This was such an interesting story. It’s stories like this that always leave me impressed (not sure if that’s the right word) by the author’s imagination and how they’re able to come up with the idea, in this case, humans and sasquatches and zombies, and then be able to connect the dots. It’s a unique story. But it was way too long! I’ll explain why below. I’d almost think the author was getting paid per word/page.
One area I wished would have been different was the foresters and their lack of uniqueness compared to humans. It’s like they were taller, hairier, and stronger than humans but that was it.
It’s one thing to have a lot of main characters, which I’m not a fan of because it can get confusing as to whose POV you’re following. But it’s another thing to have the story follow minor side characters like Earl and Lutz, for example, who have a scene and that’s it. Or going from one POV to another to another, all in one scene. Usually the multiple POVs go along with a plot-driven story. Is that what this was? I would have thought it was a character-driven story since the reader follows the two main characters: Rue and Buford.
The memoir entries, sometimes taking entire chapters, of someone not even in the story itself, who spoke of the templars, might have been interesting to other readers, but I wasn’t a fan. It just kept taking me out of the story. Speaking of templars, had I realized there was so much religious talk, I probably wouldn’t have asked for an audiobook code. More on that later.
I can’t stand robotic dialogue. I feel like a lot of writers are scared to use contractions, which makes no sense to me because typically if the line is said aloud, a contraction is used as opposed to not.
The tenses got mixed up at times also, using present tense instead of past tense. I’m not sure how no one gave fewer stars for the “telling” as opposed to “showing,” for example, when Rue is telling the reader about the military... I was bored. Or the fact some parts had too much narrative. If I were interested in reading about specific events or elements in history, I would have gotten a historical-type story.
The redundancy was over the top, like “hoisted up.” Hoisted means to raise as in going up, so only hoisted should have been used. I guess you could call me a nitpicky reader but stuff like that annoys me. Or “…with the remaining resources we had left.” Using “had left” is redundant because the prior phrase implies what they had left is what they used. Or “There was no way we would keep everyone alive and I knew it.” Again, Rue was telling the story here, so stating “I knew it” is redundant.
A lot of the time an action was said before it took place. Basically the order was incorrect. For example, “Earl asked as his voice cracked nervously, ‘What are you talking about, Willy?” Technically he talks first resulting in “his voice cracked nervously.” Or “Preacher Cody centered himself in front of the fighters and then requested their attention. ‘May I have everyone’s attention, please?’ Preacher Cody asked loudly but politely.” That last part wasn’t even necessary. This brings up all the unnecessary adverbs that were used throughout the story. I’m not one to dismiss the use of all adverbs, but they were overdone here.
I can’t stand when “had had” or “that that” is used. Yes, it’s grammatically correct but I’ve learned that they can be rephrased so the double verb isn’t used.
The narrator did a good job overall. His voice/accent was perfect for the story. I did notice he mispronounced words, for example, populated and Appalachian. Also, he would increase his speed at random points. The first time was during chapter 2 when the protagonist realized he was only dreaming. I found it annoying because it didn’t even sound like his natural speed prior to this scene. It was obvious he wasn’t a natural reader, even though he did make it work through most of the story, because he would add emphasis to random words, which told me he’d lost his place.
Questions/Comments:
Unless I was mistaken, Buford said that Rue referring to him as an ape was racist, yet his mother turned around and called him a young ape and they referred to each other as apes.
I found it interesting that the foresters’ pastor told Buford the Bible said that God didn’t give you anything you couldn’t handle but, then he contradicted himself by saying if you couldn’t handle the situation on your own to turn to God. If God knew that you were having trouble by praying to him, it would all work out. Right. Isn’t God supposed to know all? So God would know when something was too much for you? Obviously I’m not religious, but I can’t help but think of those people who struggle to deal with their “situation,” it DOESN’T work out even when they’re religious, and that’s that. It ends badly for them. But the fact the foresters believed in Jesus/God just makes no sense to me when other than the simple reference of (I forgot the exact wording but) “other people,” that would have been the only (potential) reference to foresters.
When Buford was fighting to become a Templar, his body was aching from dehydration. How did he dehydrate so quickly?
When Rachel is first examining Luther, she states he is unnatural. Why? Using that term would make me think that someone like a scientist had created him/his species. It’s not like she knew he was friends with the devil.
Why would the zombies eat Rue’s puke?
“Every eye bowed. Every eye closed. EXCEPT Cody standing at the rear of the formation.” Nice contradiction.
Why was the preacher’s name Cody when the town bully was also Cody?
This was the first time I’ve heard the phrase “chill bumps” instead of goosebumps or chicken skin.
I knew when Cody and Rue started fighting that Rue was going to beat him. It was too predictable. But, when they’re fighting… why wouldn’t anyone have stopped them? I mean zombies are coming, a lot of things need to be done, but because this was a subplot of the story, it needs to take place so the subplot can continue even though it doesn’t work because it doesn’t make sense people would just be standing around not doing anything but watching.
It was stated that Penny had been taught that Sasquatches were just wild animals. Huh? Why would she have been “taught” this and not that they didn’t exist?
A chapter started with Buford being told about his father and he said how the news didn’t bring him comfort just more questions. Yet further into the chapter Luther/Jethro is revealed to be his father. So what was revealed at the beginning?
I received an audiobook code in exchange for a review.