My Vampire System: Book 4

My Vampire System #4

by Jack K. Sherwin

The human Race is at war with the Vicious Dalki and when they needed help more than ever, THEY started to come forward. Humans who had hidden in the shadows for hundreds of years, people with abilities. Some chose to share their knowledge to the rest of the world in hopes of winning the war, while others kept their abilities to themselves.Quinn had lost everything to the war, his home, his family and the only thing he had inherited was a crummy old book that he couldn’t even open. But when the book had finally opened, Quinn was granted a system and his whole life was turned around. He completed quest after quest and became more powerful, until one day the system gave him a quest he wasn’t sure he could complete. "It is time to feed!""You must drink human blood within 24 hours""Your HP will continue to decrease until the task has been completed"

352 pages, Kindle Edition

Published October 4, 2021

Reviews

[Kenneth R. Waldron · Rating 4 out of 5]

The story is Awesome

There is still a lot of room for improvement, especially on spelling and grammar. I still really love the characters and story, though.

[Jean Wakefield · Rating 3 out of 5]

I would like to give it a higher rating but there are quite a few typos and grammatical errors. I guessed that English isn't the Author's first language and I was right. The story is engaging and could also use some editing along with some proofreading. The chapters are in varying lengths. It gets to be quite expensive at $8.99 -$9.99 for each book.
The vampire stuff doesn't bother be as much as the insane bullying by students and the discarding of people deemed expendable by those in decision making positions. Life is hard in this world but who needs the Dalki when the humans are abusing each other in such a manner? What is really interesting are the friendships forged with the main character, Quinn Talen. So far, his inner circle has shared terrible secrets about themselves yet they remain loyal and true to each other, at least so far.

[Steven · Rating 3 out of 5]

Really like the story

My only complaints about this series are the poor editing, short entries, and premium price. In some instances of less than 200 pages, 9.99 is steep. Especially considering a lack of cleaning up the typos and misspellings. Great story, but losing interest 9,99 at a time. Get yourself a couple proofreaders and take your books up a notch! You’ve got the steak and potatoes, just add a nice presentation to finish it.

[J · Rating 5 out of 5]

Good stuff keeps on coming

I have
thoroughly enjoyed this series. The character of Fex is a great foil to Quinn. The interactions between them is great and leaves both with much to think on. Plot is developing well. I am pleasantly surprised it has not hit a hole