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PIP After her parent's death, has to make a new start. Pip's business venture brings her in contact with the local MC. Someone is trying to kill her but she won't go down without fighting. BRAND President of the Satan's Guardians MC Meets PIP and helps her with the threat she faces. Love conquers all but he has to fight for it Brand is book one in the Satan's Guardian MC story. The introduction to many characters and the life of the MC. This is not a hard-core read. Each of the books in the series covers one of the MC characters. They can be read as standalone but are best read in order. No cliff-hanger, no cheating, HEA The content is for mature audiences only 18+. Please do not read if sexual situations, violence, and explicit language offend you.
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Published April 16, 2021
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February 15, 2022
tried 3 times
I kept trying to read this book. The premise is SO promising and I really want to love it. My biggest problem is the vocabulary used. I’m aware of the fact that the author is British and admittedly have a few problems when people from other countries try to write “American” novels. I’ve read a few that have nailed it but most tend to just throw me off. While both countries speak English British authors tend to forget that we have 50 states and probably 10 times that many dialects. You will rarely, if ever, find someone saying “as she was a baker” or “as she was tired” and the phrase from the biker “we reside down the road” just tossed me right out of the story at 3% which is never a good sign. If you want to write “American” (specifically American Midwest or west) then you may want to spend some time in these areas and get a feel for the language and mannerisms. (Also, the name Shade? Because he wears “sunshades”… no.) I can suspend belief long enough to ignore the fact that a multimillionaire heiress is opening a diner in a rundown building in the middle of nowhere, I can even suspend it long enough to buy into the whole spending said millions getting a roadside diner up and running (it was a stretch though) but the flipping britishisms just kept causing my brain to stall. Really wish Amazon would come out with a button to show “you tried this, you didn’t like it, move on” or even a “this is a (biker, mafia, gangster) book written by a UK author” so I knew to expect a stumbling block in the narrative. Just my 2 cents
I kept trying to read this book. The premise is SO promising and I really want to love it. My biggest problem is the vocabulary used. I’m aware of the fact that the author is British and admittedly have a few problems when people from other countries try to write “American” novels. I’ve read a few that have nailed it but most tend to just throw me off. While both countries speak English British authors tend to forget that we have 50 states and probably 10 times that many dialects. You will rarely, if ever, find someone saying “as she was a baker” or “as she was tired” and the phrase from the biker “we reside down the road” just tossed me right out of the story at 3% which is never a good sign. If you want to write “American” (specifically American Midwest or west) then you may want to spend some time in these areas and get a feel for the language and mannerisms. (Also, the name Shade? Because he wears “sunshades”… no.) I can suspend belief long enough to ignore the fact that a multimillionaire heiress is opening a diner in a rundown building in the middle of nowhere, I can even suspend it long enough to buy into the whole spending said millions getting a roadside diner up and running (it was a stretch though) but the flipping britishisms just kept causing my brain to stall. Really wish Amazon would come out with a button to show “you tried this, you didn’t like it, move on” or even a “this is a (biker, mafia, gangster) book written by a UK author” so I knew to expect a stumbling block in the narrative. Just my 2 cents
January 12, 2023
I really liked this one. It was different from other books I've read. But I was kind of lost a couple of times where the story seemed to jump, and I would get confused.
May 16, 2023
This is big nope for me. I dnf at 65%. They’re not even a couple at this point but both had feelings for one another and she wanted to see where it could go once the suspense/threats against her were gone and he kept saying he knew she would be his o’l lady and the one for him but yet he sleeps with a club bunnie and she walks in on it. Nope nope nope.
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February 26, 2022
Piper (“Pip”) East lost her parents in an automobile accident and inherited a great deal of money which she decided to invest in a restaurant, after moving from Stanhope, Nebraska to Cougar Creek, Montana. While looking over her new property, she met Brand, the president of the Satan’s Guardian’s motorcycle club, and several MC brothers.
This book is pretty much about the relationships Pip establishes with the motorcycle club’s members and prospects. There isn’t a lot of chemistry between Pip and Brand; there’s more chemistry among Pip and the other MC brothers where friendships are forged pretty quickly. Pip is a strong female lead who stands up to alpha-male Brand and doesn’t fall apart just because he is swaggering “man-meat,” as she describes him. Their relationship is appealing, but not well developed. The premise of the story is interesting and would have been worth following…but…oh, the errors are outrageous and cause no end of difficultly in reading the book.
The book is written in a stream of consciousness style which is infinitely difficult to read. It appears to have been dictated because some of the book’s errors are those that commonly occur when dictating software misinterprets the spoken word. Dictated passages need to be especially scrutinized for mistakes. If parts of this book were dictated, then those passages appear not to have been reviewed.
At 12% completion, I started to speed read because the mistakes in grammar, punctuation, sentence structure and point of view (POV) were interrupting the flow of the story. At 25% completion, I had to pick up the pace again and began to skim; the mistakes were growing more and more egregious, and I found myself aggravated. At 33% completion, I started skipping pages and found I wasn’t missing much.
While the plot and storyline are solid, the execution does not do justice to the book. Even reading fast, it is hard to miss all the mistakes which proliferate on each page. The most obvious error, and first to be noticed, is verb tense consistency. There are six basic verb tenses: simple present, present perfect, simple past, past perfect, future, and future perfect. All writers need to know and understand how to use these tenses, or they will (and this is a solid gold guarantee) lead their readers astray. That is what has happened here. A single sentence frequently contains multiple inappropriate verb tenses…and that renders the book nearly unreadable.
The first paragraph in Chapter 1 begins using past tense; after the first sentence, the writer switches to present tense. The next paragraph is back to past tense as Piper reminisces. In mid-paragraph, present tense returns. The third paragraph is a mix of tenses. And so it goes…for the entire book. The writer is relentless in her misuse of verb tenses, and it throws the story off track so the poor reader can do nothing but follow along in a confused state.
Here are some examples:
==) “In the will, they advised that she keep her 50% share of the partnership as a silent partner, but once a year, she has an independent auditor in to make sure all was running as it should.” In this single sentence, the writer employs simple past (“they advised”), simple present (“she has”), then adds a past progressive (“was running”).
==) “She didn’t need anything to drag her down as her parents wouldn’t want her to be held back with things that could be replaced, her memories will never go, and that is what was most important to her.” Wow. This sentence is a mess and difficult to read. It’s a run-on sentence with inconsistent verb tenses.
==) “The driver startled her out of her thoughts, calling Pip to come and check out the trailer and show her how to use everything now it is all set up and working.” It is so frustrating to read this!
==) “I give Cali the instructions of where I put the folder and told him to make sure Coal was left in the trailer….” Here, the writer starts with simple present tense (“I give”) then switches to simple past tense (“told him” and “was left”). Arghh!
==) “The following morning, I have a shower and dressed early.” Again, inconsistent verb tenses in the same sentence.
