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My Vampire System

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The human Race is at war with the Vicious Dalki and when they needed help more than ever, THEY started to come forward.

Humans who had hidden in the shadows for hundreds of years, people with abilities.

Some chose to share their knowledge to the rest of the world in hopes of winning the war, while others kept their abilities to themselves.

Quinn had lost everything to the war, his home, his family and the only thing he had inherited was a crummy old book that he couldn’t even open.

But when the book had finally opened, Quinn was granted a system and his whole life was turned around.

He completed quest after quest and became more powerful, until one day the system gave him a quest he wasn’t sure he could complete.

"It is time to feed!"
"You must drink human blood within 24 hours"
"Your HP will continue to decrease until the task has been completed"

**Chapters #1-100**

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4 reviews
July 24, 2024
Fascinating concept and good plot line, but there needs to be a lot of editing. I’ve never read a story with so many grammatical errors and typos. Author left donations requests after each chapter which is kind of annoying.
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96 reviews1 follower
March 13, 2023
writing is mediocre
concept is lovely
plot is meh
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1,868 reviews30 followers
November 28, 2024
2019 52 Book Challenge - 14) An Ugly Cover

Honestly, if you like a bit of trashy teenage vampire angst it's worth a read. I kinda like the leveling up thing, but probably because it makes me think of Fire Emblem.

Don't read if you like grammar because it is awful.
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11 reviews
December 8, 2023
I read around 1080 chapters. It was cool in the beginning but the quality started declining around c.700 and everything became too predictable and or ridiculous. At times I had to force myself to keep reading because some arcs dragged on forever, but at some point I had enough. I also started hating all or almost all of the characters, and there was even an extremely annoying one that got off too easy if you ask me. Anyway it’s not by any means a masterpiece, and at best a mid read. But really it’s bad.
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Author 29 books154 followers
July 29, 2025
Преди около две седмици представих в Цитаделата уебромана Young Master’s POV, който ми направи изумително силно впечатление и ми откри цял един нов свят на епични произведения от напълно нов формат в литературата, съчетаващ традиционната книга с похвати от писането на фенфикове и манга. Днес насочвам вниманието Ви към абсолютната класика в този жанр, а именно My Vampire System, който има над 90 милиона прочитания. Този успех е вдъхновил редактирането му в поредица от над 70 книги за “Киндъл Ънлимитид”, както и адаптация на манга и идеи за сериал.
Цялото ми ревю може да прочетете в Цитаделата:
https://citadelata.com/my-vampire-sys...
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80 reviews5 followers
February 14, 2022
I didn't really like the beginning but it really improved about halfway and now I'm actually quite exited for the next part of the story.
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Author 18 books8 followers
September 5, 2024
I read this book and it has so many good things. The author has created a fascinating world. My vampire system is in the future and it's nice to read about the new technology and the many different planets. Earth is just to small for this story. I liked it so much that I also read my dragon system and now I'm reading the werewolf system.

But although I like the story, I can't give it a five stars. To begin with, who let a child alone? His parents are gone to the war and Quin is 10 the moment that he got the news that his parents are death. At that time he is alone for a few years and can't hardly remember his parents. I just don't understand why nobody took care of him? And for Richard Eno to only give some money so that he has it's own appartment? Why not hire someone to look after such a young boy?

And I'm still mad about the character development from Hayley. She was okay in the first part of the story when she was just a nurse. But why make her a succubus? And give him a hand??? That part wasn't neccesary in the story. It just doesn't ad anything. It would have been nice if there was more development between Helene and Quin. Somekind of attraction on both parts, so that Quin could realize who he really loves. And for Layla to wait more then 1000 years?

