Ok. How do I articulate this. You know how in a romcom movie, there’s an obvious visual/tonal/aesthetic/stylistic difference between the central, linear narrative and random interjected montages?
The central narrative is clear, includes exposition, establishes setting and relationship dynamics, introduces plot details, etc.
Montages, on the other hand, are there to communicate a VIBE, not clear information. Halfway through the movie, we may see a montage of the main couple— going to a coffee shop, laughing while they struggle to give their giant dog a bath, baking at home and making a huge mess with flour, holding hands in the car, etc.— to communicate that time is passing and they’re getting closer and falling in love. You feel me, right? We can all picture the difference. So—
This entire book reads like a romanticized, fragmented, flashback montage. The ENTIRE 476 PAGE BOOK. Non-stop, from beginning to end— the story is told in ‘movie montage’ format.
It's written in fragments— there’s no underlying, established, clear timeline to provide a structured foundation for the narrative. And you really feel it. It’s a lot of jumping from moment to moment, a little anecdote here, a little anecdote there.
There are Inception-level flashbacks within flashbacks within flashbacks. And we’re not even flashing back in time! It’s a lateral time jump!!!!! We’ll be mid-conversation, then ABRUPTLY jump to something that happened yesterday, THEN JUMP TO ANOTHER THING THAT HAPPENED LAST WEEK, only to circle back and be DROPPED back IN TO THE MIDDLE of the first conversation. And at that point, you’re sitting there like what the fuck just happened? Was she remembering those moments? Are we, the reader, just being shown those moments?
I get it. I’m not missing the point or missing the author’s creative choice. I think it’s a cool approach! But the execution needs to be a lot cleaner.
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CM Nascosta seems like a total vibes and details person— she’s so good at including these small moments that really make the story personal and resonant. We’re all better at some things than at others. I think this needed a very structured brain to edit down the book and help CMN’s vision really shine.
The plot is not complex at all, but you feel like you’re in a fucking labyrinth because of how it’s organized. I really like what I’m reading— it’s just so unstructured that you’re never really rooted in the story. You’re just floating on top.