I should’ve known this book wasn’t going to be good when the author’s note was in an illegible script. Like a subconscious tell, it was a warning that this book is pretty contrived and incoherent too.
To start with, I’m thankful I read another book in this series (by another author) before returning to this one, otherwise I might never have read any of it. Thanks to that book alone, I feel obligated to finish this one, although I first started to find it unbearable at about 40% of the way through.
The major point of contention in the first 40% of the book is that the FMC has a secret. However, her feelings are so fleeting and insubstantial that no real connection is felt- between other characters or me as a reader. It’s… brave to not put any relationship building at all in this first section of book. If you’re just going to have one point of contention then you need to make it good and ham it up.
I say that because in the VERY next section of book, after deciding that she needs to be honest with them, the FMC was saying she was falling for them with barely spending any time with them 1-on-1. Like literally, maybe three waking hours.
When the MMC is honest with her about some of the pack’s past after dragging her out of bed in the middle of the night, she thinks about how she hasn’t made a decision to tell them (even though she just had). It’s unclear and annoying to read characters like this.
When the rest of the pack finds the FMC and one of the MMC after they have some alone time, and one of the other MMC gets jealous, she decides to fix the packs issues with more betrayal and group sex- and it’s not even clear what’s going on at first.
The FMC says “maybe it’s too fast” in her inner monologue, and I just had to snort. Maybe it’s fast? It certainly is for someone who’s spent a total of five waking hours at this point with these men. It’s like the writer was trying to write some resolution into this book through their sex- when literally nothing had been resolved, things were actually worse because of it. And it’s not even sexy.
The FMC implies that the MMC who dragged her out of bed knows more about her than he literally asked her about, and at this point I’m eye-rolling. This is supposed to be someone who has suffered a trauma yet she’s acting like she’s twelve.
Plus, if I hadn’t read a spoiler review about one of the MMC, his turn in the group scene would have been utterly confusing. You can hide a secret and not make it difficult to read.
Alas, the entire group scene was a clusterfuck. It was So unclear. Four male main characters and at the best we got a “he” in reference to one of them.
Plus, we’re switching POVs here, and in most of them so far at the group scene, they’ve been useless as there’s been only vague allusions to history and no relationship building between characters. But suddenly we flip to one of the MMC and he says he’s in love with her. When? And then, comparing her to Bokerah saying the FMC opened her heart to them, when she literally has been closed off to the point it has been making them jealous of each other? Make it make sense.
The author claims one of the MMC detached interest is coming across as confidence. Pfft. Yeah right. Plus, how is that romantic?
The part where the pack splits was literally just written to piss you off. It completely ejects you from the story.
As far as characterization and progression of it, there’s not much to tell. This may be an unpopular opinion but if you write a funny character, then they actually need to be funny. The FMC is a literal doormat; she thinks of herself as resourceful when she’s anything but.
The last half of the book where things should be resolved was so random and forced, I don’t know what to say. And again, there was no actual resolution between one of the MMC and the FMC. Just sex.
The author wrote this as the MMC accepting the FMC terms as if it was purely society that was in the wrong for its treatment of omegas, putting the onus of blame on society entirely. They didn’t once think about the fact that biologically she had little choice. Which paints them as hypocrites considering the first time we met the pack leader.
Speaking of which, why would we want to read about him and another female as an introduction to him if he wasn’t going to learn from his mistake? Or maybe even a… oh well I did this the night we met so when I didn’t even know her and she was with someone it’s okay. Literally disgusting, and pushes you right out of the “story”. I should’ve stopped reading right then.
This was not a good introduction for this series and I would suggest to anyone wanting to read this books to skip the first one entirely.