==) “I organized that with my bank and then rang him back to let him know it’s done. He confirms the money has been transferred.” Again, the writer confuses past with simple present tenses.
Changing tense is acceptable under certain circumstances, but not in mid-sentence. A narrator’s current thoughts could be written in simple present tense (a one-time event or action) or present perfect (an ongoing event or action that started in the past). Events that occurred previously are generally told in simple past (an event occurred and ended in the past) or past perfect (an event occurred in the past before another event happened also in the past). Things that haven’t happened yet are told using future tense (an event which will occur once) or future perfect (an action that will be completed at a specific time in the future). This entire book is a hodgepodge of verb tenses sprinkled about willy-nilly. It makes for a very poor reading experience.
Another major problem is the point of view (POV). First-person is sometimes used inappropriately; the first-person narrator knows too much, beyond her limited POV. At other times, the POV slips. The writer starts a narration with one person’s POV, then switches to another or has the narrator talking about herself/himself in the third person.
Here are some examples:
==) Pip is the narrator. “…Spider decides to continue anyway as Shoes is on patrol and keeping Pip safe.” Since Pip is narrating, Shoes should be “on patrol and keeping ME safe.”
==) Liza, a friend of Pip, is beaten and presumably left for dead by her boss. She describes it in excruciating detail. Yet, when she awakens in a hospital and is asked if she knows her name, she narrates, “I blink at him, screw up my face, and think, but I have no idea who the hell I am.” She has lost her memory and doesn’t recover it through the rest of the book. However, she just finished narrating the ordeal she went through, so clearly, she remembered. This is where third person narrative would have been better used.
==) Pip is narrating. “I am fast asleep. I miss the fact that Brand, Shades, and Torch have all looked into my room while sleeping to check I was all right.” This sentence is wrong on several levels. Foremost is that she tells us she is fast asleep. In first person narration she is not omniscient, and she cannot know what happens beyond her own observations. She cannot know what happens while she is fast asleep. If the writer wants us to know that people care enough to check on her, the action needs to be told from another POV.
As an aside, the second sentence makes it sound as if Brand, Shades, and Torch are all sleeping while they check on Pip. Dangling modifier, anyone…?
The writer also likes gerunds (nouns ending in “-ing”). They are peppered all over the book. They can be effective when judiciously used, but the writer appears to confuse them at times with past participles. These rules do not have to matter to a reader; BUT if they are not followed by the writer, it will leave the reader perplexed and ultimately annoyed.
Punctuation is also problematic for the writer. Here are some examples:
==) “We can maybe do something to lessen your hour’s babe.” That should be, “…lessen your hours, babe” unless some hour has a babe: the writer has made “hour” possessive.
==) “Shades not about Cali?” Without appropriate punctuation, this sentence is open for interpretation. I think, but am not positive, that Pip is asking Shades if Cali is available so how about, “Shades, is Cali around?” Simple and unambiguous.
==) “You got Shades, son, here?” This looks as if the speaker is talking to his son, asking if he has sunglasses on him. I think this is what the writer means: “You got Shades’ son here?”
==) “The work, your parents, were doing was all legit work.” The commas are superfluous and cause the sentence to look like a list of items. It should read, “The work your parents were doing was all legit.”
==) “…her parent’s death….” Both parents died in a car crash. It should read, “…her parents’ death….”
==) This paragraph is missing important quotation marks. It’s Brand speaking to some of his MC brothers. “We need to stop him. I’m going to speak to Forest about setting a trap. I tell them all. The last thing we need now is him taking us by surprise, we need to be the ones in charge, or Pip will pay the ultimate price, and I’m not willing to risk that.” Some of the paragraph is internal thought. Because the quotation marks surround the entire paragraph, we have no idea where his speaking ends and his thoughts begin. We know some of this is internal because of this little sentence: “I tell them all.” Most likely, he is not telling them that he is telling them all.
Capitalization appears problematic for the writer as well. For example:
==) “he pats me on the shoulder and takes off for town.” The first word of a sentence should be capitalized.
==) “he doesn’t explain further.” Same problem: the first word of this sentence should be capitalized.
==) “My parents’ Will was quite specific….” The word “will,” in this case, is not a proper noun; it’s a document and should not be capitalized.
==) “I grab a bottle of southern comfort because it is my all-time favorite drink….” Southern Comfort is a brand name (a proper noun) and should be capitalized.
There are oddities in the book that are sometimes laughable, perhaps due to the differences between British and American English? For example:
==) Pip and Sandy are baking cakes, brownies, and muffins in the MC clubhouse kitchen. Pip is pleased that the kitchen has double stoves. The cakes are “in or out of the stoves.” Pretty sure the baked goods need an oven and in my visits to Great Britain, I’ve seen ovens…heard them referred to as ovens, as well.
==) “…it confirms something about this place or myself is not right.” Is this a usual turn of phrase in the UK? It sounds as if the writer is telling us that something is wrong with Pip. It’s implied, but there is no foundation laid for this speculation.
==) “Ninety minutes later, she is hot and flagging….” What does that even mean? What is flagging? I have no idea about this usage.
==) “…getting up, cook breakfast, potter around, afternoon cook meal, evening potter around.” Yikes. Weird sentence. AND…in America, it’s “putter,” not “potter.” A potter makes pottery. In the late 1800s, in the UK, “potter” was a variant of “putter.” But the book takes place in 21st century America.
==) The word, “bloody,” is used a lot. In America, it is not an expletive. It refers to blood. In the UK, I’ve heard it used as an expression of annoyance.
Another problem is with the characters in the book: they all sound alike. They talk the same way, using the same expressions, in the same cadence. Brand, the president of the MC sounds just like Pip. So do Shades, Shoes, Thunder, Billy ‘The Kid,’ her friend Liza, and even Officer Tailor (aka Officer Sleaze). There is little variation in their sentence structures, word choices, or tone.
Pip is written to be an intelligent, bold, determined woman. But her actions contradict these characterizations. For instance, without batting an eye, Pip grabs a gun, shimmies up a tree and shoots a man who is shooting at them. But she screams at the drop of a hat and the men come running. Is that a device of hers? Also, she is not an astute businesswoman. She tells absolute strangers how much money she has for a construction job she wants done. Then, she tells them if that’s not enough money, there’s more where that came from. We’re talking about millions of dollars. It is laughable and cuts into the character’s credibility. And she is pretty funny regarding the internet. She states, “I need to get the internet up and running as quickly as possible.” I think I know what the writer means, but that statement is downright funny. Pip wants access to the internet from her place of business and her residence. She isn’t going to delve into the internet itself. I think.
Beyond what’s already been mentioned, there are numerous errors that stop a reader in place and pause forward movement through the book. Here are some examples:
==) “I was scared when he told me to spread um.” The expression is to “spread them,” and the contraction is “spread ‘em.” “Um” is a pause in speech.
