seen very few people actually smirk in real life, but in this book all the characters smirk regularly, even when the storyline wouldn't call for smirking. The smirking happened so often and so regularly and so noticeably that it proved a disconnect for me with the story. I kept getting "kicked out" of the story because the smirking was so bothersome.
4) There were continuity issues within the book. These weren't huge, but big enough to make me flip back and forth in my Kindle edition. For instance, when Everson comes to get Jerra, it says there are a total of 10 soldiers. Several paragraphs later, it says Everson only has 3 men with him (and that remains true the rest of the book). When we first meet Jerra's parents (at the same point as the above example), we are told her father is Malone and her mother is Tamsin. That is immediately switched, and from there on out, Tamsin is her father's name and Malone her mother's. These are small, bit big enough to throw me out of reading enjoyment as I looked back and forth.
5) The story leaps around in, for me at least, a disjointed fashion. This is a normal tactic in fantasy stories, but I felt like it was rather poorly done here, leading to some choppy storytelling.
6) This is somewhat subjective, but the author's word choice was often poor, in my opinion.
Will I read book #2? Probably not. While I think the story has promise, there was too much that distracted me from the actual story.
I received a free copy of this book via Booksprout and am voluntarily leaving a review.