Love the cover!
The book itself is okay if you don’t mind the second love niche + kids + slow, angsty revolving emo door niches.
Writing
🌦While the writing isn’t technically correct, it’s stylized to be snappy. Half sentences galore. One word expounds. There’s a lyrical feel to it that’s somewhat akin to pop song lyrics. Example:
Shield my heart from the call that screamed every bit as loud as the sirens that had blared through the building. As loud as the instinct that told me I had to go. That I could never stay. That for me, there was no such thing as home. But my spirit? It thrashed. A riot that gripped my insides. It ravaged the hollow space that could never be filled. “Go,” I whimpered, to him, to myself, to this feeling that welled up. But it only grew. Clouding judgement. Obliterating reason.
☔️Sometimes, it gets a little too frufru. Sometimes, the author is just doing too much…
She was reminded of it when Darius shot her another glare from across the throbbing room where…
^ The “throbbing” room. That’s a first for me 🤷♀️🤦♀️😳
☀️I liked that the flashbacks were in third person and the present tense was first person … I haven’t seen that done before, and I think it really set off the here vs then moods. That said, these could’ve, should’ve been much shorter and to the point. A good bit of it didn’t add anything to character development nor plot understanding.
⛈The meet in chapters one and two gets a little repetitive in thought. You have a line of dialogue followed by the shock, awe, lust, and denial. Another line of dialogue followed by the same thoughts. And so on and so on. He’s the shiznet, but you don’t know him…you’re attracted to him, but you won’t act on it. <—- Got it without that on repeat between each dialogue. Same with him… she’s bewitching, but she’s afraid, which means she’s a no-go. Got it without thinking it 3,000 times.
By the end, the whole black magic shit was just tiresome. Having the same thought, line over and over (21 times) isn’t entertaining nor developing.
Moving ON…
🌟 I think chapter three was my fav part. Cute. *Smirks* I wish all the chapters had this cute snappy flow to them.
🌊Something about his mantra … I have you, Salem. is very swoony. Repetitive… yes, but at least it’s kind of romantic. Simple, but it just conveys everything. Same with “Run to me,” .. it’s simple, yet, I feel the truth and emotion behind it.
🌬By the 30-40% mark, we are still on the repeat of ‘want you, but can’t have you/don’t deserve you.’ <—— That’s getting extremely stale.
Laced in is the suspense of why he thinks he’s such a bad guy -and- why the FMC spent four years running from something/someone. It’s basically a shitload of emo baggage, and it’s written okay - little pieces here and there.
The characters are just okay. They’re not annoying. They’re respectable. They have okay chemistry. But the characters seemed to be defined by events, not actual thought and feeling progression~
SPOILER…
At 45%, the curtain is starting to be pulled back on his past. ⚠️Spoiler⚠️- you learn he was/is madly in love with the mother of his child, who was also his wife. He grew up in a criminal element and tried to change his life for her. He slipped up and confessed to it, which caused her to run with their child. As he tells that to the FMC, it’s clear that a large part of his hesitation to move past friends (with or without benefits) is that he is waiting and hoping for his wife and child to return. Eek… second round love isn’t my jam.
HALFWAY into the book, I don’t want to read about a long lost OW love. It destroyed my enjoyment of this book, and this should have been labeled and/or blurbed as a “second love” so that readers like myself could avoid it. I hate wondering who was the greater love. I hate wondering if this is just his hero complex to make up for the past or if the connection is real.
Slowly, the OW thing just kinda fades into his mental background, making the OW and his child an almost forgotten thought. It came off like a replacement insta family. Didn’t like how that entire plot played out.
Same with the son… sure the twist was well done in that all the pieces made sense, but I just didn’t care for how it was all portrayed.
⚠️End SPOILER⚠️
By 70%, I’ve become bored. Emo is progressing to slow and steady acceptance that they’re more than friends 🙄 well duh~
50-70% also has a lot of kid scene times. It became a little too 🧀 for me. I mean… there’s 18 pages devoted to the FMC’s daughter getting a bike and racing with the MMC’s nephew. <——Overwriting, fluffy, boring.
The end is rather lackluster. There are a couple of surprises, but the climax is over just as fast as it begun. The Kye wrap up was also very ehhh, mehhh … afterthought.
OVERALL
I would NOT have started this had I known it was second-love.
MC angst via emo baggage. Slow burn.
Author makes twists believable, even if not likable.
Repetitive thoughts.
Heavily focused on kids. Too much for my taste.
End felt rushed and wasn’t emotionally moving.
Insta family felt like a substitute HEA, and I didn’t like how this part of the storyline progressed and ended.
Everything is a little too easy.
2.5 stars for the creativity. This isn’t a “bad” book, but it wasn’t a good book for me personally.