==) “I feel myself starting to getting pissed….” Too many -ing words here. Perhaps, “I feel myself starting to get pissed.”
==) “Tapping on the door, then Ace asking if I’m in and have a minute.” This isn’t a complete sentence; it’s a dependent clause hanging on to nothing.
==) “Awe shit, I just wanted to sneak out….” Unless Pip, the narrator, holds shit in awe, that should be “Aw, shit…” with appropriate punctuation.
==) “…wrapping me uptight in his arms….” Unless Pip, the narrator, is truly uptight, she is being wrapped up tight in Brand’s arms.
==) The bikers don’t sound like bikers (and swearing does not a biker make). An excellent example of this is when Thunder talks about how the kitchen “smells divine” when Pip is cooking. Really? An old, rough, tough biker isn’t going to say a kitchen smells divine. Nope. I don't think so.
A note at the beginning of the book stresses that the writer lives in the United Kingdom, presumably a British citizen, because she does not speak American English. The book’s sentence structure is “off” and seems foreign. However, there is no excuse whatsoever for a writer, whose native language is English, to ignore rules of grammar. It further states that “…although some words/terms you may think are incorrect are correct in one or more states.” Nope. There are 50 states and while dialects abound, the writer does not make use of any American dialect. As a matter of fact, there are no unique Americanisms in this book. I think that little note is meant to excuse the monumental number of errors in this book.
The writer chose to place this book in Montana. So, when the writer utilizes terms that are not used in Montana (or any of the remaining 49 states) it causes a dissonance. It’s jarring, not cute. On the other hand, if the story had taken place somewhere in the United Kingdom, then words like “bloody” would be just fine. The beginning note states further that the writer had American alpha and beta readers who corrected errors. I am not sure what types of errors they were expected to find. Since they are described as American readers, then perhaps they were meant only to find words peculiar to the American reader and bring them to the writer’s attention. If so, they missed some.
I’ve always believed that a book deserves the best possible editing and proofreading possible. The editing for most books is performed multiple times, proofreading being a final step before publication. Proofreading and editing are necessary to improve the quality of writing. Even if this writer’s alpha and beta readers were expected to find errors other than British obscurities, they cannot replace an editor nor a proofreader.
I cannot believe this book was professionally edited or proofread – the errors are too flagrant and numerous to have passed an editor’s or a proofreader’s inspection. If indeed the book was edited and proofread, then it would seem these worthies did not tell the writer what they found…OR…the writer completely ignored their findings.
I rated this book 2 stars. If cleaned up, edited, proofread, and corrected, I think this could become a good book. The plot is intriguing. The characters hold a reader’s attention. It wants a major rewrite and I hope the writer will consider doing that onerous and tiring – but SO worthwhile – chore. I would like to reread this book in its rewritten form. However, I am not planning to read another book by his author. Amazon shows 10 books written in this series. I cannot imagine slogging through any more of these books if they are riddled, as this one is, with so many distressing flaws and shortcomings.
This book is pretty much about the relationships Pip establishes with the motorcycle club’s members and prospects. There isn’t a lot of chemistry between Pip and Brand; there’s more chemistry among Pip and the other MC brothers where friendships are forged pretty quickly. Pip is a strong female lead who stands up to alpha-male Brand and doesn’t fall apart just because he is swaggering “man-meat,” as she describes him. Their relationship is appealing, but not well developed. The premise of the story is interesting and would have been worth following…but…oh, the errors are outrageous and cause no end of difficultly in reading the book.
The book is written in a stream of consciousness style which is infinitely difficult to read. It appears to have been dictated because some of the book’s errors are those that commonly occur when dictating software misinterprets the spoken word. Dictated passages need to be especially scrutinized for mistakes. If parts of this book were dictated, then those passages appear not to have been reviewed.
At 12% completion, I started to speed read because the mistakes in grammar, punctuation, sentence structure and point of view (POV) were interrupting the flow of the story. At 25% completion, I had to pick up the pace again and began to skim; the mistakes were growing more and more egregious, and I found myself aggravated. At 33% completion, I started skipping pages and found I wasn’t missing much.
While the plot and storyline are solid, the execution does not do justice to the book. Even reading fast, it is hard to miss all the mistakes which proliferate on each page. The most obvious error, and first to be noticed, is verb tense consistency. There are six basic verb tenses: simple present, present perfect, simple past, past perfect, future, and future perfect. All writers need to know and understand how to use these tenses, or they will (and this is a solid gold guarantee) lead their readers astray. That is what has happened here. A single sentence frequently contains multiple inappropriate verb tenses…and that renders the book nearly unreadable.
The first paragraph in Chapter 1 begins using past tense; after the first sentence, the writer switches to present tense. The next paragraph is back to past tense as Piper reminisces. In mid-paragraph, present tense returns. The third paragraph is a mix of tenses. And so it goes…for the entire book. The writer is relentless in her misuse of verb tenses, and it throws the story off track so the poor reader can do nothing but follow along in a confused state.
Here are some examples:
==) “In the will, they advised that she keep her 50% share of the partnership as a silent partner, but once a year, she has an independent auditor in to make sure all was running as it should.” In this single sentence, the writer employs simple past (“they advised”), simple present (“she has”), then adds a past progressive (“was running”).
==) “She didn’t need anything to drag her down as her parents wouldn’t want her to be held back with things that could be replaced, her memories will never go, and that is what was most important to her.” Wow. This sentence is a mess and difficult to read. It’s a run-on sentence with inconsistent verb tenses.
==) “The driver startled her out of her thoughts, calling Pip to come and check out the trailer and show her how to use everything now it is all set up and working.” It is so frustrating to read this!
==) “I give Cali the instructions of where I put the folder and told him to make sure Coal was left in the trailer….” Here, the writer starts with simple present tense (“I give”) then switches to simple past tense (“told him” and “was left”). Arghh!
==) “The following morning, I have a shower and dressed early.” Again, inconsistent verb tenses in the same sentence.
==) “I organized that with my bank and then rang him back to let him know it’s done. He confirms the money has been transferred.” Again, the writer confuses past with simple present tenses.
Changing tense is acceptable under certain circumstances, but not in mid-sentence. A narrator’s current thoughts could be written in simple present tense (a one-time event or action) or present perfect (an ongoing event or action that started in the past). Events that occurred previously are generally told in simple past (an event occurred and ended in the past) or past perfect (an event occurred in the past before another event happened also in the past). Things that haven’t happened yet are told using future tense (an event which will occur once) or future perfect (an action that will be completed at a specific time in the future). This entire book is a hodgepodge of verb tenses sprinkled about willy-nilly. It makes for a very poor reading experience.
Another major problem is the point of view (POV). First-person is sometimes used inappropriately; the first-person narrator knows too much, beyond her limited POV. At other times, the POV slips. The writer starts a narration with one person’s POV, then switches to another or has the narrator talking about herself/himself in the third person.
