There were so many discrepancies that I DNF'd at 40%. I liked the premise and who the characters were supposed to be in the blurb. But this needed an editor or someone who isn't a "yes" man to tell the author parts didn't match up.
It started in the second chapter, when Scarlett, our FMC, was introduced. She's at the pub where she is a waitress, is told that she will probably need to work late because a big party is coming. No big deal, she just needs to let her grandmother, who is also the babysitter for her 5 year old son, know that she will be late. So she says "lemme call her". Some inner dialogue happens where we are clued into her background and such, then she says "lemme read her response". Huh? How do you read responses to phone calls? Okay, I thought to myself, its just a little thing that slipped through the cracks of all of the people reading it before it was published.
But then there is her background. She is currently 32. She left college when she got pregnant by her now ex husband, they divorced 2 years later and she moved in with her grandmother since he signed away his rights to their son and would no longer be a source of support. People are typically in college between 18 and 22, or somewhere in that range. She said she is going for her MBA, which typically takes 2 years if you are on campus, like she seemed to be. She said she had taken a 6 year break, but that she was finally closer to getting it. Matty, her son, is 5. So a lot of this math doesn't add up. The 6 year break adds up with Matty's age, but when she said she was 32 and had to leave college because she was pregnant, I was expecting him to to be like 9 or 10 at the youngest. So she left college at 26? When she was already a grown adult who would be getting married and having kids at that age and could have kept going to school since it seems like getting her MBA would be just to pad her resume since she already finished college since she was 26? I kinda hope this was explained later in the story since the math don't math with the little info already given.
Then there was Matty, who sounds very cute and precocious like a 5 year old should be, but he is for some reason given a lisp, which is fine, but his lisp was so inconsistent why even add it in?
The final straws for me were after the characters had already met, found the other one attractive and had chemistry. But he kept wondering where Matty's dad was and I don't recall ever seeing that explained to him on page. So I'll cut it to the day after they met, and he gave her rides since her car broke down before she took her son to school and neither is mechanically inclined. So he dropped her off for her 5 hour shift. The chapter starts when she's 2 hours into it, meaing she had 3 hours left. He comes in for some dinner and suddenly she has 90 minutes left. So a short, 3 minute conversation with a coworker magically took 90 minutes?
I know it sounds like I'm being picky, and maybe I am, but I am willing to suspend reality for a lot of scenarios, but not when things are literally not adding up, I just can't. All it would have taken is someone telling the author, hey why isn't Matty constantly lisping over the 's' sound? Why is she calling one second then talking about getting a text the next? Why does her age not add up to make sense out of the details given? But nobody did.