Erynn Lehtonen is a young Canadian writer. She shows an interest in Japanese culture and aims to represent mental illness in her writing. She is also currently studying creative writing. Her first (partial) novel is Ramshackled, part one of four novels which are supposed to form a complete story.
I chose to receive this book for free and give my honest review, which follows.
*Summary recommendation: read the book and be ready to read the following parts. The book promises much, and if it delivers in the latter parts it will be worth reading the beginning. *
Ramshackled takes place in an alternative Japanese world where magic is possible, and fighting is held high. Twin brothers are destined to not become great warriors as their family, having a well-known warrior tradition, has taken a different path and would not allow either to fight. Each brother has his own strengths, as one has magic powers and the other is a born engineer. Both have a possible career path, and neither is convinced it is what they really want. Thus, they train in secret with the daughter of the Shogun, aiming to learn what they are forbidden at home. As they are having a training session, a small town under the protection of the princess is attacked by a creature with magic powers which do not seem quite right. The creature kidnaps a woman in front of the princess and the two brothers and disappears.
A promising premise for a young adult fantasy. Further in the plot the idea of representing mental illness is lightly brushed with the sudden and unexpected disorder that the princess appears to have always had, but I presume this would be developed in the following parts of the book. As it is, only a promise has been made.
The idea of a world turned upside-down, where a family with centuries old tradition of martial arts, with katana’s going down from generation to generation, in a Japanese setting, an unheard-of situation, is to say the least fascinating. The execution of this promise is as lacking as that of the story, as no explanation is given of why the family would stop training their heirs in the art of fighting, and no foreshadowing as to a coming explanation in the future parts. Fighting is “taboo”, but at the same time expected of future employees in the palace.
Other problems with the logic of the book are also present. Why do a couple of fifteen-year-olds have to do everything on their own, including waking over the princess’ health when she has hopefully at least a number of capable people in her employ? Why do some of these people have no idea how they should communicate with the princess (most notably, the captain of the guard)? How can one of the brothers suddenly do advanced lost magic by reading a book for a couple of minutes, while this magic has been lost to all, including the teachers in the Academy? And still not “meet the princess’ expectations”? And finally, when the brothers get the opportunity to achieve their dreams, they have to think about it, because they dream of travelling, while this opportunity would set them back just a year… Even fifteen-year-olds should not think like this.
The writing itself also requires work. Often too much information is given where not necessary (explaining the benefits of education for example…), while too little is given when needed (why was the guard so reluctant to appear? The reader asks this question far before any of the characters does; some foreshadowing would have cleared this discrepancy).
Furthermore, new words are introduced without referral to the glossary in the end, which is often annoying, especially when multiple words happen to reside in the same sentence. Footnotes would be quite welcome here.
My conclusion is that this book requires more work, as the promise which it makes is not at all fulfilled. Still, that promise is so big, that I am inclined to allow for the author’s inexperience and give it a second chance. I hope to be pleasantly surprised, and I hope the author delivers.