Here are some examples:
==) Pip is the narrator. “…Spider decides to continue anyway as Shoes is on patrol and keeping Pip safe.” Since Pip is narrating, Shoes should be “on patrol and keeping ME safe.”
==) Liza, a friend of Pip, is beaten and presumably left for dead by her boss. She describes it in excruciating detail. Yet, when she awakens in a hospital and is asked if she knows her name, she narrates, “I blink at him, screw up my face, and think, but I have no idea who the hell I am.” She has lost her memory and doesn’t recover it through the rest of the book. However, she just finished narrating the ordeal she went through, so clearly, she remembered. This is where third person narrative would have been better used.
==) Pip is narrating. “I am fast asleep. I miss the fact that Brand, Shades, and Torch have all looked into my room while sleeping to check I was all right.” This sentence is wrong on several levels. Foremost is that she tells us she is fast asleep. In first person narration she is not omniscient, and she cannot know what happens beyond her own observations. She cannot know what happens while she is fast asleep. If the writer wants us to know that people care enough to check on her, the action needs to be told from another POV.
As an aside, the second sentence makes it sound as if Brand, Shades, and Torch are all sleeping while they check on Pip. Dangling modifier, anyone…?
The writer also likes gerunds (nouns ending in “-ing”). They are peppered all over the book. They can be effective when judiciously used, but the writer appears to confuse them at times with past participles. These rules do not have to matter to a reader; BUT if they are not followed by the writer, it will leave the reader perplexed and ultimately annoyed.
Punctuation is also problematic for the writer. Here are some examples:
==) “We can maybe do something to lessen your hour’s babe.” That should be, “…lessen your hours, babe” unless some hour has a babe: the writer has made “hour” possessive.
==) “Shades not about Cali?” Without appropriate punctuation, this sentence is open for interpretation. I think, but am not positive, that Pip is asking Shades if Cali is available so how about, “Shades, is Cali around?” Simple and unambiguous.
==) “You got Shades, son, here?” This looks as if the speaker is talking to his son, asking if he has sunglasses on him. I think this is what the writer means: “You got Shades’ son here?”
==) “The work, your parents, were doing was all legit work.” The commas are superfluous and cause the sentence to look like a list of items. It should read, “The work your parents were doing was all legit.”
==) “…her parent’s death….” Both parents died in a car crash. It should read, “…her parents’ death….”
==) This paragraph is missing important quotation marks. It’s Brand speaking to some of his MC brothers. “We need to stop him. I’m going to speak to Forest about setting a trap. I tell them all. The last thing we need now is him taking us by surprise, we need to be the ones in charge, or Pip will pay the ultimate price, and I’m not willing to risk that.” Some of the paragraph is internal thought. Because the quotation marks surround the entire paragraph, we have no idea where his speaking ends and his thoughts begin. We know some of this is internal because of this little sentence: “I tell them all.” Most likely, he is not telling them that he is telling them all.
Capitalization appears problematic for the writer as well. For example:
==) “he pats me on the shoulder and takes off for town.” The first word of a sentence should be capitalized.
==) “he doesn’t explain further.” Same problem: the first word of this sentence should be capitalized.
==) “My parents’ Will was quite specific….” The word “will,” in this case, is not a proper noun; it’s a document and should not be capitalized.
==) “I grab a bottle of southern comfort because it is my all-time favorite drink….” Southern Comfort is a brand name (a proper noun) and should be capitalized.
There are oddities in the book that are sometimes laughable, perhaps due to the differences between British and American English? For example:
==) Pip and Sandy are baking cakes, brownies, and muffins in the MC clubhouse kitchen. Pip is pleased that the kitchen has double stoves. The cakes are “in or out of the stoves.” Pretty sure the baked goods need an oven and in my visits to Great Britain, I’ve seen ovens…heard them referred to as ovens, as well.
==) “…it confirms something about this place or myself is not right.” Is this a usual turn of phrase in the UK? It sounds as if the writer is telling us that something is wrong with Pip. It’s implied, but there is no foundation laid for this speculation.
==) “Ninety minutes later, she is hot and flagging….” What does that even mean? What is flagging? I have no idea about this usage.
==) “…getting up, cook breakfast, potter around, afternoon cook meal, evening potter around.” Yikes. Weird sentence. AND…in America, it’s “putter,” not “potter.” A potter makes pottery. In the late 1800s, in the UK, “potter” was a variant of “putter.” But the book takes place in 21st century America.
==) The word, “bloody,” is used a lot. In America, it is not an expletive. It refers to blood. In the UK, I’ve heard it used as an expression of annoyance.
Another problem is with the characters in the book: they all sound alike. They talk the same way, using the same expressions, in the same cadence. Brand, the president of the MC sounds just like Pip. So do Shades, Shoes, Thunder, Billy ‘The Kid,’ her friend Liza, and even Officer Tailor (aka Officer Sleaze). There is little variation in their sentence structures, word choices, or tone.
Pip is written to be an intelligent, bold, determined woman. But her actions contradict these characterizations. For instance, without batting an eye, Pip grabs a gun, shimmies up a tree and shoots a man who is shooting at them. But she screams at the drop of a hat and the men come running. Is that a device of hers? Also, she is not an astute businesswoman. She tells absolute strangers how much money she has for a construction job she wants done. Then, she tells them if that’s not enough money, there’s more where that came from. We’re talking about millions of dollars. It is laughable and cuts into the character’s credibility. And she is pretty funny regarding the internet. She states, “I need to get the internet up and running as quickly as possible.” I think I know what the writer means, but that statement is downright funny. Pip wants access to the internet from her place of business and her residence. She isn’t going to delve into the internet itself. I think.
Beyond what’s already been mentioned, there are numerous errors that stop a reader in place and pause forward movement through the book. Here are some examples:
==) “I was scared when he told me to spread um.” The expression is to “spread them,” and the contraction is “spread ‘em.” “Um” is a pause in speech.
==) “I feel myself starting to getting pissed….” Too many -ing words here. Perhaps, “I feel myself starting to get pissed.”
==) “Tapping on the door, then Ace asking if I’m in and have a minute.” This isn’t a complete sentence; it’s a dependent clause hanging on to nothing.
==) “Awe shit, I just wanted to sneak out….” Unless Pip, the narrator, holds shit in awe, that should be “Aw, shit…” with appropriate punctuation.
==) “…wrapping me uptight in his arms….” Unless Pip, the narrator, is truly uptight, she is being wrapped up tight in Brand’s arms.
==) The bikers don’t sound like bikers (and swearing does not a biker make). An excellent example of this is when Thunder talks about how the kitchen “smells divine” when Pip is cooking. Really? An old, rough, tough biker isn’t going to say a kitchen smells divine. Nope. I don't think so.
