I need to start off by saying that I am not a veteran so some of my criticism of things may very well be how things are done in an analogous setting to what is in the books. Also I realize that what is considered a "good" story is subjective. With that being said, I have to confess the last ten percent of the second book was a real slog because I can see where this series is going. Not in a story sense which it barely has since it's mostly just an excuse to have a bunch of Marines shoot zombies. That isn't a bad thing, as I wasn't looking for the next Great American novel or anything. I just wanted something fun to listen to while I'm working to help pass the time. Honestly the battle scenes are described well enough and it kept me engaged for the most part. In the end though, the writing by the halfway point of the second book got so lazy that like I said above, I can see where this series is going and it's nowhere good.
Let's start with the more subjective parts first, since these aren't the worst problems. First the side characters are rather generic. You have the really foul mouthed veteran. The steady level headed one, and the new lieutenant who has to grow into his command, and honestly those are the only ones I can really remember and I only stopped listening to the book a couple hours ago. They're nothing new and it's not like having this cast of characters that we've all seen a hundred times before is what drags the books down. Next, the setting is one that I find to be under utilized in zombie apocalypse fiction, with its focus on a US naval remnant. However one the problems I ran into rather quickly, is the author decides he's got to reference everything related to zombies and popular culture. The references get to the point where it seems like the author truly has no skill in writing or is too lazy to put in the time to actually write and so they use the pop culture references as a short hand to try and set the scene. Now I think this can work if the author put time in to developing the scene more, or it can be used in an outline so you know what it is you want to evoke in the reader but the author doesn't do either of these things and leaves the references to do the work for them. From all the movie quotes the author throws at you, at a certain point you'd just rather watch the movie being referenced since the author doesn't really do anything to make the setting more interesting.
Now on to the really big stuff that really makes these books horrible. First the main character. Now before I got the book I checked out the reviews and when one of the first ones was "the main character needs to die" that should have been a red flag. The main character is a Navy corpsman and just a Navy corpsman, and they have him on a SEAL team. Now like I said I'm not a veteran, let alone a veteran of special forces but I'm pretty sure you don't get put on any type of special forces team without going through special forces training. Now the first book starts out with him being part of a SEAL team in the middle east. The team comes under fire, and near the end of the engagement the main character sees a young kid picking up a rifle and he can't bring himself to shoot the kid. This is where things really start going into the land of the unbelievable.Now like I said I'm not a veteran, but I'm pretty sure if you're going to be on a SEAL team you have to go through some type of psychological evaluation to make sure you're cut out for that type of position. Now I truly can't imagine being in that kind of situation and realize how horrible it must be, but again they don't let just anyone on a SEAL team, and like I said above about having to go through the training and be screened psychologically it seems next to impossible that this guy would ever be put in with special forces. Now maybe they don't do that, and it is an unrealistic expectation but the author compounds the problem when the rest of the team don't report what happened and so he's just reassigned to a different front line unit like that solves the problem and wouldn't put his new unit at risk. Now granted the zombies started coming for the brains of the living soon after so maybe the paperwork got lost when something went down, but there's clearly a decent amount of time that lapses before he gets to the Marine unit he's reassigned to, and all hell breaking loose so I find it incredibly unbelievable that he wouldn't get pulled out pending some type of investigation to see if he's fit to serve and as such its unlikely he'd be going to the raider unit.
After that and through the first and second book he continues to do things that put the rest of his comrades at risk. A perfect example is near the end of the second book there's a major battle with local gangsters who have got their hands on military weapons. The main character is ordered to provide security for a machine gunner so no one sneaks up on them, but he decides to go off and abandons his comrade who then gets snuck up on and killed. Another example is in the first book where he gets some type of major head injury, and lies to the doctor in the fleet and ends up passing out or fainting in the field. Not only does he go out in the field knowing he probably isn't physically fit to, but one of the sergeants in his unit finds out, talks to him about it and doesn't say anything about it. This is completely unrealistic. I truly find it nearly impossible to believe a senior NCO would let someone go out into a potentially dangerous situation where not only is the main character supposed to be responsible for keeping people alive, but also allow them to do so when they aren't physically fit and him being there would put others at risk.
