This is a story about Henry Arnold William Warsham, the Marquess of Clydon, and Lady Madison Hutton, daughter of Baron Sommerfield. Although this book is the first of The Hesitant Husbands series, Warsham is not hesitant about becoming a husband – he wants to become one, he just doesn’t know how. He seems an odd choice for the Hesitant Husbands series. However, the story does offer an interesting view into the marriage of two members of the bon ton.
There are occasional disconnects, not serious, but they make a reader stop to consider. For instance, in chapter 4, Madison checks a clock and sees it is twelve noon. She spends time talking with her mother and then Warsham arrives. After exchanging pleasantries, he says, “Miss Hutton, you look radiant this morning.” It isn’t morning. It’s after noon. This is not a big issue but earlier, the writer drew our attention to the time (noon) making that time appear significant.
At chapter 7, almost 30% complete, I felt we had been in a prologue for the last six chapters. We’re being told a lot about all the characters but shown little. These first chapters seemed to be filling in the background for an upcoming story. It felt like prologue material.
Later, at the marquess’ London home, Madison’s mother, Lady Sommerfield, tells Warsham that she has heard he is an accomplished rider. He admits to “enjoy[ing] riding immensely” and “a smile of pride did creep onto his face.” The writer then tells us that the marquess “tried to brush off the compliment,” but how? We are shown the exact opposite: he accepts the compliment and smiles. There is now disagreement between the narration and the marquess’ actions.
Warsham takes Madison for a ride in his phaeton alone. The narration tells us that this is acceptable behavior because it is an open carriage and all of London could see them. While there is a need for the outspoken Madison and Warsham to be alone to move the plot along, I do not believe they could be left alone in Regency times. A chaperone—even in an open carriage—provided a necessary witness to a couple’s good behavior and was the guardian of a single woman’s reputation. And…we’ve seen how inappropriate their behavior becomes even with the ton looking on.
The sex scenes in the book make sense because they show the disconnect in the marriage, however there is one scene that had me shaking my head. Without giving too much of the plot away, there is a carriage accident, and it leads to Warsham and Madison reconnecting, but instead of talking through their intense problems, they go have sex in a park. Yikes. That’s not regency behavior and they have a perfectly good house a short walk away. Weird and a little creepy.
There are enough errors to make a reader pause and leave the story. For instance:
The wrong homonym is used here: “…loosening his grip on the reigns ever so slightly.” This is actually pretty funny, and it should read, “…loosening his grip on the reins…” since these are the leads used to control a horse, not a sovereignty.
There seems to be a verb missing in this sentence: “What makes you he would attend this…?” Perhaps this should read, “What makes you think he would attend this…”
Subject pronouns are used as objects and this is incorrect grammar, even in Regency times. For instance, “…fetch Madison and I some refreshments.” The subject pronoun, “I,” is used as an object. This should read, “…fetch Madison and me some refreshments.” It’s easy to check: remove “Madison and” from the sentence then read it back. “…fetch I some refreshments.” It sounds wrong because it is.
A verb seems to be missing: “…she going to make sure that Madison’s wedding day was perfect.” That should perhaps read, “…she was going to make sure….”
An incorrect word is used in this sentence: “…he led her along the covered walkway the encircled the courtyard.” The second “the” doesn’t make sense. Perhaps that should be, “…the covered walkway that encircled the courtyard.”
I believe an incorrect word has been used by the writer: “I have decided to stop perseverating on your infuriating behavior…” spoken by Madison. The word, "perseverate” was first used in the twentieth century (1909). The Latin form, perseverationem and the French, perseveracion, did exist, but were not used in normal everyday English. Based on intent, I believe this could be, “I have decided to stop fixating on your infuriating behavior.” Or maybe “commenting on” or whatever.
I rated this book 3.5 stars and rounded up because it was an unusual view of a ton marriage. Warsham is a lost soul who does not handle marriage well for all that he does have a good heart. He wants marriage, wants to be a husband, but is woefully ignorant about how to go about it. It makes for a serious internal conflict for both his wife and him; at the end there is a well-earned HEA. I did not care for all the narration; I would much rather be shown how the two were moving apart rather than be told, but it was still an interesting story that clearly held my interest. I’m unsure about continuing the series. The writing is good, but I did not care for Theodore, Warsham’s best friend, and I believe he is the hero of the next book. We’ll see.