A note at the beginning of the book stresses that the writer lives in the United Kingdom, presumably a British citizen, because she does not speak American English. The book’s sentence structure is “off” and seems foreign. However, there is no excuse whatsoever for a writer, whose native language is English, to ignore rules of grammar. It further states that “…although some words/terms you may think are incorrect are correct in one or more states.” Nope. There are 50 states and while dialects abound, the writer does not make use of any American dialect. As a matter of fact, there are no unique Americanisms in this book. I think that little note is meant to excuse the monumental number of errors in this book.
The writer chose to place this book in Montana. So, when the writer utilizes terms that are not used in Montana (or any of the remaining 49 states) it causes a dissonance. It’s jarring, not cute. On the other hand, if the story had taken place somewhere in the United Kingdom, then words like “bloody” would be just fine. The beginning note states further that the writer had American alpha and beta readers who corrected errors. I am not sure what types of errors they were expected to find. Since they are described as American readers, then perhaps they were meant only to find words peculiar to the American reader and bring them to the writer’s attention. If so, they missed some.
I’ve always believed that a book deserves the best possible editing and proofreading possible. The editing for most books is performed multiple times, proofreading being a final step before publication. Proofreading and editing are necessary to improve the quality of writing. Even if this writer’s alpha and beta readers were expected to find errors other than British obscurities, they cannot replace an editor nor a proofreader.
I cannot believe this book was professionally edited or proofread – the errors are too flagrant and numerous to have passed an editor’s or a proofreader’s inspection. If indeed the book was edited and proofread, then it would seem these worthies did not tell the writer what they found…OR…the writer completely ignored their findings.
I rated this book 2 stars. If cleaned up, edited, proofread, and corrected, I think this could become a good book. The plot is intriguing. The characters hold a reader’s attention. It wants a major rewrite and I hope the writer will consider doing that onerous and tiring – but SO worthwhile – chore. I would like to reread this book in its rewritten form. However, I am not planning to read another book by his author. Amazon shows 10 books written in this series. I cannot imagine slogging through any more of these books if they are riddled, as this one is, with so many distressing flaws and shortcomings.
December 8, 2021
Pip wanted a fresh start with a business plan that has her working closely with the Satan's Guardians MC. She catches the attention of Brand, who is the President of the MC. Brand though is not sure what to do with Pip, he wants her but does she want him?
I liked the overall story but Pip and Brand do not really spend all that much time together so the chemistry was not there until they finally hooked up. Good series, liked where this one went and definitely will check out more in the series.
I liked the overall story but Pip and Brand do not really spend all that much time together so the chemistry was not there until they finally hooked up. Good series, liked where this one went and definitely will check out more in the series.
October 30, 2021
I found this book thru a recommendation by kindle and I must say I wasn't disappointed. Brand is Prez of the club while Pip is new to town after her parents die. Follow Brand and Pip as they navigate thru a new relationship that has twist and turns everywhere. There is traitors, killers, and crooked cops after Pip. Will Brand be able to save her and their relationship? It's a definite 5 star book.
October 17, 2023
This one was a bit odd for me. At the start, the way things were written seemed off, not sure what it was but it almost made me dnf the book. It got better, but here and there I would find the same thing. What kept me reading was that I liked Pip and she didn't react in any way you would think. I liked how she instantly trusted the MC, liked the relationship she developed with so many of the members, especially the old crew! I know there was supposed to be some big epic romance between Pip and Brand, but it wasn't there. Brand told her early on he was interested, but never really made a move, then did the stupid boy thing and made Pip run. Turns out things weren't 100% like they looked, just 95%, which still wasn't good.
By developing all the relationships she did in the MC, Pip had so many running to help her when she needed it and boy did she need it. It was nice to see things get resolved and that Pip could start living her new life like she planned, but now with a bunch of bikers.
By developing all the relationships she did in the MC, Pip had so many running to help her when she needed it and boy did she need it. It was nice to see things get resolved and that Pip could start living her new life like she planned, but now with a bunch of bikers.
March 18, 2023
There's no romance. Yes there's an HEA but it's just as story about an M/C
October 20, 2021
Great book
This is one awesome story filled with the most interesting characters. This Brotherhood of bikers, takes a woman into their hearts and protects her without her being one of them. She's new in town a chef with a twist, she totes a gun and knows how to use it. Come along enjoy the story filled with everything from sluts to dirty cops , plenty of action, a few twists and turns, and an HEA.
This is one awesome story filled with the most interesting characters. This Brotherhood of bikers, takes a woman into their hearts and protects her without her being one of them. She's new in town a chef with a twist, she totes a gun and knows how to use it. Come along enjoy the story filled with everything from sluts to dirty cops , plenty of action, a few twists and turns, and an HEA.
October 7, 2021
Brand and Pip
This is my first time reading this author and I found this story to be very creative and an interesting aspect with the different characters. Brand is the President of Satan's Guardians and they have several different businesses in this small town and one of those is a construction company, which comes in very handy as Pip moved here to completely refurbish a building into a restaurant and it has an apartment upstairs for her bestfriend Liza for when she finishes her contract catering service in Nebraska. Sadly Pip's parents were killed in a vehicle accident and she soon learns that it was deliberate and the culprit was one of the partners within their law office, but it was also discovered that this evil and disgusting greedy bastard was money laundering and also helping the cartel with drugs and sex trafficking. The FBI was called in and it was also discovered that the local cop and some of the club bunnies were trying to help get Pip killed. They all got what they deserved in the end. Happy reading.
This is my first time reading this author and I found this story to be very creative and an interesting aspect with the different characters. Brand is the President of Satan's Guardians and they have several different businesses in this small town and one of those is a construction company, which comes in very handy as Pip moved here to completely refurbish a building into a restaurant and it has an apartment upstairs for her bestfriend Liza for when she finishes her contract catering service in Nebraska. Sadly Pip's parents were killed in a vehicle accident and she soon learns that it was deliberate and the culprit was one of the partners within their law office, but it was also discovered that this evil and disgusting greedy bastard was money laundering and also helping the cartel with drugs and sex trafficking. The FBI was called in and it was also discovered that the local cop and some of the club bunnies were trying to help get Pip killed. They all got what they deserved in the end. Happy reading.
June 30, 2025
I ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!
This book had me consumed from the first chapter. Pip is a sweet, kind, caring woman who's as beautiful on the inside as she is on the outside and kind of a bad*ss. Lol. I love when a heroine is tough but vulnerable. Her character is so easy to love with her huge heart. She's like a breath of fresh air to the Satan's Guardians MC. Brand is the President of the MC and is attracted to her the first time he meets Pip, she's like a tornado that has just blown into town and has sucked them all in and makes them all sit up and take notice. The entire MC Brotherhood is drawn to her. She has a tendency to lift everyone spirits. This book is full of excitement and suspense. I laughed and I cried and at times I wanted to throw my Kindle across the room. Lol. This is my first book by this Author, her writing style makes it easy to engage the reader and I am looking forward to the next book. This book is very entertaining and the characters are easy to love. I highly recommend this book to everyone.
