Oh, man. I have been trying to get to this book for a while, to fit it into different reading challenge categories, but it was always checked out. I'm failing at finishing a March challenge to "Read a book made popular by BookTok." I lurk on TikTok but I never really got into BookTok-- all previous Book[social media] leans heavily on aesthetics, and it hasn't been for me. I've scoured BookTok title lists and have very little interest in most of the titles. But I had stumbled on this author on TikTok quite a while ago, and I purchased this eBook back when I was helping out with YA eBooks ordering, so I thought I could make it fit the category.
I read exactly one chapter, and I can't got on. I was willing to make a fair number of concessions for a YA fairytale retelling, but I wasn't prepared for what is, frankly, a painful reading experience that should have been caught almost entirely in editing. The narration is a little stilted, not too bad, but the writing is full of errors. There are a lot of fragments, but they don't match up to speech patterns, so they don't make a lot of sense. There's about a 50/50 chance that any non-period punctuation mark is used incorrectly, and quite a few commas are missing. I don't want to use grammar and punctuation as gatekeeping-- if you're consistent in how you use them, I can get behind that-- but I rely really heavily on standard conventions for wayfinding because of dyslexia, and scattershot punctuation isn't accessible. There are many things you can measure with your heart, but semicolons isn't one of them.
Also within the first chapter, there were two occasions in which the narration said one thing and the dialogue in the very next line blatantly and completely contradicted it. I don't have the patience for this. And I'm sorry, because I really like the author as a person! I hope she never reads this-- but that her editing team does.