STORY: ★★★★★
PROOFREADING: ★★
OVERALL: ★★★.5
“I hate that I allow myself to be used. I hate that I allow my strings to be stroked and plucked at the will of others. I hate that I like it. I hate that a dark, sick part of me clings to it because it's all I can get.”
STORY:
This was one of the more innovative, exciting stories I’ve read lately!!! Hadley is absolutely bizarre, but in the best possible way! With her mood ring serving as her emotional compass, she engages in off-the-wall, absolutely fascinating, unpredictable behaviors! I personally didn’t figure out who the bad guy was until deep into the story which was awesome! It’s truly a brilliant story!
EDITING/PROOFREADING:
*** If you aren’t AJ Wolf or curious about my critical eye, I’d stop reading here***
As it seems to be with every book I read lately, this one also had a distracting amount of mistakes:
-The wrong sentences with the wrong words used (BRUSH for BRUSHING, FURTHER when it should’ve been FARTHER, THAT instead of WHO, MIGHT for MAY, ONTO even when it should’ve been ON TO, TITLED for TILTED, GRAVELY for GRAVELLY, B LINE for BEELINE and BINES when it should’ve been BINDS.
-Words were spelled differently throughout the book (for example, RIB CAGE in one place, RIBCAGE in others).
-There were some really long on sentences (that or commas were erroneously used in lieu of periods). For example, “I watch her back as we climb them, eyes catching on the slight sway of her golden hair, I have to make a conscious effort to keep my breathing under control.”).
-Sentences sometimes contained the wrong word (“...he runs both of us hands up my ribcage...”) and sentences that just didn’t make sense (“I don't mind, though, if anything, I almost wish I couldn't at all.”).
-There were sentences with extra words (“Opening the front door, I simply step walk out,”).
-Random words were capitalized that shouldn’t have been (for example, “Rabbits”).
-Ellipses we’re not spaced as dictated by the Chicago Manual of Style (CMOS), were used when dashes should have been used, and although they should’ve contained 3 dots, sometimes contained 2, 3 or 4 dots.
-Rather than using them to separate 2 complete sentences as they are intended to, semicolons were used incorrectly, usually in place of commas.
-Commas were sometimes missing between adjectives.
-Oxford commas were sporadically used, not consistently.
-Although she did occasionally utilize the FANBOYS rule for commas, there are exceptions for SO that were overlooked.
-Rules for commas regarding the word OH we’re not followed (for example, “Oh yea” should’ve been, “Oh, yea”).
-Occasionally, extra commas were used when not needed (for example, “Dad said, you haven’t been by the pharmacy in a while”).
-CMOS rules for documenting time were not followed (for example, two AM”).
***Fortunately, all of these are things most readers won’t even notice, are super easy to fix (I’d love to proofread/edit for you, A.J. 😉) and didn’t diminish how excited I am to read more by this author!!