Someone should explain head-hopping and why you avoid it to Elizabeth Adams. But not that editor who left so many non-Regency words. They should be fired. 3.5 stars and she's lucky to get them--and that's only for the feel-good at the end of the book.
I write reviews of a technical nature with no summaries. Instead, I concentrate on the aspects of the book that might cause a reader to drop stars but are not usually detailed in a book review by other reviewers.
The premise is a good one, and although many elements of the story line are not new, they are handled well. The flow is slightly on the slow side, considering that this has a bit of a comedic feel. I found I came back to it with a bit of reluctance each time rather than the eagerness I usually find with a JAFF novel. Some sections had to use canon, and the author did an excellent job of summing Wickham's story in the narrative.
Editing for language was poor. The average JAFF novel has a half-dozen non-Regency words and 2-3 non-British words or phrases. Here's the non-Regency words in this novel: boredom, sharing, snorted, discombobulated, swish, snob, outing, neckline, fingertip, staff, "wedding breakfast," and a couple I'm pretty certain of, but I can't find a source. Non-British words include gotten, toward, "We will", "I will," "you shall," intermission. There was "blousy" for "blowsy," "on" for "one." A good dozen contractions were left on the table, said by characters of higher class--Austen only used eight contractions in P&P and reserved them for silly characters or those of lower class in her books.
As far as punctuation goes, there were some missing commas, but otherwise the editing for punctuation seemed fine.
A canon error had an 18-month-old girl as the youngest Gardiner child. Austen is clear that there are two older girls of six and eight and two younger boys. A Regency error is a seven-course meal. Rarely were they more than two courses. Consent to a courtship was another error that has been made common by Regency romance books. It just wasn't done. You were courting or not courting by your actions. No one asked about it.
Point of view was handled with an amateurish hand considering the experience this author has. The head-hopping was dreadful from start to finish. Head-hopping stops the reader dead and causes them to re-read to make sure they got the narrator's identity right. Anything that stops a reader from reading is a no-no in fiction. The author wasn't using an omniscient narrator approach (which allows multiple views but in always the ON's voice) because her characters' feelings and thoughts were too deep and personal in places. So she's managed a mash-up of third person multiple with some deep point of view and head-hopping. She needs to study point of view and then write to only one per scene and maximum four per novel.
The author used filter words, so she could have done better by showing instead of telling.
Scene-setting was done quite well, with the situation lending a hand to show the action between the protagonists in most cases.
I enjoyed the characterizations the author chose to use for this book, taken from the depth of character Austen offered us in the original.
The angst was fairly low, mostly in relation to the protagonists' separation and the time it took to get them together.
I'm not a fan of the cover or the title. The cover is muddy and dark, and it's hard to see the text on the background. The designer chose a font that's harder to read. The heads should not be chopped off in this case. Nothing in this cover pops out on the shelf and says "buy me!" The title is cute in concept, but difficult in practicality. Readers forget the last half, don't want to write it all out, etc., etc. So why bother? A shorter, more succinct title could have been contrived that said the same thing overall. I've had longer working titles, but sense chose something palatable in the end.
I can't in all honesty recommend this book, mainly due to the head-hopping. It's a good idea poorly executed in that one respect. I found the book slow even though the premise is a good one, and I enjoyed the ending enough to mark four stars (3.5). I doubt I'll read another book by Elizabeth Adams, though.
Disclaimer: I'm a JAFF author, and my reviews might be considered to be a conflict of interest by some. However, I was a reader first, and my reviews are honest and impartial. I write them for the benefit of both the reader and the author.