As a person interested in middle grade xenofiction, I was very excited to see a story like Deadlands when it popped up on the shelf of my local bookstore. Just by the awesome cover design alone, I could tell this was a story of epic mythic xenofiction, my absolute favorite genre. And reading the summary on the book flap just cinched it for me.
This genre thrives on its ability to create a rich and believable world through detailed characters and devoted world building, similar to Wings of Fire or the Warriors series. And since the story is set in the time of dinosaurs, the author had a grand opportunity to create a fantasy world with almost limitless potential!
Although in the end I had some issues with the world building, I found myself fully invested in the story and eager for the next volume in the series by the time I was done. The characters here are likeable and full of fun, while still keeping the threat and looming danger due to its intense storyline.
My favorite character was Sorielle, and I hope we get to see more of her in the future. I love upbeat characters who smile in the face of danger. Of course I also loved Tortha, and I think she's going to be a fan favorite.
My first and biggest issue with the book was something the author had no control over. The book BADLY needed illustrations. Even Wings of Fire gave us visuals of the different dragon species in the beginning of each book. Why didn't we get those for here? Sure every kid (and adult) knows what a triceratops looks like, but what about oryctodromeus? What about stegoceras? It's not really very fun when you have to whip out your phone and google dinosaurs names at the start of a book just so you have some sort of visual aid to help you while you're reading.
Unfortunately the second issue I had with the book was definitely on the author. WHAT COLOR ARE THESE DINOSAURS? I know, I know, this seems silly, but part of the wonder of being a dinosaur fan is that they can have fantastical designs and appearances! We have to create how they look in our imaginations in order to see the story unfold. But we need something to work with.
Throughout this entire book there are only two visual descriptors used for our characters. One, Eleri's feathers are described as being sapphire. Okay, fine. I'd like to be able to visualize him a bit more, but I'll take it. At least it's something. And two, the triceratops has one very cool scene where her frill is described as darkening to a reddish color as she goes into battle, as a threat display. Okay that is COOL but what color was she before? What color is Sorielle? Does Lerithon have any markings? Are all of Eleri's kind blue-feathered or is there some variety? What about the carnivores, what do they look like? It's fine to say a giant T-Rex attacked our heroes, and you can describe her giant head and massive size, but if you don't paint us more of a visual picture, our ability to enjoy the story is going to suffer.
Personally, my ability to enjoy the story also suffered from a particular aspect (or lack thereof) of the world building. There were several times in the story where the author seemed to use human terms and concepts that don't make any sense for dinosaurs long ago to use. For example, the book would describe an opponent as being thirty feet away. Well, whose feet? Human feet? Or do the dinosaurs use a particular species' footprint to measure distance? Thirty T-Rex feet away is very different than thirty raptor feet away! Ha!
What about time? The book uses both "weeks" and "months" and I don't know why these dinosaurs conveniently use human methods of measuring the passage of time. For that matter, the dinosaurs refer to themselves by their (human designated) scientific names? What, did dinosaurs invent Latin and Greek now? lol. Even though some might have accused this story of ripping off Land Before Time, I would have much preferred made-up names for each species, and to use that consistently throughout the story. The most confounding thing is, the author almost does! Each dinosaur species has a different name in the "Old Tongue," such as earthsinger or windwhisper, which the book sometimes randomly switches to. We'll be referring to Tortha as a triceratops for pages and pages, and then suddenly a character will throw in the name "moonchaser," which is apparently what triceratops were called long ago before they decided to change the name. What?! How does that make any sense! Why would the dinosaurs all change how they referred to each other? Why didn't we just stick with the "Old Tongue" for the whole story?
I know it sounds like I'm nitpicking here, but these small details are really integral to a good xenofiction story. Each time my brain got tripped up on these little references, it brought me right out of the story and I had to shake it off before I could go back into it. The best of the xenofiction genre always takes this into consideration, whether it be the cats of the Warriors books having their own names for the seasons, to the Wings of Fire dragons inventing their own method of recording information (scrolls rather than books) and describing distance as being winglengths away.
I would give Deadlands 5 stars for characters and story, but 3 stars for world building. The author needed to work a little more on creating this world and how it works. How do the dinosaurs measure distance? What about time? How do they refer to each other? It's all so important to creating a believable world. But I'm still very excited to see what's going to happen next.