September 13, 2021
I found this book by happenstance so downloaded it on KU. I found the book engaging and well written. The the the men of Satan’s Guardians the are loyal to each other and protective of women. Pip is the greatest she loves whole heartedly. Brand is a force of nature and Pip is the perfect match to balance him and be the First Lady of the MC! I bought the rest of the series watch out for the old boys!
May 17, 2021
Happy find
Came across Jan Daelman and what a wonderful surprise. Me Daelman brings u a MC book with all the danger, intrigue,sexy add men. But Pip is the kick was female starting over meeting Brand and his crew. When I mean different it's not what bam and the couple are in bed. Brand screws up like every make and Pip makes him work for it. Beautiful written a page turner. Highly recommend
Came across Jan Daelman and what a wonderful surprise. Me Daelman brings u a MC book with all the danger, intrigue,sexy add men. But Pip is the kick was female starting over meeting Brand and his crew. When I mean different it's not what bam and the couple are in bed. Brand screws up like every make and Pip makes him work for it. Beautiful written a page turner. Highly recommend
October 19, 2021
It was okay
While the story seemed interesting, the writing style was distracting. The sentence structure was unusual and the writer had a habit of saying things like, "as I was tired" or "as it was a long time I've had anything to eat" way too much. It sounds as if English isn't her first language.
While the story seemed interesting, the writing style was distracting. The sentence structure was unusual and the writer had a habit of saying things like, "as I was tired" or "as it was a long time I've had anything to eat" way too much. It sounds as if English isn't her first language.
April 25, 2021
Okay, this book needs to be edited! The story itself was cliché, but I could’ve dealt with that. What I can’t deal with is subpar writing styles and bad gramma in published books! It was like I was reading a Wattpad book written by a 14 year old.
May 26, 2021
I just love to discover new authors! The story line is great, Pip and Brand are perfect for each other. I love all the characters, especially the "old guys"and can not wait for more of their stories and I can't wait to see how she develops as an author.
August 22, 2021
Start of something good
First book I’ve read from Jan Daelman. I can’t wait to read the rest of this series, characters are relatable and the story line is fast flowing but in depth as well.
First book I’ve read from Jan Daelman. I can’t wait to read the rest of this series, characters are relatable and the story line is fast flowing but in depth as well.
August 10, 2022
Umm
Is this author an adult? The book needs a ton of editing and a re-write would really help. Things are choppy and abrupt. I will not recommend this book. The man on the book cover is horrendous as well. Eww.
Is this author an adult? The book needs a ton of editing and a re-write would really help. Things are choppy and abrupt. I will not recommend this book. The man on the book cover is horrendous as well. Eww.
September 30, 2021
Nope!
Nope! Couldn't finish it. The writing was just awful! Just read the blurb. It's better than the actual book. Don't waste your time on this drivel!
Nope! Couldn't finish it. The writing was just awful! Just read the blurb. It's better than the actual book. Don't waste your time on this drivel!
November 3, 2022
DNF @43%
This was just awful.
Honestly, the best thing about this book is the blurb!
Firstly, the guy on the cover is in no way attractive, but I am aware that is a personal preference so I don't count that in my review. It just would've been nice to have at least ONE positive thing to write about.
The story starts out in 3rd person; again, I am not a fan, but when done well it doesn't harm the storytelling. This was NOT done well. There are times the author is speaking presently of past events but she states them as though they are presently happening, it was confusing. There were MANY times the author just switched to 1st person, sometimes in the middle of the page, sometimes in the middle of a sentence. It was jarring.
For the love of everything holy, PLEASE see an editor... to fix and eliminate: the past/present tense switches, switching from 3rd to 1st person narration, and the TERRIBLE use of punctuation (why are there SO MANY UNNECESSARY COMMAS?!?!?)
Misc stuff that did not work:
-choppy and terrible the flow of this book , so I could barely stay in the story
-the dialogue, what little there was, was SO IMMATURE
-everything is told not shown, which made reading this such a chore.
-Brand just pops up in the story randomly then disappears for stretches, making it hard to remember or even care that he exists.
-the only decently fleshed out character was Pip and she was like a 12 year old with a huge bank account
-there is ZERO chemistry between Brand and Pip
-WHERE is the romance.. at 43% there has been no flirting and one quick peck after Pip was in a car accident (I do not count this)
-I don't see how this is an MC story, minus the "bunnies" .... this is more of a "local construction crew helps the new-to-town damsel in distress" story..
In short.. this book was trash and I WILL NOT be continuing this series or anything more by this author. This was just.. bad. No thanks!
This was just awful.
Honestly, the best thing about this book is the blurb!
Firstly, the guy on the cover is in no way attractive, but I am aware that is a personal preference so I don't count that in my review. It just would've been nice to have at least ONE positive thing to write about.
The story starts out in 3rd person; again, I am not a fan, but when done well it doesn't harm the storytelling. This was NOT done well. There are times the author is speaking presently of past events but she states them as though they are presently happening, it was confusing. There were MANY times the author just switched to 1st person, sometimes in the middle of the page, sometimes in the middle of a sentence. It was jarring.
For the love of everything holy, PLEASE see an editor... to fix and eliminate: the past/present tense switches, switching from 3rd to 1st person narration, and the TERRIBLE use of punctuation (why are there SO MANY UNNECESSARY COMMAS?!?!?)
Misc stuff that did not work:
-choppy and terrible the flow of this book , so I could barely stay in the story
-the dialogue, what little there was, was SO IMMATURE
-everything is told not shown, which made reading this such a chore.
-Brand just pops up in the story randomly then disappears for stretches, making it hard to remember or even care that he exists.
-the only decently fleshed out character was Pip and she was like a 12 year old with a huge bank account
-there is ZERO chemistry between Brand and Pip
-WHERE is the romance.. at 43% there has been no flirting and one quick peck after Pip was in a car accident (I do not count this)
-I don't see how this is an MC story, minus the "bunnies" .... this is more of a "local construction crew helps the new-to-town damsel in distress" story..
In short.. this book was trash and I WILL NOT be continuing this series or anything more by this author. This was just.. bad. No thanks!
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
September 7, 2021
Biker story or Fairytale?
I wanted a fresh new Biker/MC series to read and the reviews on this book were mixed, so I decided to try it.
I loved Brand and Pip but the storyline was a bit too far fetched.
She’s on her own for the first time in her life after her parents death. She meets Brand and a few of the brothers and bam she automatically trusts them with her life and money. Yeah okay maybe I’m jaded but no not gonna happen especially when she’s a multi millionaire because of her parents death.
Pip for being a wealthy young lady (not said how old she is) just throws her money around, building her restaurant and then just giving money away like it’s nothing to her friends and some of the brothers. Nobody bats an eye at this. I would at least have given a token protest but hey I’m an honest person, or try to be.
