It had some enjoyable moments in it. I think I craved Francisco to lean into some of these emotions a little more. Explore the feeling deeper. Some of the poems felt fortune cookie-esque and I was hoping for a bit more impact. I think it was well written overall, but it didn’t hit me like I wanted it to.
“this world is fast paced
appreciate the ones who
slow down to notice you”
It’s a nice sentiment but I feel like it can get explored more. This is something that’s been conveyed a lot. It needs a fresh take or deeper insight.
“i miss everything that once burned inside of me”
I can relate. But I also want you to expand on that. Make me ache for the fire I once had. Make me crave the soul engulfed in flames of passion.
Overall, it was good. Thank you, Francisco.