Some scenes were to long. Many chapters where there is war and fighting. Just scanning trough waiting for anything interesting. But believe me, it's worth it. If you can get through those chapters a good story follows.
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8 reviews2 followers
November 27, 2022
Pretty much your standard futuristic military dictatorship and an MC with a system. While it does come off as contrived at points and confusing in others, overall it is an okay read. What made me score this at 4 instead of 3 stars is a few things. 1) While it does come late in the setting the system hasn't just popped up arbitrarily because the story says so. It actually has its own backstory and goals in mind rather than 'I got system!' 2) Certain Factions and individuals actually have history and better still it is a nicely convoluted history. 3) There is actual consequences for action that you may not see for an entire book or so before it comes up. It shows a living breathing world rather than a static backdrop. This isn't to say it doesn't have faults but that it is written well enough that overlooking won't kill the story outright...
2 reviews1 follower
February 4, 2025
I’ve read that the majority of complaints are about grammatical errors, but I also found out that the story was originally written in a different language and the translation was kind of an automated one. This would explain the grammatical errors and the overall flawed writing. I’m only a dozen or so chapters in and I am still on the fence about it. I’m going to give it another dozen more chapters before I make my final decision.
1 review1 follower
May 7, 2025
One of the best books you can not just stop reading it, the story telling is just epic, you just can’t predict what will happen next whenever he reached something there is always something new and exciting.. not to mention the world building is so beautiful first it start small then spread like infinite.. it’s a must read long but you will not get bored and will always be excited for what comes next.. the characters development is so good and satisfying.
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19 reviews
October 8, 2025
Interesting idea but absolutely terrible writing. Even though the series is so long and spans millennia, there is very little character development of the main characters. From beginning to end all villains are just mindless bullies and Quinn keeps dealing with each of them in the same way. None of the other characters except Sil have interesting character arcs either. The plot is extremely predictable and lacks any depth. definitely one of the worst series I have come across.
3 reviews2 followers
September 9, 2023
currently on chapter 1888 and already finished my dragon system, both were alright, but author kept pimping his patreon page at end of each short paragraph which made it seem more like a infomercial then good read...his recent novel my werewolf system which was strongly advertised as well,I gave up after few chapter since it seem rushed and got drain from constant push for his patreon stuff
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885 reviews60 followers
October 28, 2024
It’s been a few months since I finished this, all 2400-some chapters of it. I really got into this story for a while. It’s really not great but it kind of keeps you hooked.

Some things are not fully resolved in the end and author indicated that he might pick up in a sequel after he finishes his other on-going novels.
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7 reviews1 follower
November 10, 2024
Disappointing Read!

While "My Vampire System" had a promising concept, the execution left much to be desired. The storyline was plagued by poor delivery, riddled with too many grammatical errors, and the writing felt amateurish. Unfortunately, these issues made it difficult to fully immerse in what could have been a captivating tale. Save your time and look elsewhere.
2 reviews2 followers
June 25, 2022
I was wary to read this novel since it's a web novel and web novels are usually lacking in quality and plot. But I was thrilled that I gave this a shot. Even though the writing is in simple languagege, it could very well be a published book.
1 review1 follower
March 12, 2024
The book had great thought behind it but there were a lot of grammar mistakes such as names spelled wrong, capitalized first and second letters, and no spaces between the word “chapter” and chapter number.
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1,510 reviews7 followers
September 3, 2024
I loved the story from the beginning! I had to look past all the grammar and spelling mistakes (and there were a lot!). Quinn's beginnings were a little tough to watch as I react very badly to bullying.
11 reviews
October 24, 2024
I got drawn into this series. I have completed the whole thing and while I don’t feel that the writing is particularly skillful, I’m in love with the world. The idea that one gains power by hunting beasts on foreign planets was very intriguing to me.
10 reviews
June 23, 2025
Poorly written, unedited, endless tropes. There are far worse publications out there. However, for some unknown reason, I read the entire 2545 chapters. Great for fans of Dragonball fight sequences and limited to no character development. Congratulations on your publishing success.
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2 reviews2 followers
September 26, 2021
The beginning is pretty good. It is a slow start but it eventually picks up. I also believe the slow start was necessary for plot development.
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