I would have liked a little more steam to the book considering it’s supposed to be a MC novel. One not so steamy love scene at almost the end of the book was a little disappointing.
Another problem I have with the book is the wording and the way the characters talk doesn’t hit me as them being from Nebraska or Montana as the book is set in.
Example: Cranks cell phone rings and he picks it from where he had it sitting on the table. Looking at me, he tells me to get a shifty on we’re going to the clubhouse.
That is not how Americans talk, we would say “Get a move on”
There are many many things like this and a few words that aren’t even in the dictionary that I didn’t comprehend what the Author was talking about! Very confusing.
If you want to write about a certain place than at least make the characters talk like they belong there.
This was my first read by this Author and I believe in second chances as this wasn’t all bad, so wish me luck with the second book 📖
I wanted a fresh new Biker/MC series to read and the reviews on this book were mixed, so I decided to try it.
I loved Brand and Pip but the storyline was a bit too far fetched.
She’s on her own for the first time in her life after her parents death. She meets Brand and a few of the brothers and bam she automatically trusts them with her life and money. Yeah okay maybe I’m jaded but no not gonna happen especially when she’s a multi millionaire because of her parents death.
Pip for being a wealthy young lady (not said how old she is) just throws her money around, building her restaurant and then just giving money away like it’s nothing to her friends and some of the brothers. Nobody bats an eye at this. I would at least have given a token protest but hey I’m an honest person, or try to be.
I would have liked a little more steam to the book considering it’s supposed to be a MC novel. One not so steamy love scene at almost the end of the book was a little disappointing.
Another problem I have with the book is the wording and the way the characters talk doesn’t hit me as them being from Nebraska or Montana as the book is set in.
Example: Cranks cell phone rings and he picks it from where he had it sitting on the table. Looking at me, he tells me to get a shifty on we’re going to the clubhouse.
That is not how Americans talk, we would say “Get a move on”
There are many many things like this and a few words that aren’t even in the dictionary that I didn’t comprehend what the Author was talking about! Very confusing.
If you want to write about a certain place than at least make the characters talk like they belong there.
This was my first read by this Author and I believe in second chances as this wasn’t all bad, so wish me luck with the second book 📖
December 17, 2022
I really enjoyed this one, but it’s badly written.
I really enjoyed this book. It was only Brand and Pip’s story, unlike some of her books that are about everyone else! It was really clunky at first but it did get a little bit better, but the mistakes got worse. Thunder one of the older males is doing security on Pip, at the same time he’s at the club meeting the FBI. One paragraph it’s nighttime and they’re going home, the next Brand is at the clubhouse! It gets really confusing, and trying to figure out who is talking is a hopeless cause.
Having said all that, yes I did enjoy it. As there’s danger, it’s not rushed at the end of the book, and there’s an actual plot, it’s not just sex. Pip meets Brand when him and his Mc brothers come to the old restaurant that she’s bought. The beginning of their meeting is a weak point with this book, I was going to give up, but it got a lot better. Brand is the prez of the Mc, and does the usual, “woman mine” thing. It doesn’t go to plan and she makes him work for it. I liked Pip in the end. When I first started reading I thought she was a bizarre character. Telling Brand and his brothers how much money she’s got, when she’s only just met them!!!
Sex scenes are terrible. As usual with this author. But definitely worth reading.
I really enjoyed this book. It was only Brand and Pip’s story, unlike some of her books that are about everyone else! It was really clunky at first but it did get a little bit better, but the mistakes got worse. Thunder one of the older males is doing security on Pip, at the same time he’s at the club meeting the FBI. One paragraph it’s nighttime and they’re going home, the next Brand is at the clubhouse! It gets really confusing, and trying to figure out who is talking is a hopeless cause.
Having said all that, yes I did enjoy it. As there’s danger, it’s not rushed at the end of the book, and there’s an actual plot, it’s not just sex. Pip meets Brand when him and his Mc brothers come to the old restaurant that she’s bought. The beginning of their meeting is a weak point with this book, I was going to give up, but it got a lot better. Brand is the prez of the Mc, and does the usual, “woman mine” thing. It doesn’t go to plan and she makes him work for it. I liked Pip in the end. When I first started reading I thought she was a bizarre character. Telling Brand and his brothers how much money she’s got, when she’s only just met them!!!
Sex scenes are terrible. As usual with this author. But definitely worth reading.
October 20, 2022
Wanted to like it
I wanted to like this and went into it fairly excite The first half read pretty quickly. I enjoyed a fmc that didn't immediately fall at the feet of a guy and give up any semblance of individuality and stood up for herself.
Main bugs were the use of the word hence, does not belong in most any book these days never mind an mc book (in my opinion), also at times it seemed like the story jerked abit and wasn't smooth reading for me. The depiction of the FBI was a bit unrealistic the response would have been a lot more immediate I felt like they were not not too interested in their job for such lukewarm reactions.
The last half dragged there was no real excitement the mc read more like a knitting group at times and I just couldn't get too invested I would not have been surprised if they called Church to discuss which yarn colours were in season.
The culmination was fairly anticlimactic and I just wasn't invested and while it will drive me nuts I am not sure if I want to continue. I definitely think people should read it though and make their own decision it could just be that Elizabeth N Harris has ruined me for other mc books.
I wanted to like this and went into it fairly excite The first half read pretty quickly. I enjoyed a fmc that didn't immediately fall at the feet of a guy and give up any semblance of individuality and stood up for herself.
Main bugs were the use of the word hence, does not belong in most any book these days never mind an mc book (in my opinion), also at times it seemed like the story jerked abit and wasn't smooth reading for me. The depiction of the FBI was a bit unrealistic the response would have been a lot more immediate I felt like they were not not too interested in their job for such lukewarm reactions.
The last half dragged there was no real excitement the mc read more like a knitting group at times and I just couldn't get too invested I would not have been surprised if they called Church to discuss which yarn colours were in season.
The culmination was fairly anticlimactic and I just wasn't invested and while it will drive me nuts I am not sure if I want to continue. I definitely think people should read it though and make their own decision it could just be that Elizabeth N Harris has ruined me for other mc books.
May 18, 2022
well…… I read this book
in one sitting, so to speak, cups of tea non withstanding !
I found this novel to have an excellent storyline, well drawn characters with personalities which attract interest and promised further potential to expand and pull you in to this MC family. On the whole though, I felt my enjoyment diminished as I had difficulty reading comfortably.
To me the syntax seemed as though it has been auto translated, by computer, from another language. This in turn meant that my progression through the story was consistently halted, having to reread and rearrange the wording to get the gist of the meaning.
It did affect the enjoyment of the story slightly, however, not enough to put me off …. hence the 4 stars and the fact that I’ve already bought the next book
in one sitting, so to speak, cups of tea non withstanding !
I found this novel to have an excellent storyline, well drawn characters with personalities which attract interest and promised further potential to expand and pull you in to this MC family. On the whole though, I felt my enjoyment diminished as I had difficulty reading comfortably.
