Thank you to Hodder & Stoughton for an e-ARC of this book in exchange for an honest review!
I received this arc on the third of December...and I'm only reading it now. I am truly awful but I thank Hodder & Stoughton for still giving me arc's!
I was truly hoping to love this as it has vampires, sapphics and murder mystery. However, it failed me in every way possible. The book is set in the present day of our world which made it easy to follow but this also made it seem that Sterling thought they could get away with doing the most shallow world-building. The paranormal aspect of this book does not hold up well as it is very poorly explained. There are terms used like 'The Veil' and 'Shepherding' etc., which Sterling choose to give little insight into as it appears they didn't understand how it fully worked either. 'The Veil' is the worst explained part of the book, which is disappointing since it is also one of the most prominent parts. It is supposed to be a government of vampires who set laws and control the paranormal but the book explores and explains little of it, so they have no real authority that the characters say they have. The two head vampires Luca Tagliaferro and Henri Guillebeaux are mentioned a lot but we meet one of them (Henri, if I recall) for all of one or two pages. This made the motivations of Claire, Delilah, Wyn and Elise very weak and vague as there was no tension. Furthermore, Sterling tried to expand on their already weak world by mentioning multiple bloodlines - most of which had no relevance to the plot, and therefore was useless. There were other paranormal and fantastical characters mentioned like witches and faeries but they also had no relevance or deep explanation. It's clear that the world falls apart pretty quickly due to the lack of substance and facts.
Stemming from this is the writing itself. This book is clearly written for a younger YA audience in mind - so, not me - which meant that many elements were written to be overdramatic which made the characters feel silly and incapable of handling things with maturity or individually. Characters got emotionally hurt without actually doing any thinking to understand the bare bones of a situation, so I found myself frequently annoyed with them. I also believe that the book would've suited a third-person narration instead of a first-person narration because the characters' thoughts felt useless to the main story, and it often made it feel like I was being told something instead of having it shown.
Speaking of the characters, the protagonists, Claire and Elise, are said to have a F/F romance but I felt that it was the plot with the least weight to it (it really on takes effect in the last 15%). Sterling forces you to believe the characters have a romantic interest in each other, even though it's barely shown or hinted at in the majority of the book. This made the romance incredibly unbelievable and unnecessary. The extent of the romantic feelings is a kiss-of-convenience for plot purposes, and Claire's insta-love obsession with Elise and her "ocean eyes" (a phrase which was used one too many times). Going back to the romance being unnecessary, the book would've been ten times better without it because it would've allowed Sterling to strengthen Elise's character development by working on her issues with her ex (related to the plot), and the death of her brother. A romantic interest was not what Elise needed. Therapy was!
As for the plot, you can tell that it was Twilight/New Moon inspired, except way more boring and repetitive. The plot consisted of the same beats: Elise performed a spell, a murder happened, and then a new character would be introduced. This made the foreshadowing painfully predictable and I was right about 95% of my guesses. I know I should've DNF'ed this book after saying that but it was a very easy read that required little brain power. This did allow me to skim-read at times, so I may have missed some information...but who am I kidding? All I would've missed is the characters inner monologue repeating itself. The climax of the book was perhaps the most annoying part. Just before it, there was a key scene that was entirely skipped because Sterling conveniently switched POVs at the last second to avoid doing any world-building. Think of the moment as a character gaining a new power...we totally missed out on it, and it was extremely necessary to see for the plot.
Lastly, the awful representation in this book has to be discussed. It is filled to the brim with forced representation. Each time a new character was acknowledged, their name would be followed by their ethnicity and a vague (repetitive) description of their physical appearance would be given. When we first met Elise's best friend, Maggie, her name was followed by "a Korean American." Who's first thought about their best friend is their ethnicity? It was super uncomfortable to read. A similar issue occurred with gender. Through Claire's vampire powers (probably unexplained as I don't recall an explanation) she was able to determine someone's gender? And virtually every time they would be genderqueer...it's as though Sterling didn't know of any other genders.
This book was not good, and I am glad I read it so I can prevent others from wasting their time.