The Unflinching Ash—a medieval-ish fantasy about magicians, illusions, and con artists—is a compelling story at its core, but it probably could have used a couple more rounds of editing.
Things I Liked
1) Magicians! (In the “I do illusions” sense, not the fantasy “I do magic” sense.) I’m a sucker for magicians and this book is full of them.
2) Our main character, Ash, never flinches—literally. Even if she’s getting knives thrown at her head, she doesn’t twitch. It’s just how she is. It’s fun to watch her weird everybody out with her preternatural stillness.
3) Although the book is set in a fairly typical medieval-esque fantasy world, there are just enough differences to separate it from other similar settings. The towns have basilicae! I love the historical detail.
4) The book includes a glossary of unusual words at the front, which younger readers may appreciate. The story overall is also generally pretty clean, which makes it accessible for some lower teens (an age group I feel is often neglected in current YA fiction).
Things that Didn’t Work for Me
1) There are quite a few typographical errors throughout (periods for commas, extra spaces, that sort of thing). Typos bother some readers more than others, though, so your milage may vary.
2) The narration’s psychic distance is inconsistent. Most of the time, we hew closely to a POV character’s mind and get the events of the story from their perspective. But sometimes the narration “pops” out of a given POV into a more distant, almost omniscient style. For instance, when Ash smiles, the narration often describes the appearance of her smile and its effect on those around her, which Ash couldn’t actually know, even though we’re ostensibly in Ash’s head.
(A caveat: Some writers intentionally manipulate psychic distance, zooming the camera in and out, to great effect. It takes A LOT of skill to do right. Gullstruck Island by Frances Hardinge is a good example. Unfortunately, the shifting POV in this book doesn’t read to me like an intentional choice so much as a lack of control. It’s something I encounter in books by newer writers all the time.)
3) Redundant sentences occur quite often. Frequently, the story shows us something and then we get a sentence that recaps what we just saw. It’s not the most egregious thing in the world, but after a while, the redundancy builds up and starts to clog the prose.
4) The romance falls squarely into instalove. The male love interest has feelings for Ash the very first time we meet him. That’s not inherently a bad thing—I’m sure some readers enjoy jumping straight to the meat of the romance—but I personally prefer to see some buildup. Otherwise, I’m left wondering, why do these two people like each other so much?
In Sum
The Unflinching Ash is, on the macro level, a fun and compelling YA fantasy. The magicians are an absolute blast and Ash is an indomitable character. On the micro level, the book is more unpolished, but whether that will bother you probably depends on your own personal preferences.
Thank you to the author for providing a copy for review.