To me the syntax seemed as though it has been auto translated, by computer, from another language. This in turn meant that my progression through the story was consistently halted, having to reread and rearrange the wording to get the gist of the meaning.
It did affect the enjoyment of the story slightly, however, not enough to put me off …. hence the 4 stars and the fact that I’ve already bought the next book
June 8, 2022
Good start to the series
This book and series has so much potential. The overall storyline is good - really good. The introduction to the all of the characters is done well.
I absolutely will keep reading through the series as I am hoping the writing and structure will improve.
There is little engaging dialogue through the book. It’s sprinkled in here and there. It’s mostly formatted so that the reader is being told what is going on rather than dialogue and description that draws in the reader.
Because of the format, it was difficult to engage with the characters and the main duo in this book had no chemistry, build up and in book with 24 chapters - only 1 NSFW scene between the 2 and then they are declaring their love for each other. Hoping for improvement in the next book.
This book and series has so much potential. The overall storyline is good - really good. The introduction to the all of the characters is done well.
I absolutely will keep reading through the series as I am hoping the writing and structure will improve.
There is little engaging dialogue through the book. It’s sprinkled in here and there. It’s mostly formatted so that the reader is being told what is going on rather than dialogue and description that draws in the reader.
Because of the format, it was difficult to engage with the characters and the main duo in this book had no chemistry, build up and in book with 24 chapters - only 1 NSFW scene between the 2 and then they are declaring their love for each other. Hoping for improvement in the next book.
May 4, 2022
Brand and Pip
Such a great first read for me. When a woman has nothing left in life since her parents death, she moves away to open a restaurant in a new town. Pip is so excited to get things started she doesn’t realize that trouble is brewing right before her eyes. When the police officer from town starts harassing her out of nowhere the local MC comes to her rescue literally. When Brand and his crew show up to the abandoned building noticing someone is there wanting to reopen it he takes charge in assisting Pip with the renovations not knowing what trouble is coming with her. Will the truth be uncovered as to why Pip is being targeted and who is behind it all. Read how things come unraveled and learn how quick friendships and family become one.
Such a great first read for me. When a woman has nothing left in life since her parents death, she moves away to open a restaurant in a new town. Pip is so excited to get things started she doesn’t realize that trouble is brewing right before her eyes. When the police officer from town starts harassing her out of nowhere the local MC comes to her rescue literally. When Brand and his crew show up to the abandoned building noticing someone is there wanting to reopen it he takes charge in assisting Pip with the renovations not knowing what trouble is coming with her. Will the truth be uncovered as to why Pip is being targeted and who is behind it all. Read how things come unraveled and learn how quick friendships and family become one.
May 22, 2022
it’s a stretch calling this a romance or an MC.
The premise was a good idea. The storyline to over the top to be believable (I’m okay with that). If you want an actual MC or a Romance book, this is not for you. There is no chemistry between Brand and Pip. Like none. It was just decided they were together at the end of the book. You could tell the author was British, which normally doesn’t bother me because author’s at least try to sound American or has their character be British, not so this one. I loved the side characters just not the main to. I mean the whole story was her throwing around money and someone after her, which was predictable. I gave 1 star for the storyline and one because I liked the side characters.
The premise was a good idea. The storyline to over the top to be believable (I’m okay with that). If you want an actual MC or a Romance book, this is not for you. There is no chemistry between Brand and Pip. Like none. It was just decided they were together at the end of the book. You could tell the author was British, which normally doesn’t bother me because author’s at least try to sound American or has their character be British, not so this one. I loved the side characters just not the main to. I mean the whole story was her throwing around money and someone after her, which was predictable. I gave 1 star for the storyline and one because I liked the side characters.
February 24, 2023
almost DNF
I started this book two times already. I didn’t finish either time. I decided to give it another shot today. I had to look past so many grammatical errors, it was ridiculous. It was hard to read with the run on sentences and commas in places where they didn’t need to be. It was very distracting. The story was decent, but nothing to exclaim about.
Pip, comes into money via an inheritance from her deceased parents and ends up buying property to build a home and restaurant on. In the process, she meets a MC and is befriended by the brothers and catches the eye of the Prez, Brand. The MC helps Pip out of a dangerous spot.
Not much relationship building is shown between Pip and Brand.
I started this book two times already. I didn’t finish either time. I decided to give it another shot today. I had to look past so many grammatical errors, it was ridiculous. It was hard to read with the run on sentences and commas in places where they didn’t need to be. It was very distracting. The story was decent, but nothing to exclaim about.
Pip, comes into money via an inheritance from her deceased parents and ends up buying property to build a home and restaurant on. In the process, she meets a MC and is befriended by the brothers and catches the eye of the Prez, Brand. The MC helps Pip out of a dangerous spot.
Not much relationship building is shown between Pip and Brand.
May 18, 2023
Cheating and no romance
How can this be in the romance category? There is very little to no romance between the mc and the fmc!! Like none. You fall in love with Shoes, Crank, Thunder, Shade, and Coal, you learn all there is to know about Pip ( bless her little heart). And Brand is just like, let's get into a fight and I'll use being drunk and p*ssed as an excuse to stick it in a hole I would never even think of touching if I wasn't drunk and p*ssed. All I'm thinking is 'girl run! Don't think about it, go get you a hot pink or dark purple friend and leave him alone!!!" But nope their first 'date' and yep!!! They fall into sex!!! Nope not cool. He never apologized for any dang thing and what..... Sex!!
Action ⭐⭐⭐
Romance
Secondary characters ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
Main characters
How can this be in the romance category? There is very little to no romance between the mc and the fmc!! Like none. You fall in love with Shoes, Crank, Thunder, Shade, and Coal, you learn all there is to know about Pip ( bless her little heart). And Brand is just like, let's get into a fight and I'll use being drunk and p*ssed as an excuse to stick it in a hole I would never even think of touching if I wasn't drunk and p*ssed. All I'm thinking is 'girl run! Don't think about it, go get you a hot pink or dark purple friend and leave him alone!!!" But nope their first 'date' and yep!!! They fall into sex!!! Nope not cool. He never apologized for any dang thing and what..... Sex!!
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April 30, 2021
I believe that this is a debut novel for this author and I was pleasantly surprised as there is a good bone structure to write a series on this isn't a dark MC romance at all and in parts it could have done with a little more depth but for a debut it was pretty good
Pip and Brand where a couple that drew you in She was no pushover and only requested the help of the MC after her life is threatened Brand the President of the club is instantly attracted and decides she will be his in parts this is a slow burn and there are plenty of secondary characters whose stories I am sure we are going to get
Pip and Brand where a couple that drew you in She was no pushover and only requested the help of the MC after her life is threatened Brand the President of the club is instantly attracted and decides she will be his in parts this is a slow burn and there are plenty of secondary characters whose stories I am sure we are going to get
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