Next the author makes everyone stupid because they can't seem to find a better way to drive the action of the book. What I mean by this is that the Naval remnant that serves as the setting is a large carrier group. Meaning they have aircraft that have anti personnel weapons and smaller ships that have naval guns that can be used as such. The problem is they don't use them even though it would help the Marines and the shore parties they are supposed to protect. From what I can remember the reasons for this in the story are extremely weak. So if I remember correctly one reason is that the use of such weapons would put the sailors and Marines at risk due to the virus being spread through bodily fluids and blowing up zombies would drench people in blood and get them infected. Ok fair enough, but if there's a hoard of a few hundred or a couple thousand zombies baring down on the people on shore I think targeting the rear of the zombies would help thin them out and give the people on the ground fighting a better chance of not running out of ammunition and then being overrun. Second, in a throw away line it's mentioned that the air wing doesn't have a lot of experience with providing close air support and so that isn't an option. Seriously? That is the dumbest reason I can think of. Look, again I'm not from a military background so I can't say that's not a valid reason air support wouldn't be used but this is the freaking end of the world, and these Marines are this fleet's security and extremely important as they protect the shore parties when they have to go ashore to scavenge for supplies. These guys have training that makes them invaluable to the safety of the fleet and can't be replaced and you're just going to say that since the pilots and by extension the people who can fire the guns on the destroyers haven't practiced doing that you're just not going to use them, even if it can turn the tide in a fight. That is some of the weakest reasoning I've ever seen in any kind of story. If the Marine raiders are so important, then it would stand to reason that the air crews and gunners should practice, and the training should be implemented right away. Let's contrast this with a couple of movies. Master and commander is a movie set during the Napoleonic wars. It's about a small British ship going after a larger and more heavily armed French Privateer. Now in that movie they make a point of showing the gun crews practicing shooting at a floating target made of barrels. Now am I truly supposed to believe that nowhere in this fleet can anything be found or the crews of all the ships in the fleet can't think of any way to practice providing close air support, or a fire mission from one of the destroyers. Additionally, am I really supposed to believe that even though crews are inexperienced that close air support or a fire mission wouldn't be done anyway. Surely these people should have had some training in these things, and even if they are inexperienced their training should allow them to carry out the mission successfully.
Now for the big clincher. (Spoilers ahead)
In the second book the fleet has to sail to Singapore in order collect munitions from a base the US has that is used to store munitions for the Pacific fleet. However there is a gang on the island that is trying to break in and steal everything for themselves. Now for some reason that I can't remember, when the fleet sent a drone out to do recon of the area around the storage facility they failed to identify or even observe some of the gang members on the island. On top of that the main character lapses into complacency and lets some one go off on their own who then gets killed by a gang member and gives them a chance to break in and this is what kicks off the major battle. Again let's compare this to another movie. Near the half way point and the end of the movie Aliens, Hicks who is in charge of a small group of Marines sends two other characters out together to complete tasks. This guy realizes that regardless of whether they are in a "secure" area or not you don't send or even let people wander around alone.
Now I know bad shit just happens sometimes, and that sometimes people just get lucky. The problem here is that the author sets up all these scenarios by making these highly trained special forces Marines, and the other Naval service members come off as just incompetent. I mean it's established in the books that the zombies are attracted to noises and other things but these people can't even think of using some type of subterfuge to draw zombies away from where the people need to be.
Honestly, if it were only a few of these or some of the other things, (especially the stupid things that I read that they do later in one of the other two books) by themselves I think I would have been able to keep going with the series. It's nothing spectacular, but I wasn't expecting it to be. The problem is this is all just sloppy and lazy. Earlier I mentioned the last part of the book was a slog because I can tell where this is all going. What I mean by that is that there seems to be this growing trend in media where writers make the protagonists of their stories incompetent and stupid to drive their narrative. On top of that I'm seeing that characters don't grow and certainly never learn from their mistakes. Taking for example this show from a few years ago called The Last Ship. It's pretty much the same story as this except there's no zombies. Now the reason I stopped watching was these sailors and Marines kept getting fooled by and jumped by yokels, in ways and places where it shouldn't happen to military personnel. It just got to a point where the leaps they were expecting me to make in my suspension of disbelief were just too much. That's where this series is going. This author is just going to keep making these people dumb, incompetent, or just make the bad guys so extremely lucky to keep the books going and the money from the publisher coming in. In all honesty the only way I could recommend reading these books is if you get them second hand so the author and publisher don't get any money from you, and maybe we can start getting authors to actually put some effort into their books, and stories that are just a little more clever because we truly deserve better than this.