Interesting concept, but poor execution. Self-publishing is an incredible accomplishment. I really wanted to like this novel because I won it from the Giveaways, but it missed the mark for me.
The title is okay, but it’s confusing in how it sounds. Is it supposed to be like Rosa Guy’s “My Love, My Love or The Peasant Girl,” where it has two titles? I think “Heavenly Gates” on its own would have been acceptable, but it doesn’t give a thriller vibe. Nor does “Old Man Winter,” as that sounds like the story would be like Fredrick Backman’s “A Man Called Ove.” I wouldn’t classify this as a thriller anyways, so I suppose the title is fine.
I spent a lot of my time rolling my eyes because it felt unbelievable. The dialogue felt forced, and I couldn’t picture the characters saying it (let alone anyone saying it because of how awkward it sounded). Not to mention the difficulty of following who was speaking. I had to go back and reread a section of dialogue because of the improper paragraphs and poor punctuation between switching characters. The plot also felt forced. I convinced myself that it was slightly plausible, but the “revelations” made no sense to me (how does everyone completely ignore the fact that the main character’s birthday is on Christmas until it’s too late? You’d think her own partner would know that, but I guess not until it’s “crucial” to where the story is going). The filler sections had no relevance to the progression of the story and felt more like it was just added because it “sounded good.”
In other words, the writing style felt juvenile and basic, as if this was a high school creative writing assignment that went on much longer than it should have. It’s gives me “classic” vibes, in the sense that everyone has written sentences like this (“It was a dark and stormy night” is the only way I can explain it). It’s overdone, overused, and not enjoyable. The same thing was said in a few different ways one right after the other, and the repetitiveness was annoying. Hence the high school vibe, like a student trying to reach the word count.
I think what irked me the most was the grammar. I am all for a good semicolon, but it is incredibly easy to overuse it if you don’t understand its purpose (and in this case, it was overused and misused nearly 90% of the time. Truly, you should only use semicolon maybe a total of three times throughout a whole book, depending on how long it is, and it should hardly ever be used in dialogue). Then there are the parts where simply rereading what was written would have helped to fix it, such as when quotations were missing or when there was a comma instead of a period (and you know there was supposed to be a period because the next word was capitalized). There were random quotation marks after sentences where no one said anything. It was little things that aren’t actually little because it changes how the story sounds. My wife has suggested I edit the book for grammar and send it back, and I’m tempted to do so.
The sections near the end with Frank in the elevator and Penny in the elevator were good mind tricks. I enjoyed that and that alone.
Again, I wouldn’t classify this as a psychological thriller, but rather the book for one of those off-brand Christian movies you see in the bargain bin at stores (and those movies have just as bad of writing). If that’s your thing, then you’re going to love this book. It’s also possible that taking place in the 70s affects my perception, as I didn’t get to live through that time period (though it gives me Karin Slaughter’s “Cop Town” vibes, and I thoroughly enjoyed that book). For me, this was just all sorts of bad. I had to force myself to read it, and with how much I love to read, that’s saying something.